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September 12, 2024

~ Third Place ~
Contest: September Falls
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

Serene, the crisp of apple cider days Each morning lightly misted. Its mystique Perhaps a guise to hide from eyes the ways The pink hydrangeas rusted; chic to meek. Enticed, the chill does bring a woolen feel, Matured, the sun grows old by afternoon. Below persimmon skies of bonfire zeal Embraced in sweaters neath the moon, we swoon. Relinquish Virgo and the marigold For Libra sparkles in the sapphire night. As western winds turn cool and blue-jay-bold, Let’s reminisce love sonnets we did write. Like grapes on vines, we’ve ripened into wine, September lips, your champagne kiss on mine.

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Brian Davey

Date: 10/16/2024 6:45:00 PM

You are an amazing writer every word leads into the next so beautifully. The words you express in your poems are nothing but perfect, thank you for taking all of us on your poetic journey, A++

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/18/2024 7:23:00 AM

Dear Brian, I am elated by your heartfelt response to my poem. Indeed, I'm humbled and honored. Thank you for sharing your inspiring thoughts with me, they are held in my truest appreciation. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/16/2024 11:07:00 AM

Susan, your romantic flair and images flowing effortlessly in an acrostic. Belated congratulations on your placement. I am charmed sweet poetess, it's always a pleasure to read your work. ~Anaya

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/18/2024 7:20:00 AM

Dearest Anaya, your precious words and uplifting presence never fails to bring me joy! Thank you, dear poet friend, for your embracing thoughts and heartwarming congrats. You are as much appreciated for your shining friendship as you are for your golden pen. Warmest wishes sweet friend.. ~Susan

Karen Jones

Date: 10/14/2024 6:51:00 PM

“Embraced in sweaters neath the moon, we swoon” love this and, “Like grapes on vines, we’ve ripened into wine, September lips, your champagne kiss on mine” Your poem is full of magical imagery and September energy. I just love it! Sorry I missed this gem! I have to also say congratulations on your win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/14/2024 7:02:00 PM

Dear Karen, inspiring poet, I'm elated by your response to my poem. Your precious thoughts are truly appreciated as is your gracious visit. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of September with me. Both your kind congrats and shining friendship are appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Len Gasun

Date: 10/14/2024 1:04:00 AM

Oh, this is so beautiful my dearest poet friend Susan. Sorry, I've missed it coz of time constraint whenever I dropped here during school days. Now, it's our short semestral break. And I found this after reading your comment on mine. Big Congrats belatedly on your win and this stellar and splendid write! I love it a lot and super enjoyed. Thanks a lot for sharing. Blessings to you always, to your loved ones and your writings. Hugs

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/14/2024 8:51:00 AM

Dearest Len, my inspiring poet friend, I'm so glad to know that you are enjoying a semestral break from school. Thank you for sharing your treasured thoughts with me and for your heartwarming congrats. I appreciate both and relish your friendship with gratitude. Warmest wishes poet friend.. ~Susan

Valsa George

Date: 10/12/2024 1:26:00 AM

Hi Susan, your Fall differs from the out dated scenery and images described by us ordinary poets. Your reference to Virgo and Libra adds a fresh touch to the autumn scene. Your word choice, as always is excellent. The concluding last two lines stand out , showing your extra ordinary poetic skill and creative expression. On the whole, we get a cool feel of September Falls Congratulations on your outstanding win in the contest.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/14/2024 8:57:00 AM

Dearest Valsa, gifted poetess, your wonderful words have the power to lift my spirits to beyond the "persimmon skies"! :) Thank you, my poet friend, for sharing in the warm emotions and cool textures of this poem with me. I'm truly heartened to know you enjoyed my Autumn vision. I relish your beautiful thoughts and kind congrats, but most of all, I embrace your poetry friendship with gratitude. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Jcb Brul

Date: 10/9/2024 5:01:00 AM

This is so lovely! Vivid imagery that emanates from the heart. Acrostic at its finest! Congratulations dear Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/14/2024 8:45:00 AM

Dear Jcb, my poet friend, your creative spirit has been missed! It's wonderful to see you on my poem's page. Thank you for your comments. Your treasured thoughts and kind congrats are heartwarming! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/30/2024 2:24:00 PM

I love the romantic feel to this one, Susan and the references to Virgo and Libra. Great meter. Congrats on the win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/6/2024 7:54:00 AM

Dear Andrea, thank you for my poem's placement in your challenging contest.., a challenge I enjoyed! It's a joy to receive your inspiring comments and kind congrats, and an honor to share the podium with the creative poets listed. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Gary Radice

Date: 9/28/2024 7:24:00 AM

Your acrostic is very skillfully composed Susan. It isn't easy to spell out the set words so that the whole piece flows without sounding stilted and contrived and without words sounding as if they have just been shoe-horned in to fit. You have succeeded beautifully here: and I note the 14 lines, ten syllables / iambic pentameter - it all reads like a lovely sonnet. Congratulations. Cheers - Gary

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/6/2024 7:51:00 AM

Dear Gary, I relish the uplifting spirit of your treasured comments as I hold your beautiful and skillfully composed poetic creations in my highest regard. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of transition and appreciation for Nature with me. It's deeply gratifying to receive your inspiring comments. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/26/2024 6:37:00 PM

' September lips, your champagne kiss on mine. ' So sensual and satisfying. There's so many amazing moments within, my dear friend. You're always able to paint such breathtaking images with your words. This is truly captivating. Beautiful in every way. Many wonderful blessings to you, Susan. :) Hugs, Brandy

