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A Promise I Can'T Keep

The sun was setting with a breeze Seductively sliding behind the trees Watching his descent Was quite the event I witnessed a day to night striptease He left me with the biggest grin I must admit with some chagrin Watching as he changed Glances were exchanged I didn't mean to embarrass him I just kept looking straight ahead The entire horizon turned bright red Tomorrow at sunrise I'll apologize Promising next time to turn my head Daniel Turner

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/14/2024 6:14:00 PM

This is so cute! A striptease, eh? Well... what do you know... who can view a sunset the same ever again? Good one.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 11/7/2023 8:12:00 AM

Such a clever turn of phrase, Daniel The horizon blushing with embarrassment. I’ll never look at sunset in quite the same way….LOL SuZ

Anne E Sangster - K

Date: 10/1/2023 6:01:00 AM

Thanks for the smile today Daniel. This was an enjoyable and witty read for me this morning. Love it! :-)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/9/2023 3:35:00 AM

Heheheh..Witty and funny limerick,just the way I like it.

Daniel Turner
Date: 9/9/2023 8:31:00 AM

Thank you, Charmaine. Im glad I made you smile:) Very busy these days. Sorry I can't respond longer. Take care! Great to see you again. I hope all is well with you and yours.

Judy Ball

Date: 7/25/2023 3:58:00 AM

Cute Limerick Daniel. Sometimes you run across someone at an inopportune time and both are a little embarrassed. Nice job. God Bless, JB

Eileen Clark

Date: 6/9/2023 1:22:00 PM

Hi, this is so cute and cool, I love it and will most likely think of it every time I watch the sun setting, thank you. :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 5/29/2023 10:04:00 AM

A very creative limerick, Daniel... and quite beautiful actually :)

Ann Peck

Date: 5/27/2023 6:15:00 PM

This is so clever, Daniel! I'll be seeing the Sun in a different light :)

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 5/25/2023 8:04:00 PM

And the sky in embarrassment turned a bright shade of red ;) Very funny Daniel!

Bill Baker

Date: 5/20/2023 1:40:00 PM

Triple Limerick, I'm impressed! A fun read and written with just the right amount of tastefulness, Daniel. Nice for a Limerick! Have a great weekend, my friend. Bill

Len Gasun

Date: 5/14/2023 5:08:00 PM

Ha ha ha..splendid and delightful limericks my dear poet friend Daniel. Gave me morning smiles. I enjoyed them a lot. Thank you so much for sharing. God bless you always and your golden pen. Hugs

Tonye George

Date: 5/9/2023 4:33:00 PM

Lol. Nice. Made me smile. Make sure she turns her head next time Daniel.

Daniel Turner
Date: 5/9/2023 7:11:00 PM

Thank you, Tonye. Making you smile is reward enough. great to look up and see a new face. I appreciate your support. Have a wonderful evening:)

Jcb Brul

Date: 5/8/2023 3:30:00 AM

Humour-filled limerick with spectacular imagery!

Daniel Turner
Date: 5/9/2023 7:09:00 PM

Thank you sir. Glad you enjoyed it. Great to see you. I appreciate your kindness and support.

Charles Messina

Date: 5/2/2023 5:39:00 AM

LOL...great limerick, Daniel. I'll second what Jan said... "Great ending"

Daniel Turner
Date: 5/2/2023 8:10:00 AM

LOL Hello Charlie. Glad you liked the limerick. Great to see you again. Did you manage to quit? I was doing good but I relapsed. I have started over and am now day 3. Thank you for dropping by and for your support.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/30/2023 11:59:00 AM

Oh Daniel I love the twist at the end of the poem i wasn't expecting the sunny ending lol, fabulous humour:-) hugs jan xx

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/30/2023 1:31:00 PM

Hello Jan:) Thank you. Great to see you again. I hope life has been treating you well:)

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/29/2023 10:51:00 AM

I have looked through all your poems twice but no poem Title, Sunrise’, could I see? Was it censored? Lol SuZ

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/29/2023 10:55:00 AM

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Paul Callus

Date: 4/28/2023 7:00:00 AM

I have no doubt about the title, Danny! Why not watch two striptease shows for the price of one :) Thank you for putting a big smile on my face :) Best regards // paul

Sand Blown

Date: 4/27/2023 1:44:00 PM

...a light comment.....a 'nature-all' poem be as two 'natural-eyes' seeing all as.... 'nature-alley'.....stan

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/27/2023 9:46:00 PM

Thank you, sir. I appreciate you dropping by to read and comment. Have a fine evening:)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/25/2023 8:39:00 AM

A creative/fun Limerick writer. Thanks for the smile. Have a great/blessed day..................

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/25/2023 8:46:00 AM

Thank you, Paula for leaving a smile:) Have a blessed day:)

Brandy Nicole

Date: 4/23/2023 5:25:00 PM

Even though I know this was about the sun giving you a striptease, I'm turning bright red. (I'm smiling and blushing, all at the same time). Such a fun limerick. A bit naughty, but hey, it's written in a tasteful way. I love everything about this. My best to you, Daniel. :) Hugs, Brandy

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/23/2023 5:29:00 PM

Thank you, Brandy. LOL I tried to keep it clean. Limericks are usually a bit bawdy. You look like you haven't aged a day:) Great to see you. I appreciate your support.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/23/2023 8:16:00 AM

hahaha. SO clever, Danny!!!

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/23/2023 8:24:00 AM

Thanks sweetie:) Glad I made you smile. have a super Sunday!

Arlo Parker

Date: 4/22/2023 9:00:00 PM

A delight, DT. Very clever. ~;o)

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/23/2023 5:55:00 AM

Thanks . AP. Hope you smiled:)

Valsa George

Date: 4/22/2023 8:15:00 PM

Why did you watch the sun striptease, making him embarrassed and letting him turn red? Next time when he does so, please turn your head away. Quite a hilarious limerick, Daniel

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/23/2023 5:50:00 AM

Thank you, Valsa. It just seemed like the thing to do:) Always good to see you. I appreciate your kindness and your support:)

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/22/2023 2:57:00 PM

Daniel…I think the shots are playing tricks with your eyes LOL. Enjoyed your unique slant on sunset….sunrise can be just as seductive. Hope all goes well with your appt. tomorrow. Take care, SuZ

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/22/2023 5:31:00 PM

Have you read my poem entitled, "Sunrise"? It is quite revealing:)

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/22/2023 3:16:00 PM

Thank you, Suz. You know, you might be right:) It might've all been in my head. LOL Have a super Sunday in sunny Florida.

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/22/2023 2:14:00 PM

If the sun strips, what tricks does the moon? Silly rabbit. A bawdy & sweet , a new experience for the limerick world. Who needs Potd, we're all here! You are very "fummy" Hope you are well, Danny.

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/22/2023 2:23:00 PM

I've seen the moon blush before but I won't tell you what I was doing when it did:) LOL Thanks for a fun and friendly visit, Anaya. I am well and thanks. I hope you are having a great weekend:)