Night - Intermingled

I feel unease, when trees creek so 
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
As wind chimes chatter to and fro 
From dusk till dawn my nerves do seize
(Alone with only mirrored thoughts)
When trees creek so, I feel unease 

Strange things I see, when darkness falls
(Reflecting all that softly weep)
Soft shadows dancing down the halls 
Translucent specters watching me
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
When darkness falls, strange things I see 

At night alone, my thoughts do stray
(Exposing fears that silence reaps)
Splintered memories, barbed and splayed 
So many voices – most my own
(A splintered plank, now blindly walked)
My thoughts do stray, at night alone 

The white coats come, when daylight breaks
(The stillest slice of night cuts deep)
The blue pill helps reduce the shakes
First eyes are checked, then straps undone
(Alone with only mirrored thoughts)
When daylight breaks, the white coats come

David Mohn
Poem 1 – Alone at Night - 28 Feb 2014 (Swap Quatrain)
Poem 2 – Gloamings’s Razor – 09 Aug 2014 (Triolet) 
Craig Cornish Intermingle Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 4/18/2015 6:42:00 PM
David, Congratulations on your fine win. LINDA
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Date: 4/17/2015 1:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win a 7. Blessings dear friend Eve
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Date: 4/16/2015 10:35:00 PM
wow, Spectacular intermingling!!! Congrats to you.
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Date: 4/16/2015 5:28:00 PM
Such a wonderful mingling of poems, David, that flow together so well with thought and feelings. Congrats on your HM win. Sandra
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Date: 4/16/2015 4:50:00 PM
These meld together so beautifully David many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/6/2015 10:53:00 PM
I absolutely love this poem! So unique in its message and presentation. Should do well in the contest. A 7 from me! :)
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Date: 2/28/2015 8:05:00 AM
You have done a very good job here, David! No easy feat, for sure. The two intermingling forms fit comfortably together. gl in the contest. // paul
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Date: 2/22/2015 5:20:00 PM
The two poems flow nicely together and has a haunting theme that grabbed me! Outstanding 7
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