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written for the nursery rhymes contest sponsored by Tom woody, i cant do whacky and funny writing so its a bit twisted and dark. 

Truth isn't always within the region of reason; it can flirt with the edges of insanity. Let's dive into the twisted reality of Humpty Dumpty. Its bitter smell will linger like rotten eggs in the night breeze. Once upon a time, when sunshine kissed the honeyed horizon, there existed a handsome knight. His eyes glistened like emeralds in the illuminating moonlight, and his hair was golden, like perfect strands of straw. The Queen, with her long ivory hair and sapphire eyes, became utterly infatuated by this mysterious man. With the King's duties keeping him away for long periods, the Queen grew very lonely. So with the King gone and as the last caws of the crows silenced, the Queen would invite Humpty Dumpty (originally known as Humble Harold Junior) to her chamber of lavish entertainment. There, he would tell her comical tales of the valley, make her laugh, and drink until the moon slipped below the white-tipped ocean. She longed for any form of kindness and warmth, and he, with his charming nature, knew how to make her feel cherished. But it wasn't long before the King found out about their scandalous escapades in graphic detail. You see, he never fully trusted his wife, so when he was gone for periods of time, he left behind sinister spies. And when he knew what went on in his absence, he was furious, with the wrathful rage of a thousand suns. So one day, the King summoned a wicked sorcerer to cast a spell upon Humpty Dumpty. He told the magician to take all his beauty away and turn him into a hideous clown. But the dark arts played their little games and turned him into an egg instead! Even though the Queen no longer recognized him, not a day went by when she didn't think of his kind soul. Whenever she saw his eyes, she felt his presence. The King wasn’t pleased with this—a narcissist's worst nightmare lay before him. So this time, he ordered the guards to build a wall, lure Humpty Dumpty to sit on it, and then push him to his doom, ensuring he would never see the light of dawn again. And he did not. He slowly cracked, leaving behind a puddle of rancid yolk. As he lay dying, he uttered his last breath, cursing the King and all of his servants to a nightmarish realm. As the light faded from his eyes, the yolk transformed into a devilish well, where the water turned blood red and screams of anguish could be heard. As time passed, his voice still lingered and echoed through the hallways, while his ghost continued to haunt the King, especially when the clouds were heavy and laden with ash, and the sky flowed with eclipsed beams. You can see his silhouette sitting on the cursed well. One by one, all the king’s horses and all the king’s men began to disappear. Nobody knows what happened to them, but you can still hear their screams reverberate through the night…