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/6/2024 7:44:00 AM

Dear Brandy, poetess extraordinaire, I'm elated by your beautiful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing in the many amazing moments of transition from the summer season to fall splendor. I'm always grateful to see the beauty of Nature unfolding before me and always grateful to see your smiling face brightening my humble page. Warmest wishes to you my sweet poetry friend.. ~Susan

Yann Rolland

Date: 9/23/2024 5:20:00 AM

great imagery for celebrating autumn, je me suis régalé, merci yann

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/23/2024 7:56:00 PM

Dear Yann, I relish your wonderful response to my poem. Your gracious visit and inspiring words are truly appreciated. I’m so happy to know you enjoyed my poem, merci mon ami poète. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Mulu Magdalinos

Date: 9/23/2024 3:27:00 AM

Dear Susan, an excellent acrostic poem. Blessing Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/23/2024 7:43:00 PM

Dear Mulu, thank you for your gracious visit and uplifting comment. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tom Woody

Date: 9/18/2024 5:53:00 AM

This is so clever of you to combine the flow of free verse, a competent rhyme scheme and a nod to a sonnet into your acrostic. Then there's the luscious word choices, a hallmark of your style. Your talent shines like the sun Suze

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/20/2024 7:48:00 AM

Dear Tom, actually, I'm not that clever.. I know, hard to believe right..? lol! But, the credit for cleverness belongs to our esteemed PS poet, Andrea D. In Andrea's contest details she added the optional challenge of writing this 14 line acrostic title in sonnet form. She is one clever chick! :) Thank you for your delightful comments, my uplifting poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Maria Williams

Date: 9/16/2024 1:02:00 AM

Dear Susan, Your poem is astounding. I loved every bit of it - the changing hues and especially your last versse - Best of Luck with your contest - Hugs Maria

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/20/2024 7:37:00 AM

Dearest Maria, I embrace the sparkling spirit of your beautiful comments. They are truly touching. Your shining presence here is as appreciated as your golden poetry! Thank you, my inspiring poetry sis, for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/15/2024 11:25:00 PM

Oh, beautiful. I left you a soupmail. God bless you always, friend. love, Gina

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/20/2024 7:31:00 AM

Dearest Gina, my gentle poet friend, thank you for your lovely response to my poem. Your gracious visit and kindness are both truly appreciated. Warmest wishes and love.. ~Susan P.S. will be sending a soup mail shortly :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/14/2024 2:59:00 PM

This is beauty, the beauty of autumn with a great romantic ending. Good luck with the contest.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/14/2024 8:53:00 PM

Dear Hilda, it’s wonderful to see you. Thank you for your lovely response to my poem. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 9/13/2024 10:39:00 PM

crescendo rising to a sublime conclusion. enchanted.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/14/2024 9:40:00 AM

Dear US, I am enchanted by your beautiful comments. Your thoughts are uplifting! Thank you for gracing my poem with your esteemed presence. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/13/2024 6:18:00 AM

Dear Susan, You have mastered the acrostic, which has such wonderful metaphors and flowing imagery. Many who write this style have trouble making the flow happen but not yours. I could read this several times and still find joy in how it reads and fills the mind. Autumn is such a magical time for me, and after absorbing your words, it makes it even more so. I know you have a winner! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/14/2024 9:36:00 AM

Dear Daniel, indeed, autumn is an enchanting time of the year for me. I have been an autumn girl since birth! It's especially more meaningful and poignant to me now as I am in the autumn of my life so the season takes on a more complex, intriguing array of layers and nuances for me. Thank you for your thoughtful and inspiring comments. I am honored by your visit and humbled by your thoughts. Warmest wishes my esteemed poet friend.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/12/2024 7:28:00 PM

Well, you wrote it explicitly into this acrostic's second stanza: This is more sonnet than anything else, and a gorgeous one at that, my friend. Excelsior! ~ Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2024 7:59:00 PM

Dear Gershon, my poet friend, thank you for your gracious visit and encouraging words. Your esteemed thoughts are a joy to receive. Andrea threw a twist into the contest details by challenging the participants to write an acrostic poem in sonnet style since the acrostic title (vertically) is 14 lines, so I thought that’s a very interesting challenge.. :) I’m so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Crandall

Date: 9/12/2024 7:17:00 PM

Lovely lines Susan, great last 2 lines.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2024 7:38:00 PM

Dear David, thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your response is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Paige Hind

Date: 9/12/2024 3:41:00 PM

Oh, wow- this is really enchanting, Susan...what a way to pass into Autumn, as "September Falls" <3 your friend and fan

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2024 7:36:00 PM

Dear Paige, your beautiful comments are a thrill to receive. I am uplifted by your treasured thoughts and hold them in my truest appreciation. Thank you, dear poet, I am a fan of your amazing poetry too. Warmest wishes to you, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/12/2024 10:59:00 AM

I don't know much about your weather, but here, September began early; grapes had to be harvested and processed. I loved your Champagne kiss. It was a marvellous acoustic, very emotional, and full of imagery. Best wishes for your contest.

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2024 11:30:00 AM

Dear Victor, I savor your beautiful thoughts and revel in your gracious visit. Thank you my poet friend. This year, September has brought us quintessential New England weather.. warm sunny days, clear blue skies, refreshing air and cool comfortable nights.. just perfect! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/12/2024 9:45:00 AM

another blockbuster of poetic melody, susan...if this be September, play on!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/12/2024 11:26:00 AM

Dear, Nette, your visit is a delight as is your beautiful comment. I am touched by your precious thoughts. Warmest wishes soulful poet.. ~Susan