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Sara's Memories Lost Within a Frozen Mist Contest
                             3/14/25

It was a very balmy midsummer night shadows danced with me under starlight I heard a nightingale cry out for its mate in that moment joy fled. I became sedate My mind swirled with thoughts concealed with something I no longer wanted revealed I heard a whispering voice from my past a fleeting memory recalled that didn't last I felt the need to capture the recollection a face, a touch that held tender affection But much too swiftly the reverie took flight the memory faded like the haze of twilight A chill replaced the night's warmth I'd felt I heaved a mournful sigh then slowly knelt Another memory lost within a frozen mist Of being embraced and my lips softly kissed Flickering moments leave me without a trace of what used to be. Was it a loved one's face? Thoughts flutter in my mind, a befuddled place that's becoming difficult to accept with grace I've lost threads of my life, as if icebound in time in silent corners of my mind, no longer in prime The night has grown cold, my body shivering lost in the mist of memories shadows, quivering.

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Date: 3/21/2025 1:10:00 AM
Yes brilliant! A fitting win! Congratulations
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Date: 3/18/2025 5:00:00 PM
Thank you for writing for my contest. Congratulations on placing. Your poem was deep and very heartfelt. The idea of losing oneself as we age is a fear I feel we all harbour and you captures the unimaginable perfectly. Especially the last four lines. Just brilliant.
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Date: 3/19/2025 12:04:00 PM
Hi, Sara and you're very welcome. I enjoyed writing for you, and you're correct about it being heartfelt. No one in my family has been in such circumstances but I've friends who have felt the unbearable suffering that everyone goes through. Thank you for finding a placement for my write on you winning list.
Date: 3/18/2025 12:01:00 AM
A stunning write my dear poet friend Lin. I loved it and enjoyed. Thanks for sharing. Congratulations for a well-deserved trophy win! Hugs
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Date: 3/18/2025 4:00:00 AM
Thank you so very much for your kind remarks and congratulations, Len.
Date: 3/17/2025 10:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Your poem hit home really. Two years ago I fell and after three months going from one hospital to another I realized I had a partial memory loss. Slowly I came back to normal, thank God. But my poetic writing seem to lag behind. Well done for your great win.
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Date: 3/18/2025 4:00:00 AM
I didn't know you'd had such a serious fall, Victor but happy to know your full faculties have returned and you lovely poetry continues. Thank you.
Date: 3/16/2025 3:51:00 PM
An amazing poem, Lin. Hearty congratulations.
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Date: 3/16/2025 4:26:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your well wishes.
Date: 3/16/2025 2:28:00 PM
I am so glad to see a trophy for an actually deserving write. You deserve your's which relieves some contest concerns I've had. Beautiful. If we lived in an earlier century, I'm sure you would have become famous ... CayCay
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/16/2025 6:31:00 PM
Oh no... Rhett Butler was handsome, charming and loved that minx. Scarlett was too stubborn for her own good. Pride goes before a fall.... Mammy's (Hattie McDaniel) line was the best!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 3/16/2025 6:15:00 PM
You wouldn't have let Rhett go, right? My Mom, Sis and I use to watch that movie about every other year. My favorite line has always been, "I don't no nothin' bout birthin' no babies." I know its suppose to be, "I swear I'll never go hungry again" or "Frankly my dear, .....
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/16/2025 2:44:00 PM
aww, CayCay, you're such a sweet friend. I'm very grateful that you're back and so graciously offering my poetry such wonderful comments. I would love to have lived in the 1800s, pre–Civil War. I'd fancy myself as Miss Scarlett. Thanks for the sincerity of your thoughts. Hugs, dear lady.
Date: 3/14/2025 6:11:00 PM
Lin, you've done a great Job here describing what many of us must deal with at some point. We also have relatives who we try to help as best we can. I'm glad we're OK and can experience what it's like by reading a piece like this. It help with the empathy department. It's going to be tough for us if it comes our way. Smiles!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/14/2025 6:21:00 PM
It’s a terrible experience for the loved ones, too. My descriptive lines were based on my aunt who lost her ability to recall recent things. Thank you, Duke.
Date: 3/14/2025 7:14:00 AM
Sadly as we get older memories of our past start to fade never to be remembered again. So frustrating for those who suffer from alzheimer's and have to rely on family members to remind them of past events people and places. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/14/2025 8:30:00 AM
It is a sad emotion to watch happening, Tom. I had an aunt who could remember everything in her life 25 years ago, but nothing from the last week. Thank you.
Date: 3/14/2025 6:29:00 AM
I have a huge lump in my throat reading these touching words Lin - made me think of mum who had memory issues after a fall and 2 bleeds on her brain. the final two stanzas hits home hard. good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/14/2025 6:33:00 AM
I remember the worry you had over your mum's memory loss. Jan, I'm sorry if this opened that door for you.

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