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poem written for "When Silence Speaks Poetry Contest," 5/7/2024 

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Deep silences like thunderbolts were hurled through the soundlessness of my quiet world. These noises were generated from within for my ears were not able to take sounds in. From the noisy world no sound could be heard, no clashing of drums or song of a bird. My eyes could see your lips talking to me but what you said remained a silent mystery. Cut off from the noisy world around and from its vast cacophony of sound. I could not hear a dog bark or baby cry, the rustling wind or river rippling by. Then there down by the Sea of Galilee they begged Jesus to lay his hands on me. I was deaf and dumb and could hardly talk but Jesus took me to one side for a walk. He reached out touching my tongue and my ear cried out “Ephphatha*” and then I could hear. My tongue was loosened, and I could speak now I’m no longer an outcast or freak. (*'Ephphatha!' means 'Be opened!') - Written after reading Mark 7: 31-37

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Date: 5/7/2024 6:40:00 PM
That’s wonderful Sara, a lovely poem on the story of Jesus healing the deaf man, giving him hearing and a voice for speech. Beryl
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Date: 5/7/2024 5:22:00 PM
Great spiritually based work. I enjoyed reading about the healing of the death man once again. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us and for dropping by my page. Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Sara K
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 5:44:00 PM
thanks for your visit, Sara K. Grateful you enjoyed reading my poem. I also appreciate your encouraging words about this contest entry. Have a blessed evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 10:39:00 AM
Brilliant rhymes and depth to what youv conveyed here. I got lost within your well crafted lines! “ Cut off from the noisy world around and from its vast cacophony of sound. I could not hear a dog bark or baby cry, the rustling wind or river rippling by.” that made me think of how all those that may be living in silence would feel! A very empathetic write this is. Best wishes for the contest
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 4:59:00 PM
thanks for your kind remarks and enthusiasm, dear Ink. I'd actually written another 'silence' poem, the topic of which wasn't all that original...then the idea for this poem popped into my mind....glad you appreciated my efforts. Have a great evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 9:52:00 AM
Beautiful poem. Depicts the story in life of Jesus. Well penned.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 4:59:00 PM
thank you, Jay...appreciate your visit and kind remarks. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 9:13:00 AM
A wonderful retelling of a pivotal story in the life of Jesus. The first person narrative gives it a personal feel.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 5:00:00 PM
thanks for your visit and positive remarks, Richard. Wishing you a splendid evening, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 7:09:00 AM
Fantastic poem about a deaf and mute individual whose life is defined by solitude and quiet until Jesus restores their hearing and speech dear Sara. You did an excellent job of capturing the essence of being deaf and alone, of not being able to speak or interact with people, and of the life-changing effects of recovery and rehabilitation. You used vivid language to describe the protagonist's setting, which was full of empty space and quiet. "Soundlessness," "quiet world," and "cacophony of sound" are words that add to the poem's magnificence. Your perspective on the competition is well chosen and articulated.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 5:04:00 PM
I appreciate your visit, Sotto, and for your analysis of my poem. I'm grateful you found my poem 'fantastic' and magnificent. I was going for something different when I wrote this poem...something refreshing rather than the typical 'silence themes.' Thanks for your complimentary words on my attempt. Have a splendid evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 5:56:00 AM
Your poem speaks to the theme brilliantly, Sara--I liked the turn in the final two stanzas--powerful ending!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 5:02:00 PM
thank you for your comments about my poem addressing the contest theme. I'd written another poem about silence, the theme of which wasn't all that unique. Then the idea for this poem popped into my head. I chose it because it was different. Glad you liked the ending! Color me grateful for your visit and insights, Sara
Date: 5/7/2024 5:45:00 AM
A miraculous touch to break the silence, I liked how you ended this verse Sara, Best wishes
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/7/2024 5:01:00 PM
thank you for your visit, Joseph and for your upbeat comments. Enjoy your evening, Sara

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