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One Step Away From Eternity

Alas, I stand atop this mountain crest, and gaze upon the valley down below; the graveyard where your body lays at rest, sits in the center shadowed by plateau. My sad heart aches with every breath I take; I wonder why I’m made to bear this bane, and live a life that’s cruel and opaque, while trying hard my teardrops to restrain. This awful illness claimed your life so soon, while you and I were living in our prime; the heavens haled you, leaving my life strewn across this wasteland, sadly out of rhyme. ‘Tis but a step across this steep degree, and I will join you in eternity. July 20, 2018

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J P Marmaro

Date: 3/12/2019 11:59:00 AM

A sad poem indeed... and well done! NB: in line 3, shouldn't it be "lies" instead of "lays"? Congrats on your win! JP

John Gondolf
Date: 3/12/2019 12:47:00 PM

Thanks, J P, I appreciate it. Perhaps you are correct on my grammar. John

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/26/2018 8:12:00 PM

Having loved and lost at a young age, I can relate to your sad feelings in this poem, John. I love your sonnet, especially the last two lines! Congratulations on your win in the marathon contest! Hugs, Carolyn

John Gondolf
Date: 12/26/2018 8:18:00 PM

Thank you so much, Carolyn, I appreciate your comments and support. John

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/26/2018 7:52:00 PM

Back again to congratulate you on another fine win for this outstanding poem, John! :) Sandra

John Gondolf
Date: 12/26/2018 8:09:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sandra.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/26/2018 5:38:00 PM

So many moments and emotions tangle around these words from your heart. This is sad, beautiful and tender- all at the same time. Congratulations John, on this win. ~ Brandy

John Gondolf
Date: 12/26/2018 6:10:00 PM

Thank you so much, Brandy, your thoughts and comments mean much to me. John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/26/2018 5:25:00 PM

wow, such a well deserved win. Congrats, Tom.

Mark Toney

Date: 12/26/2018 3:45:00 PM

John, congrats on your win on mile 3 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. This is a beautiful sonnet of unending love overcoming unbearable heartache! ~Mark

John Gondolf
Date: 12/26/2018 3:49:00 PM

Thanks, Mark, and thanks for hosting the Marathon.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/26/2018 3:21:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! SO sad! Janice

John Gondolf
Date: 12/26/2018 3:23:00 PM

Thank you, Janice.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 8/3/2018 10:36:00 AM

Congratulations, Dear, on first place. Well deserved win.

John Gondolf
Date: 8/3/2018 10:58:00 AM

Thank you, Rhoda, I appreciate it. John

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/31/2018 5:18:00 PM

John, congratulations on your Trophy win for this very sad but well-written Sonnet! It brought back how my dear Dad felt when my mom passed away so young. A Fav for me. Sandra <3

John Gondolf
Date: 7/31/2018 5:59:00 PM

Sandra, thank you so much for your comments and for the fave. Sorry to bring up the sad memories about your Mom and Dad. John

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 7/29/2018 11:49:00 PM

Congrats John, on your #1 win with this sad but beautiful sonnet. I don't know your history, but this speaks of pain and loss, a lost love. Your sorrow comes through, it is felt.

John Gondolf
Date: 7/30/2018 6:59:00 AM

Thank you, Sandy, I appreciate your comments and support. John

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/28/2018 5:34:00 PM

Congratulations on your #1 win. Beautiful and painful sonnet. Well done!

John Gondolf
Date: 7/28/2018 6:10:00 PM

Thank you, Susan, I appreciate it. John

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/28/2018 9:28:00 AM

What a sad but beautifully written Shakespearean Sonnet , John! I congratulate you on this top winning piece! Hugs and love. Pandita

John Gondolf
Date: 7/28/2018 9:43:00 AM

Thank you, Pandita, I appreciate your comments and support. If you get a chance, be sure to read my latest post, I think you might like it. John

Haley Fisher

Date: 7/28/2018 9:28:00 AM

Congrats John are your first place win. Well deserved. Such a possible sad reality. I felt the pain.

John Gondolf
Date: 7/28/2018 9:40:00 AM

Thank you so much, Haley, I appreciate It. John

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/28/2018 6:53:00 AM

This is so well written John..congrats on your trophy win!

John Gondolf
Date: 7/28/2018 8:04:00 AM

Thanks so much, Vijay, I appreciate it. John

Curtis Moorman

Date: 7/28/2018 5:49:00 AM

John, I lost my wife suddenly and I know wherewith you speak. In teaching at treatment centers for addiction, I ask this question. "If your next breath should be your last breath, where will you spend eternity?" It is obvious to me that you know the answer to that just as I do. Congratulations on a well written sonnet and a premium win, my friend.

John Gondolf
Date: 7/28/2018 6:43:00 AM

Thank you my friend, I appreciate your comments and support. John