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Hell Keeper

Dressed as the hell keeper, trick upon the sleeper, as stars fade and shiver, dazed skies roar and quiver.

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Tonye George

Date: 12/12/2023 6:54:00 AM

It's good to sleep with one eye open so you don't fall for the trick of a hell keeper. I love the villain feel.

Mat Ignacio

Date: 11/2/2023 8:39:00 AM

glad i came across this -

Bill Baker

Date: 10/28/2023 11:45:00 AM

Devilish vibes come screaming through in this Alexandrine, Ink. I'm sure it did well in the contest. You once mentioned in a common, what I might fear? Running into the Hell Keeper on Halloween. Have a great weekend. Bill

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/18/2023 1:18:00 PM

A dark and mysterious vibe, just perfect for the Halloween-spirit. Although I shall say nothing about the alexandrine, It's not my place. Check Suzettes new blog on it. You've sent a chill down myne spine! What are you dressing up as mi carida? My niece just texted me her in costume, the 20's theme or disco dollies ha! They went to a mascaraed party, she's cute, Valerie. Bet it's just one of many costumes she'll wear. :D I posted mine on bio-LOL

I Am Anaya
Date: 10/19/2023 9:28:00 AM

Omy gosh, thank you. I used to have the double headed winged axe she uses. Her story is a good one, she started out as Hope, and she only kills bad men! lol

Ink Empress
Date: 10/19/2023 12:29:00 AM

Wowow you look absolutely stunning in your pictures! So gorgeous! I love your hair and choker and your make up! So pretty! Now i am inspired to dress as that. Haha awwn your niece sounds lovely. Thank you for sharing and for your visit and for showing me your outfit too! You are truly a beautiful soul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2023 12:39:00 PM

love how you did yours. I guess if I did mine more that way, it would still be enjambment. I wonder if it's too late to rethink mine.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/19/2023 12:30:00 AM

Awwn yours look perfect too now. Ah thank you so muchhhh

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/17/2023 5:04:00 PM

'Tis the season for tricks and treats, and you've given us an early Halloween treat with this poem... Very well written :)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:36:00 AM

Awwn thank you so much truly

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/17/2023 5:40:00 AM

Beautiful and dark writing, Ink:)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:36:00 AM

Thank you sweet soul always for your support

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/17/2023 1:32:00 AM

Woah, a very beguiling and dark atmosphere you've created with your words here! An impeccable Alexandrine poem this is and I am in awe how flawlessly you've incorporated your thoughts in this form, with such a wonderful flow.. The rhymes are really captivating and your imagery.. Ahh, as always it's so profound and deep.. "Dressed as the hell keeper" That itself is an intriguing start & so evocative as well! "Light stars fade and shiver" Oh my, that's soul stirring! "Dazed skies roar and quiver"

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:33:00 AM

Awwn thank you so much sweet angelic star always grateful for your support

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 1:33:00 AM

The wordplay is very creative and these two lines really pull my heartstrings, because they reflect poignant depth.. Of dark emotions.. Best of luck for the contest, I love it :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/16/2023 6:51:00 PM

A beautiful poem.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:32:00 AM

Thank you so much

Paige Hind

Date: 10/16/2023 3:30:00 PM

Very beautiful...the rhyme is magic. I love the last line.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:32:00 AM

Awwn u are so sweet kind soul, i appreciate you

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/16/2023 1:28:00 PM

a captivating poem, dear Ink. I love the image of the 'hell keeper'--it conjures up a foreboding tone from the start...and the last five words said it all..."dazed skies roar and quiver." Well done. You continue to awe me with the variety with which you can express such significant events, emotions, etc. Enjoy your Monday, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:25:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your kind and generous support always

Silent One

Date: 10/16/2023 12:13:00 PM

This one is really dark and you described a lot in two lines.. nice one.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:18:00 AM

Thank you so much I tried

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2023 10:20:00 AM

gosh, is this the challenge? Only two lines. Now I really need to study up on this challenge. Wonderful example of it, Ink Empress. Thanks for your wonderful comments to my recent poetry

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:14:00 AM

Thank you so much for your sweet visit kind soul always grateful for your support

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/16/2023 10:15:00 AM

A cute story told in a few words. Have a blessed day writing away.....................

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:12:00 AM

Thank you dear Paula i appreciate your visit and support always

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 10/16/2023 8:17:00 AM

I would have quivered too, you know. Lovely write. Blessings.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:10:00 AM

Hah thank you so much Victor

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/16/2023 8:02:00 AM

Creative rendering in splendid rhymes and wordplay. You aced it, Ink.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:08:00 AM

Thank you always dear Vijay, grateful for your support

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/16/2023 7:45:00 AM

Dear Ink, beautiful writing. In a mysterious Halloween outfit, the hell warden is ready to trick unsuspecting sleepers. As night fell, the glittering stars dimmed and shook. The confused sky appeared disoriented, as if in puzzlement, and sent forth a reverberating roar that was frightening. Well done, blessings

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:08:00 AM

Thank you so very much Dear Sotto, for your kind thoughts and for your support, truly grateful always

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/16/2023 7:23:00 AM

Interesting Halloween costume(I guess) or it might be Satan of whom you are speaking. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page with congrats. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:06:00 AM

Haha yes demon. Thank you so much for reading and for your feedback.

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/16/2023 7:10:00 AM

Enjoyed. All the best for contest.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:04:00 AM

Thank you so much always

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 10/16/2023 6:41:00 AM

Oooo look at u flowwwwwwwww papi!!! Mm and those rhymes just pure fire!!!! Love the ending ..Light stars fade and shiver, dazed skies roar and quiver. gorgeous piece

Karen Jones

Date: 10/16/2023 6:15:00 AM

I love the melodic verses you wrote here!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:03:00 AM

Thank you as always dear Karen

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/16/2023 6:06:00 AM

Spooky one. God bless you, love, Gina

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:02:00 AM

Thank you always kind Gina, appreciate your support truly