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Love Blind Duo-Rhyme

I used to clearly see your face But now you’re gone; as if erased, Misplaced, or hid, or left behind, Or lost somewhere inside my mind I want you back; my heart is twined - A Celtic knot I can’t unwind That aches your loss; I feel consigned To memory’s unfair design How can I love you, yet be blind? You’re still a blank, still undefined I keep on searching, frantic paced I need to fill this empty space… 7/11/12

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/10/2012 1:39:00 PM

Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/9/2012 10:44:00 AM

A well deserved placement for you in the Duo-Rhyme contest. Congratulations Susan. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi

Date: 8/6/2012 9:12:00 AM

A very heartfelt write, Susan. I love your wordplay here.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/6/2012 1:05:00 AM

love the sublime images here, susan... sweet congrats on your win!..:) huggs

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 8/5/2012 12:54:00 PM

You always take my breath away with your poignant poetry, Susan! Another one to my fav's...congrats on your awesome win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/4/2012 6:31:00 AM

sigh..me & you both! [glad to see a bit of sophistication brought to this simple form] Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joseph May

Date: 8/4/2012 4:49:00 AM

nice write Susan....congrats on your win...love...Joseph

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 8/4/2012 4:00:00 AM

Congratulations Susan, a well deserved win.xx

David Williams

Date: 8/4/2012 2:19:00 AM

Susan congrats on your win,I love the Idea of the celtic knot line.. David...did you get my test email??

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/4/2012 12:20:00 AM

A lovely emotional tug on the heart with this winning entry Susan. Congratulations on your third place win.

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/3/2012 7:02:00 PM

Awesome and wonderful piece,Susan...Very romantic...Nice going.."How can I love you,yet be blind?"...Congratulations on your superb win...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/3/2012 6:59:00 PM

Susan, the Celtic knot had me all wrapped up in this one!! I love the clever way you presented your message of love's frustration within this duo-rhyme form. I know you told me it was difficult for you to write this kind of poetry but you CAME THROUGH, lady. You did GREAT, and big congrats on your well deserved win!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/2/2012 8:36:00 AM

beautiful and bittersweet Susan.. u did wonderful rhyme sequences too.. emotional.. best wishes .. know Andrea will luv it.. as I do..

William Hughes

Date: 7/17/2012 11:04:00 AM

There's a lot of feeling in this poem. I enjoyed it. Thank you.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 7/16/2012 9:00:00 AM

Your lines flow into one another so well, the poem just slips off the page into my mind. Beautiful.

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/15/2012 11:13:00 AM

Wow, Susan, you have impressed me a lot with this incredible write my friend! You have put together a great masterpiece here I believe! I really enjoyed reading this fine poem this afternoon, you'll do excellent in Andrea's contest! Great Work!!