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Our Journey C Quote

".... could not stop for death- he kindly stopped for me-
               the carriage held just ourselves and immortality."   
                                    Quote by _ Emily Dickinson


Relentless struggle to take in air, my voice so rasp.
Monotonous effort, to force my body to breathe.
Agonizing, laborious striving to inhale, I gasp. 
All energy spent, a body not worthy of life, I seethe.

Too weak to carry on, as hopeless as it seems, 
“Could not stop for death, he kindly stopped for me.”
To end this misery, was only in my dreams,
“The carriage held just ourselves and immortality.”

A calm settled as images of my bygone years showed.
All pain diminished, as visions of heaven came to me.
The irony of death giving me life was blissfully bestowed.
Peace beyond dreaming on our journey to the cemetery.

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Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/31/2023 5:55:00 AM A tremendous first piece. A belated welcome to he Soup. Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 8/31/2023 6:39:00 AM Richard, glad you liked the poem Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comment. Its appreciated.

J. Summers Date: 8/30/2023 5:22:00 PM Love the poem and the imagery. Your clever infusion of Emily Dickinson was a great idea. Making this a FAV. John Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 8/30/2023 9:36:00 PM Thank you John. I really appreciate your kind words.

Bill Baker Date: 8/22/2023 8:54:00 PM Great quote, and a fine entry for the contest, SV. An intriguing poem. Thought I'd look back at a few older ones. Bill Login to Reply Bill Baker Date: 8/24/2023 4:31:00 PM You may enjoy these three of my favorite poems: (1)An Oath To Truth And Right (Oct 26,2021) (2) Seeds Of The Soul (Nov 13,2022) (3) Life On The River I'll be looking for yours and will read and comment on them. Have a great week! Bill Speaks Volumes Date: 8/22/2023 10:44:00 PM Thanks Bill. Please give me the names of a few of your favorites amongst your poems, so I can read them in case I missed them. I think sometimes we miss excellent poems of others, and never get to read them. I would love to read the poems of yours that are your favorites. My 3 favorites amongst mine are : FEELINGS & LANGUID & RENT. (the 2nd and 3rd are fiction). I look forward to reading yours. SV

Susan Ashley Date: 6/19/2023 9:24:00 AM Dear Speaks, your poem is rich with emotion and imagery. Though the mortal journey from birth to death is universal, it is as unique and individual as our fingerprints left upon this Earth. I loved the quote by E.D. (which blends seamlessly with your amazing verse) but I especially admired your verse "The irony of death giving me life was blissfully bestowed." Your last line is a grand finale to a potent and poignant piece. Fantastic and thought-provoking! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/19/2023 10:48:00 AM Thank you Susan, some times I feel that I am taking dictation as I write. The words come to me faster than I can type them sometimes and I hope for no interruption in case I lose valuable words.This was the case with this poem. Your comment is so uplifting, it graces me with an air of delight and is most appreciated.

Sotto Poet Date: 6/18/2023 6:21:00 AM With such exquisite verses, SV, a truly eloquent poem on the subject of mortality. The profundity of your emotions shines with remarkable brilliance, harmoniously converging with the essence of Dickinson's prose. I am convinced that bliss and everlasting radiance shall endure. Congratulations on your win Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/18/2023 6:40:00 AM Your breathtaking comment fills me with pride. I feel wonderful reading your words that envelop my poem with such praise. Thank You.

Robert Gorelick Date: 6/12/2023 5:20:00 PM The intensity of your feelings come through brilliantly, blending commendably with Dickenson's words. I believe joy and eternal light will abide. Love will prove victorious. Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/12/2023 8:10:00 PM You'll give me a big head Robert ! I felt a bit guilty mixing my humble words with hers. Not every day one gets to collaborate with Emily Dickinson.

Linda Alice Fowler Date: 6/8/2023 2:42:00 PM Hey you! So good to see you! :) This is a great poem and picture combo...just like you to make it come to life! :) Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/8/2023 11:45:00 PM wow luv you! Thanks lovely lady. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 6/5/2023 12:11:00 PM - A great poem for the contest ... congratulations on your place on the winner's list, S.V. :) - Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/5/2023 4:09:00 PM I see your name in the winners circle Anne, thank you for your kind words.

Sara Kendrick Date: 6/4/2023 2:42:00 AM I like the poem by Emily Dickenson from which you used the quote so good choice. Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/4/2023 3:38:00 PM I like it too. Thank you for your kind words.

Christuraj Alex Date: 6/4/2023 1:40:00 AM A very beautifully written poem on the theme of death. Congratulations! Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/4/2023 1:45:00 AM Thank you for your kind words.

Constance La France Date: 6/3/2023 7:14:00 PM Sp, thank you so much for sharing your poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations! Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/3/2023 7:39:00 PM Many thanks for your kind recognition.

Victor Buhagiar Date: 6/3/2023 1:59:00 AM Glad to see you writing such wonderful poetry. Best for a win. You should read others' poems too. Login to Reply Speaks Volumes Date: 6/3/2023 2:37:00 AM I'll read yours, how's that?