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5/9/2024 for Sonnet - Untraditional Poetry Contest sponsored by Constance La France

"One word frees us of all the weight and pain of life. The word is love." Sophocles, Greek Poet I have forever loved you my dearest. I'd nothing to give, 'cept love, sincerest. Throughout my life, the thing I held nearest - A broken heart, through weather severest. Life on this earth can be a heavy weight. When I am alone, the burden feels great. Trudging down the road, helpless against fate, Living is confusing, hard to relate. Aimless traveling, a bum on a freight, Growing so weary, it's gotten so late. Survival is my goal in decade eight. Soon, I will be approaching heaven's gate. When the blessed day comes, and I take flight With an angel's wings, I will feel so light.

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Constance La France

Date: 5/12/2024 3:11:00 PM

David, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance

David Crandall
Date: 5/12/2024 3:15:00 PM

Thanks, Constance, for the prompt and the contest to get me going.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/12/2024 9:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work in Constance's contest winners' list. Way to go. Thank you for sharing it with us. Sara K

David Crandall
Date: 5/12/2024 10:38:00 AM

Thanks so much Sara!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/10/2024 6:31:00 AM

Hello David, your poem with Sophocles' quote is a beautiful exploration of love's power. The unwavering love, even amidst hardship is deeply felt. "Love, sincerest" feels like a lifeline in the face of "a broken heart" and life's burdens. I loved the final image of taking flight with "an angel's wings" showing love's transformative power, even beyond life—a touching piece. Good Luck on the Contest!- Blessings, Daniel

David Crandall
Date: 5/10/2024 9:57:00 AM

Thanks Daniel, I appreciate your read and kind comments!

Tom Woody

Date: 5/10/2024 5:18:00 AM

Survival in decade eight .. things get a little precarious at that age. Day to day until ... Nice poem David

David Crandall
Date: 5/10/2024 9:55:00 AM

Thanks Tom! I'm actually in the tail end of decade seven - still looking forward to decade eight (lol)!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/10/2024 4:19:00 AM

well done, David! Impressive Sonnet and great contest contender. I especially liked 'aimless traveling, a bum on a freight.' Best wishes with the contest, Sara

David Crandall
Date: 5/10/2024 9:50:00 AM

Thanks Sara, glad you liked it!

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/9/2024 7:00:00 PM

Dear David, a very emotive poem so poignantly expressed. Evocative imagery of life’s heartaches and hardships. I especially adored “aimless traveling, a bum on a freight” -wow! That really captures the essence of feeling lost and adrift. The despair of your couplet is sadly beautiful. Your artistry shines! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Crandall
Date: 5/9/2024 7:39:00 PM

Thanks Susan, I really appreciate that! I had just heard an old Joan Baez song, "Only Heaven Knows", I think for the first time, and I think it put me in the mood.