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Haiku 1

John's verdant garden, Is fraught with thousands of fruit-- Indeed his burden !

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Paul Callus

Date: 9/10/2016 3:02:00 PM

I like this haiku and the play on words, Sarban! Regards // paul

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/6/2016 6:29:00 AM

I think "fruits" should be singular, and removing the punctuation, I believe, will improve the phonetics. --- As to John's predicament apropos, the proverb: "Be carful what you wish for, you might get it." --- ©@®™

Sarban Bhattacharya
Date: 9/6/2016 6:48:00 AM

The word 'fruits' is much debated and a few consider this usage to be wrong. So I've changed it, Warlov.