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Freezing Point

The river flowing tumble of snow jackets the buildings and the road on the last twilight of 1998. As the sky is slowly draped by darkness and coolness, there I am on the coldest loneliest walk of my life. All around, I can see some dancing colored lights. The houses spells the happy shadows of families. Some sharing a meal. Some laughing out loud near their Christmas tree. Some on the middle of a party. Christmas carols flying free on mid-air like: "...But heaven surely knows That packages and bows Can never heal a hurting human soul..." With only a coat, long thick black hair kissed by snow and some old worn socks to warm me, I traverse the street-- finding, finding a place I can call home. About six days ago... I was also with my parents, so happy, though we only share some bread and cheese plus porridge that Christmas day. Me and my parents hugged every night allowing me to stand the icy nights of December under the roof of our wooden worn-out home. My parents though they can't read nor write, they diligently work day by day for our needs specially mine. I wasn't given any gift nor we can't everyday eat some meat. However, my days with them are filled with fun-loving memories. Not until... a monstrous fire eat voraciously our home and three other houses nearby. My father though old with arthritis carried me fast as he can to a safe place and so my mother but --- father ran back to the house to save some of our things but unfortunately... The roof of our home fell. The fire so ferocious swallowed everything including my father. My mom and I dealt with this pit of tragedy as one but later I saw my mother slowly, slowly crumbling down. She more than me is slowly falling down faster. Her lamp of hope blown out. And not long, past six on the same day my mother died. Hence as the surrounding gets cold so is the the life of me gradually reaching the freezing point. --------------------------------- ***Inspired by the story: The Little Match Girl by H.C. Andersen and with some lines from the song: "My Grown Up Christmas List" by K. Clarkson ©O. E. Guillermo Sponsor Debbie Guzzi Contest Name A Christmas Tale Placed 2nd 08:33 pm, December 17, 2014

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Date: 1/11/2015 9:16:00 PM
Olive, congratulations on your win. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 3/6/2015 7:43:00 AM
thank you Lolly Linda.. :) is that your baby?
Date: 1/6/2015 12:22:00 AM
So touchy Olive, congrats on the win...huggs
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Date: 1/6/2015 6:53:00 AM
thanks much.. :D!
Date: 1/5/2015 5:21:00 PM
Well done once again, Olive_eloi!:) Back to congratulate you on this lovely Christmas tale. I'll recommend you to Santa for a nice gift next year:) hugs // paul
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Date: 1/6/2015 6:51:00 AM
weeeeeee.. yes please.. I am always trying to be a good girl.. :D!
Date: 1/5/2015 12:01:00 PM
such a sad tale so beautifully penned Olive - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/6/2015 6:51:00 AM
thanks much JAn.. :D! God bless you and hugs..
Date: 1/5/2015 8:18:00 AM
Touchy and heartfelt expressions, congrats on the win, Olive
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Date: 1/6/2015 6:50:00 AM
thanks much Dr. Ram.. :)! God bless you always.. :D!
Date: 12/20/2014 7:38:00 AM
- Hey Olive .... a Christmas smile to you :) - I wish you and your family a peaceful and lovely Christmas - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/21/2014 7:23:00 AM
thanks much Anne Lise... :)! likewise to you.. :)! love lots.. :)!!!
Date: 12/19/2014 3:08:00 PM
I had a similar experience at 15, and my, this stirring poem grips me... mahusay na tula,, eloi.. still here? let's go!.. huggs
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Date: 12/21/2014 12:22:00 AM
where Nette?! hehehe Happy Pasko.. :)
Date: 12/18/2014 1:36:00 PM
Powerful, heartfelt, and brought home to me as it takes me back, aged 6, escaping our burning house in the middle of Winter. The start of a serious of events that blew my world apart. Another wonderful poem Olive. Your gift of writing is starting to bloom big style, and I'm so glad I'll be following you to witness you flourish poem after poem, James :) :) xx
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Date: 12/18/2014 4:37:00 PM
thanks much James again with your comments I didn't know this has ever happened to you... though am glad that despite such you are a wow now...
Date: 12/17/2014 1:45:00 PM
A very good tale, Olive_eloi, but such a sad ending!! Those two final lines are very expressive and make a great climax. gl in the contest. hugs // paul
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Date: 12/18/2014 8:12:00 AM
thanks PAul.. :)!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/18/2014 8:03:00 AM
This again inspired by the knowledge that on Christmas day not all ar e happy esp those who are homeless and with no one . Hence I hope that each one of us will whisper a prayer for them.. :)!
Date: 12/17/2014 7:33:00 AM
Such a sad tragic tale Olive. I felt as if I was there watching her. Great penmanship.
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Date: 12/18/2014 8:00:00 AM
Thank much Brenda.. :)! I really wish that it is what the reader felt.. :)! GOd bless you.. :)!

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