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Smiling Eyes

at first glance enthralled smiling eyes intense pierced mine felt my heart thumping breath caught looked away closed my eyes felt you within true essence captured endless sparking pools swimming in milk chocolates with no life jacket ~*~ Written by Annalise For: Michael's "Eyes First Meet" Contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/4/2011 5:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Annalise in the contest "Eyes First Meet" sponsored by Michael Falotico. Love, Carol

Francine Roberts

Date: 4/3/2011 7:34:00 PM

adorable , especially the third senryu, congrats on your win in the contest Annalise

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2011 2:13:00 PM

oh,yes, i remember,yours is the chocolate swim! Love it, congratulations.

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/2/2011 12:30:00 PM

Annalise I loved this one the first time I read it.. Congratulations on your win and have an awesome weekend.. love Wilma

Kash Poet

Date: 4/2/2011 7:16:00 AM

Wonderful ending here Annalise!Congrats on your win--kashinath

Elaine George

Date: 4/2/2011 2:03:00 AM

Love that last stanza. 'Swimming in milk chocolates with no life jacket. Wonderful string Senryu, Annalise. Many congrats on your BIG WIN, Lainie

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/2/2011 1:58:00 AM

Love these Annalise, yes and like all the others love the third one, in fact this is a very profound statement you make here, awesome, congrats. Harry

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/2/2011 12:26:00 AM

coming back here to congratulate you Annalise! this was really an enjoyable entry-- awesome swimming in milk chocolate! Super congrats again :)

Tahera Mannan

Date: 4/1/2011 9:45:00 PM

Many many heartiest congrats for this super win dear Anna.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/1/2011 6:13:00 PM

This is a cute one Annalise. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/1/2011 4:22:00 PM

Congratulations on your win...Sara

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/1/2011 3:22:00 PM

Congratulations on the ninth place win in the contest of Michael, Annalise. I hope you have noted down my email I gave you in one of my comments

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/1/2011 3:18:00 PM

from smiles to sparks!! CHEERS for winning big in this tourney, anna... superrr stuff! ;) hugggs

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/1/2011 2:45:00 PM

I knew this would be a winner, Annalise. Congratulations, hon! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/1/2011 2:32:00 PM

Congrats Annalise on your wonderful winning poem in Michael's contest with this exciting entry my friend.. enjoy another top ten sweet success with luv ..happy weekend too..

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 4/1/2011 2:30:00 PM

Congrats my dear on your win in my contest...luv Michael

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/31/2011 1:37:00 PM

oooh, what a cool thought, to be swimming in milk chocolate . YUM!!! great image with that gaze, sweetie.

Daver Austin

Date: 3/28/2011 7:07:00 AM

Love the last Senryui - the ecstacy of chocolate. Love, dave

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/27/2011 12:38:00 PM

Quite a dreamy write Annalise, loved it. Good luck for the contest, hope your weekend's been a good one, love Wilma

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/27/2011 12:05:00 PM

You don't need a life jacket to drown in love, Annalise. I remember how it felt when I first saw my husband and he really did take my breath away. This is a wonderful entry for Michael's contest. Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/27/2011 7:27:00 AM

This is such a sweet and romantic series of senryu, Annalise, & really like that "swimming in milk chocolate" -- I think with eyes like that, you can just swim forever! :) wish you the best in the contest :)

James Fraser

Date: 3/27/2011 6:40:00 AM

A sweet dreamy Senryu Annalise, it's delightful. Good luck in Michael's contest....:)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/26/2011 7:26:00 PM

swimming in milk chocolates with no life jacket ...how unique and original are your lines Annalise.. great expressions to compliment the other lines ..good luck my friend in the contest.. am glad I am not the judge of this one ..Michael will be so blown away with your lines.. and so many great entries for competition but this one is charming luv..