Home » Poems » Susan Ashley » Wild Roses On The Hill

Susan Ashley | + Follow Poet |

Wild Roses On The Hill

Poet's Notes

(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Susan Ashley.

March 7, 2024

~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: An Old Form
Sponsor: Emile Pinet

An escapade sweet as a marshmallow day when tangerine dreams fed our evergreen stream. Our magnet attraction neath radiant ray did butter the air where the breezes did teem in whirlwind through roses anointing the brae. Their scent, my surrender, romantic the scheme, exotic the fever and dance with a flame. Ah, rapture of capture! The wooer’s end game.

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Paul Callus

Date: 5/30/2024 1:08:00 PM

Hi Susan, irrespective of the placing, I still have no qualms in awarding this poem a high score. It is a poem that speaks highly to me through content and technical ability. Well done my friend. ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/1/2024 8:10:00 AM

Dear Paul, it thrills me to know that my poem spoke to you through content and technical ability. I was truly hoping that the romantic flesh of the poem would mesh with its structural bones seamlessly.. your uplifting comments let me know I achieved my goal. Thank you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Gregory Colodub

Date: 5/27/2024 1:22:00 AM

What an enchanting poem, dear Susan! A great pleasure to read!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2024 12:40:00 PM

Dear Gregory, I'm enchanted by your wonderful comments. Your visit is a delight! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Crandall

Date: 5/6/2024 8:44:00 PM

Beautiful, nicely flowing language Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/7/2024 7:59:00 PM

Dear David, thank you for your gracious visit and kind words. Your comments are uplifting. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Howard Kerr

Date: 5/5/2024 9:34:00 AM

Susan, Heartiest congratulations on your selection. An exquisite lyrical piece that is the very essence of enchantment and deep romantic fervour. A joy and privilege to read as it has this magnetic phrasing so apt for its subject I really appreciate your generous reflections on Yet I Cling Warm regards Howard

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/5/2024 5:49:00 PM

Dear Howard, it's a thrill to receive your wonderful response to my poem. Your comments are vibrant and thoughtful! Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this poem with me and for allowing my verse to touch your imagination and poet's soul. Both your kindness and congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 4/4/2024 10:06:00 AM

Beautiful Susan! The imagery is outstanding and the last line intriguing. Congratulations! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/15/2024 5:49:00 PM

Dear Linda, please accept my apologies for my late reply. Life has been full to the brim lately with all things good. We are truly blessed. Your lovely comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated. So uplifting! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/1/2024 11:20:00 AM

Congratulations Susan! Your beautiful poem earned you a distinguished place in my contest. This form is challenging and difficult to judge, but yours made my list. Very well done, my friend, Emile.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/15/2024 5:47:00 PM

Dear Emile, please accept my apologies for my late reply.. life has been full to the brim lately with all things good. We are truly blessed. Thank you for the honor of my poem's placement in your esteemed contest. I am honored to share the podium with the talented poets/poetesses on your list. Your uplifting comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/26/2024 11:01:00 AM

Having played the role of “Wooer” I can relate. It is a daunting but worthwhile endeavour. Especially when you find the right person to woo. I enjoyed your poem.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/29/2024 5:54:00 PM

Dear Richard, your wonderful comments are a joy to receive. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagination of this poem with me. Your valued thoughts add lovely dimension to this piece. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Bill Baker

Date: 3/15/2024 10:41:00 PM

An excellent entry which should do well in the contest, Susan. The rhythm made your words flow like a running stream. A delightful read and a romance lover's dream. Your use of colors and all the senses made your poem a special one. A FAV for my list, my friend. Hugs, Bill

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/17/2024 5:00:00 PM

Dear Bill, I'm so glad you noticed the rhythm of my poem! It's also uplifting to know that you thought this was "a romance lover's dream"! Your comments are a thrill to receive and the distinction of your fav is a grand honor indeed! Thank you, my dear poetry friend, for your lovely words, your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring

Date: 3/15/2024 4:48:00 AM

Dearest Susan, my muse seems to have taken a vacation of late and needing inspiration, I knew exactly where to go! Straight to one of your poems dear one. Another stunning piece from you. What a breathtaking scene you have set for the admirer to relish - scrumptious like melting butter! Another new form to me. I love your romantic heart. Passion abounds amongst the roses with the reminiscence of an exciting encounter! I love the exquisite imagery here and you can practically smell the roses!

