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Haiku - Written June 25, 2014

every leaf stands still cold raindrops pelt hot pavement beast rumbling in sky

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P.M. Richter

Date: 7/22/2018 7:53:00 AM

Great haiku Elaine. I especially liked “cold raindrops pelt hot pavement”.

Elaine George
Date: 7/28/2018 7:34:00 AM

Thank you so much P.M. But you are truly the master of Haiku,

Sneha Rv

Date: 1/21/2018 4:32:00 AM

Oh what vivid imagery!! So much in three lines.. just beautiful :)

Ayesha Karim

Date: 2/5/2016 6:38:00 AM

Such vivid imagery! Nice!

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/7/2014 10:10:00 PM

Nice haiku - you stuck to the 5 7 5 formula which is all to the good. In New York we have invented a new form - 9 1 1 syllables. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Vassilis Comporozos

Date: 8/23/2014 2:51:00 PM

truly haiku...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/23/2014 4:56:00 PM

Elaine :) Thank you for the sweet reply, on my comment. I'm a little late, getting back to all the replies, left a while back. XOX ~LINDA~

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/17/2014 1:13:00 PM

This fine write bristles my brain, creates exciting volatility, and is sexually arousing to me Lainie...J.A.B.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/10/2014 11:25:00 AM

loving this one again..PD

Daver Austin

Date: 7/3/2014 11:06:00 AM

The ominous comes through beautifully. Hi again. I've been having stomach problems. Been in the hospital for 10 days, but feeling much better now. How about you? Hope you are in great health. Love, Dave

Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2014 4:03:00 PM

I am find, Dave. Glad you are feeling better. bfn Lainie

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/2/2014 9:34:00 PM

Hi Elaine, how are you, stopping by this one again, making sure summer, remains the same.. LOL It's so hot down here in Texas, everything stands still... Always enjoying you.....Linda

Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2014 3:51:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Linda. I have been away and just getting caught up. bfn Elaine

Donna Jones

Date: 6/30/2014 5:50:00 PM

Loved this....congratulations on your win...

David Mohn

Date: 6/29/2014 7:44:00 PM

This is really wonderful and descriptive Elaine...congrats

Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2014 3:53:00 PM

Thank you, David. bfn Lainie

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/29/2014 4:06:00 PM

i knew this would place well, lainie.. suberbly scribed.. cheers to you on your fine win.. hugggs

Elaine George
Date: 6/29/2014 6:57:00 PM

Thank you Nette. I have not perfected the haiku style, but I am working on it. bfn Elaine

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/29/2014 11:25:00 AM

My dear friend, Elaine, this is such a beautifully descriptive write! Huge congratulations to you on your great win! Warmest regards.

Elaine George
Date: 6/29/2014 6:58:00 PM

Thank you, Pandita, for your very kind comments. bfn your poetry friend, Elaine

Arlene Smith

Date: 6/29/2014 9:55:00 AM

congrats on a great win with this wonderful hiaku, Elaine. Hugs... Arlene

Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2014 3:52:00 PM

Thank you, Arlene, bfn Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2014 11:03:00 PM

So glad to see one of your poems in my contest, Elaine. Are you back here to stay? I sure hope so. I'm seeing more and more of you at soup now. I really liked your slant on summer, doing a rainy scene for us. a small suggestion. Haiku do not need capitalization. I'm trying to spread the word! Congrats to you.

Elaine George
Date: 6/29/2014 6:56:00 PM

Hi Andrea, Haiku is not one of my strong poetic genres, but I am working on it. I am here as long as time permits. You know me...I come and go. Still working on the novel...re-write after re-write. bfn Elaine

Paul Callus

Date: 6/26/2014 1:44:00 PM

Lovely haiku, Elaine. Exactly how summer weather goes...calm, sudden rain and thunderbolts. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 6/29/2014 6:19:00 AM

Congratulations!:)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/25/2014 10:21:00 PM

Elaine, WOW.. Amazing, sounds like a summer rain, and thunder... I don't like the mix, however I love the haiku... LOL...Love Linda

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/25/2014 12:26:00 PM

from leaf to beast, what a splendid turnabout which is the mark of a grreat 'ku., lainie... much enjoyed!.. huggs

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/25/2014 10:55:00 AM

Dear Lainie, You haiku paints a vivid description of the rain dropped by the "rumbling" beast in the sky. What a remarkable write! (Glad you believe in past lives too. There is room for 8 more entries in the contest.) Love and blessings, carolyn