Tanka

Promises broken; Scattered in the winds of change- Dreams forever lost. Sunlight peeps through the darkness- The leaving did not break me. 3/30/2015

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Daver Austin

Date: 4/8/2015 10:24:00 AM

Love that ray of sunlight. Good stuff. Love, daver

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/8/2015 12:25:00 PM

There's always a new day. Thanks Daver.

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/6/2015 2:02:00 PM

Loved every line here Janet, especially the last one ;) tc Wilma - thank you for your pop in on my side as well..

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/8/2015 12:24:00 PM

Thanks so much Wilma. I was glad I did.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2015 10:49:00 PM

this is very nice, Janet. I love its message.

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/2/2015 8:13:00 AM

Thank you. This is senryu turned tanka and stronger for it I think could probably write forever in choka style, but this seems just enough.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/1/2015 5:46:00 AM

A wonderful tale of survival in the jungle that is life and love.

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:21:00 AM

Thank you Armand! Hope your having a great day. ~Janet

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/31/2015 12:04:00 PM

- A both sad and positive tanka, Janet - Really like it - I've never written a tanka ..... maybe I'll try :) - For the sun is beautiful and you are so great, the day is yours # 7 # :) - Happy Easter! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:19:00 AM

You should really try. You already write haiku. Love the Easter Chick! ((HUGS)) ~janet

Kp Nunez

Date: 3/31/2015 9:38:00 AM

Beautiful, pensive tanka. Sunlight always represents hope despite dreams lost. A 7. Kim :)

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 4/1/2015 10:18:00 AM

Thanks Kim. I love writing Senryu and this is one that I revised for Tanka. hope you having a gret day ~jan

Jan Allison

Date: 3/30/2015 3:14:00 PM

I really loved this tanka Janet especially the positivity in the final couplet good luck in the contest xx 7 xx

Jaycee Cervenka
Date: 3/30/2015 4:32:00 PM

Thanks Jan!