Fog Over Water

A smoky feel wafts across the water As the fog rolls thick over sloshy feel Ripples are there and surely all over As drops from the fog enter lake’s appeal As the fog rolls thick over sloshy feel Breathing in the soupy air that’s about As drops from the fog enter lake’s appeal Drafts of the fog fly lower and more stout Breathing in the soupy air that’s about There’s a tender feel with this airy heart Drafts of the fog fly lower and more stout The fog is more than a ground cloud depart There’s a tender feel with this airy heart Swirling about the wind moves the white cloud The fog is more than a ground cloud depart Life extends beyond the bounds that’s allowed Swirling about the wind moves the white cloud Leaving wavelets on the water below Life extends beyond the bounds that’s allowed Water acts as a screen blocking the glow Leaving wavelets on the water below Ripples are there and surely all over Water acts as a screen blocking the glow A smoky feel wafts across the water Russell Sivey
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014


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Date: 3/8/2014 6:39:00 AM
A write Russel worthy of Odin the god of poetry himself. It transcends the every day and adds magic, fantastic pen Hugs PS I have rewritten the final part of Journey through Time
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Date: 3/6/2014 2:48:00 PM
You've captured the fog brilliantly in this Pantoum Russell. Enjoyed reading this today - Connie
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Date: 3/5/2014 5:31:00 PM
tenderness in the fog. I liked that interesting way of describing it Russell. you sure have done a lot of pantoum poems by now!!
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Date: 3/5/2014 11:32:00 AM
Life extends beyond boundaries till it reaches the glow behind the fog.A beautiful poem wafting to my heart as I read
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Date: 3/5/2014 5:56:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your work this morning..Pantoums are no so easy to write..You have done good connecting with the already written lines..Thanks for the visits to my pages..Sara
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Date: 3/5/2014 5:26:00 AM
Russell, The fog is captured in this poetic mind's eye, transcending inspiration's boundaries. My best, chuck
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Date: 3/4/2014 8:59:00 AM
how well you have written this poem, superb, russell... images fall well in place and flow like wavelets' rolling over sloshy feel'.. a dynamo! huggs!
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Date: 3/4/2014 7:43:00 AM
I very much enjoy this old form and you have written it with great skill. Thanks for commenting on and inspiring my Rispetto.
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Date: 3/4/2014 7:21:00 AM
You have so perfected rhyme in poetry that it serves you dutifully,no doubt this a classic pantoum that will surely go into record as one of the best.Kudos my friend.
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