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Date: 7/28/2024 6:08:00 PM
Wow! Dearest poet friend Ink, this is extremely captivating and awesome story poem. You're both a very talented poetess and a story writter. I adore this story poem and enjoyed so much. Congratulations belatedly on your well-deserved trophy win! Thank you so much for sharing. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 7/26/2024 3:18:00 AM
What a dark tale! I love your twist on this nursery rhyme, Ink:)
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Date: 7/23/2024 10:20:00 PM
Dear Ink, you have created a fascinating, fun tale of Humpty Dumpty. Thank you for creating smiles that linger. Congratulations on your trophy win. Blessings.
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Date: 7/23/2024 5:36:00 PM
IE, you managed to write something incredible. This seems to me to be in the style of Edgar Allan Poe. It also gives a lot to think about. I'm not a fan of jealousy or envy, and this tale covers the consequences as a story we're all sure to remember....just in case our minds should take us in that direction. My mind working this imagines our politicians as figures in this story. BTW, you have me smiling again!!!
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Date: 7/23/2024 7:43:00 AM
Wow Sweet Ink ….you certainly can tell a good tale! A captivating write from start to end! Well done you! Debx
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Date: 7/22/2024 2:06:00 PM
Good gosh forgot to fave this one. Done!
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/23/2024 7:33:00 AM
Thats so kind of you thank you tomsz so much
Date: 7/21/2024 9:03:00 PM
Wow....You have taken the story of Humpty Dumpty to unimaginable heights. Thus you have proved your might as a story teller too. Romance outside wedlock is seen as a crime. Unfortunately here in the story, the accuser and the culprit and everyone related to them meet with a tragic end."As the light faded from his eyes, the yolk transformed into a devilish well, where the water turned blood red and screams of anguish could be heard." This really added a ghoulish dimension to the story. I am sure, this can be developed into a real horror movie. It has all the ingredients.... suspense, crime, romance, dark forces, witchcraft, punishment et al...Hearty Congratulations on your trophy win, dear gifted friend... !
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/23/2024 11:47:00 AM
You are too sweet sweet valsa thank you so very much
Date: 7/21/2024 9:16:00 AM
What a wonderful talent you are! You could write for movies and tv! What riches you would make Inky! Thank you for sharing it on soup and congratulations on your trophy win!
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:31:00 AM
Awwn you are too sweet really. This was just an idea that came to me while thinking of what to do as i cant be funny ahhah thank you sweet soul
Date: 7/21/2024 8:58:00 AM
Wow you did a ghost story out of it. Congrats on the trophy, Ink
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:31:00 AM
Thank you sweet andrea so much always
Date: 7/21/2024 7:54:00 AM
This was wonderful! Creative and intriguing story! Congratulations! Xoxo
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 9:32:00 AM
Thank you so much crystol, i appreciate you reading
Date: 7/21/2024 7:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Very creative and well, yolky. Sara K
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/21/2024 10:07:00 AM
Ever so yolky!
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 9:32:00 AM
Yolky haha thank you dear sara
Date: 7/21/2024 1:58:00 AM
Wow didn’t know you can write like this . Enjoyed reading
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:32:00 AM
Awwn thank you dahlin i shud write a book lol what do you think
Date: 7/20/2024 6:00:00 PM
Oh, a great win for you! You could write a novel. :)
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:32:00 AM
Awwn thank you so much
Date: 7/20/2024 4:36:00 PM
Wow! Quite a tale, held my interest, from the amorous beginning to the liquid splatter, or drip or ooze rather. Andersen and Poe in one glorious, congealing yoke. Every bit deserving of honor. Great read!
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Date: 7/20/2024 10:37:00 PM
Oh i dont know anderson but i love poe and listen to his poetry spoken on youtube to sleep. thank you for such a wonderful comment im grateful truly
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Date: 7/20/2024 6:45:00 PM
Hans Christian Anderson and Edgar allen Poe? Dang Joe, you're on to something here...
Date: 7/20/2024 3:15:00 PM
See I told you it is good Ink. ????
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Date: 7/20/2024 3:17:00 PM
Thank you for your suggestions to enhance this bloody write. Haha. Your honesty is helpful haha
Date: 7/20/2024 3:09:00 PM
The king went rogue and his wrath was merciless but that's how you protect your wife. A lovely one Dear Inky. Now you are good with storytelling. Lovely descriptions and flow. What if she ate the egg? Her sweet Humpty Dumpty would be in her stomach for a long time and she would feel more closer to him. Hahaha. Congratulations on your lovely win. I still haven't figured out my storytelling skills.
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Date: 7/20/2024 3:12:00 PM
Omg thats brilliant hahaha im dying! In her stomach forever! You are so funny!! I wish I thought of that! Thank you dear tonye
Date: 7/20/2024 2:20:00 PM
Back with congratulations I knew it would be a winner.
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/20/2024 2:53:00 PM
Thank you thats so kind of you dear eve
Date: 7/20/2024 1:37:00 PM
Twisted...and dark...indeed! Congrats, Ink Empress.
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Date: 7/20/2024 2:53:00 PM
Thank you so much
Date: 7/20/2024 12:58:00 PM
When did you learn to tell such a fascinating story? I know, you wrote it in 5 minutes, right? This is brilliant storytelling Inky and you know I don't play favorites. We need to see more stories from you. This is awesome. Congrats
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Date: 7/20/2024 10:36:00 PM
She can be pretty loud haha. U saw her on live yes i remember your face when she read something dark haha
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/20/2024 4:57:00 PM
Gothrulz? Is that the screaming lady lol?
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/20/2024 2:49:00 PM
Woke up to this tomsz, thank you so much, i tried writing something you would enjoy. But went dark. Hah. Humble harold i learnt to come up with such names from you, reading you helps. However i wrote this quickly and showed it to one of my soul sisters sara ( a story writer aka gothrulz on ig ) and she suggested what i should do to make it better. I was only a storyteller to my son before, and humpty dumpty—he was obsessed with. I deleted it too thinking its not good. But then posted again. Thank you for liking it and for my placement. Its my first time writing a story, i only did tell stories and most of them were full of poop castles and puddles (in the past) cause my son loved poop jokes back then. Im beyond honoured! Thank u again tomsz
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/20/2024 1:09:00 PM
Humble Harold jr. Ha!
Date: 7/20/2024 12:02:00 PM
The intro excites the reader. A lonely Queen with ivory hair, the descriptions are gorgeous, and her naughty way does so many in with cold, cruel dark magic. The imagery is stunning, the nursery tale is better I think, a darker version. Flows so beautifully well crafted, very creative in story telling Empress! Wonderfully done xhugs
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I Am Anaya
Date: 7/20/2024 3:09:00 PM
Back with congratulations!!!!
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/20/2024 3:06:00 PM
Thank you so much dear anaya. Haha i should try storytelling more often
Date: 7/20/2024 11:19:00 AM
Wow, go Ink! You're a great storyteller! I can't do short stories. So original- an egg yolk...very interesting.
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/20/2024 3:13:00 PM
Awwn thank you so much, reading tom woody helps, please check his work out
Date: 7/20/2024 10:09:00 AM
Such a vivid imagination you have dear and how well you created a dark tale of the Humpty Dumpty.. The lingering presence of Humpty Dumpty's ghost and the gradual disappearance of the King’s men create a chilling sense of retribution. The final image of the King's ghostly silhouette by the cursed well solidifies the poem's theme of inescapable guilt and torment. The interesting blend of dark fantasy and horror, using vivid imagery and a compelling narrative to transform a simple nursery rhyme into a profound and disturbing tale.. BOL in contest..
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 9:33:00 AM
Thank you silent one
Date: 7/20/2024 10:07:00 AM
awesome story , what a cruel king...
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Ink Empress
Date: 7/21/2024 9:33:00 AM
Thank you so much dear eve

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