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/17/2024 4:54:00 PM

Dearest Christina, I know the sad feeling of my muse abandoning me too.. fortunately, she always returns (on her terms..) from her vacation, tanned, smiling and well-rested, though sometimes still lazy! lol! I adore your precious comments, my talented poetry friend. I'm also honored and humbled by your generosity and kindness. Your poetic soul sees into the heart of my poem with sensitivity and clarity. I really like the Rispetto form. I know you would just excel writing in this form too, Christina! I hope you will let your expressive golden pen give it a try. I'm so glad to know you loved my poem, that means the world to me. Thank you, my sweet friend, for the inspiration of your friendship and for your cherished comments. Ever your admirer.. warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring
Date: 3/15/2024 4:52:00 AM

You have captured so much here just like the heart being wooed on the hill. The roses are a perfect symbolism throughout the perfect lines. Loved it. Thank you my poetic heroine for sharing your immense gift. Hugs of admiration xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/13/2024 6:22:00 PM

A lovely, romantic write, Susan, and "sweet as a marshmallow day" ... I think such sweet, spring days are just around the corner :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/14/2024 7:59:00 AM

Dear Kelly, thank you for the delight of both your visit and uplifting comments. Indeed, as the crocus has bloomed in my front garden, spring days are near! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jack Horne

Date: 3/11/2024 2:49:00 PM

ahhh, just gorgeous - as I've come to expect from you x

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/11/2024 6:22:00 PM

Dear Jack, my poet friend, it’s so nice to see you! Thank you for your beautiful comment. I’m touched and honored by your words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2024 12:31:00 PM

Wowie this is sure to make the winners list. So enchanting.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/11/2024 6:25:00 PM

Dear Andrea, I am thrilled by your response to my poem. Thank you for your kindness and inspiring words. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Daisy Meadows

Date: 3/9/2024 8:32:00 AM

A lovely poem. Well done.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/11/2024 6:26:00 PM

Dear Jeanette, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful words. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Schatz

Date: 3/8/2024 3:04:00 AM

"butter the air" is extraordinary! Who else could have ever thought of that?

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/11/2024 6:28:00 PM

Dear Robert, your comments are uplifting. Thank you for noticing that verse. I appreciate your visit and kindness, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Bell

Date: 3/8/2024 1:20:00 AM

Wild roses combining into a wild day. Maybe why the rose is the flower of romance, and its exotic colours get you in the mood, and it seems you were in the mood.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/11/2024 6:35:00 PM

Dear Paul, indeed, wild roses are the flowers of romance, passion and love. I enjoyed using their symbolism in my poem. Your gracious visit and comments are appreciated. Thank you my friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress

Date: 3/7/2024 12:46:00 PM

How beautiful is the way you play around with words dear susan, any form, any theme, you nail them effortlessly in such poetic eloquence, leaving us readers in awe captivated and inspired. I love the internal rhymes, descriptive imagery, seamless flow of alliterations, great use of poetic techniques throughout while also sticking to syllables and rhymes! I love your use of adjectives and the way this is woven in such an artistic manner. Im sure this will do well in the contest too. Best wishes.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/9/2024 8:56:00 AM

Dear Empress, expressive poetess, the thoughtful potent beauty of your comments have the power to lift my spirits to beyond the cumulus! Thank you for such an inspiring response. Your words are encouraging and empowering and nurturing as they stir me to reach ever higher in my poetic journey. You and your extraordinary poetry are truly appreciated. Your golden light that shines upon my poem and my heart is embraced. Warmest wishes, my soulful poetry friend.. ~Susan

Deb M

Date: 3/7/2024 12:31:00 PM

Susan how do you do it….such wonderful words and imagery! You are a very talented lady. A simply soft beautiful poem! Debx

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/9/2024 8:46:00 AM

Dear Deb, I'm thrilled to receive your stunning feedback. Such an honor to have you visit my poem and leave your precious thoughts. They are treasured and I am humbled, dear poetess. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my work. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 3/7/2024 10:40:00 AM

Hi Susan.. Your poem beautifully captures the essence of a romantic escapade, evoking sensations of sweetness and warmth akin to a "marshmallow day." The imagery of "tangerine dreams" feeding an "evergreen stream" paints a vivid picture of vibrant, dream-like landscapes. Metaphors, such as "magnet attraction" and "whirlwinds of roses," adds depth, highlighting the intensity of the encounter. The surrender to the scent of roses and the dance with flames symbolize a passionate and captivating experience.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/9/2024 8:43:00 AM

Dear Silent One, I relish your in-depth and inspiring feedback. Indeed, I wanted to portray the scene on the hill as a "passionate and captivating experience" recalled by the poem's female speaker and wanted the symbolism used to strongly suggest it. Your meaningful comments assure me that I achieved my goal. Thank you, dear poet and friend, for being always being a beacon in my poetry journey. Your golden friendship and gifted poetic pen are ever appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/7/2024 10:37:00 AM

Hello Susan, so nice to see you. I hope all is well. I love this poem. it will be my fav. enjoy your day my friend. Hugs. /Darlene/

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/9/2024 8:35:00 AM

I really like our friendship too, Darlene :) xo

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/8/2024 10:17:00 AM

Hello Susan, I am happy to see you. You are welcome. Y Warmest wishes & es I enjoyed this poem. Your welcome. I like our friendship. Warmest wishes & Hugs. /Darlene/

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/8/2024 8:12:00 AM

Dear Darlene, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for your gracious visit and lovely comments. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. The honor of your fav is appreciated as is your poetry friendship. Warmest wishes and hugs my friend.. ~Susan