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written for the elegy contest sponsored by constance la france. I wrote about my late uncle, i was talking about writing an elegy to my twin sister, and she and i reminisced our late uncle, although i wasnt sure if i wanted to get there, and switch on the grieving, that is always there somewhere within, but sometimes we just learn to go on like the quote iv used says. But then, last night when i went to sleep, i closed my eyes, and i saw him, after a long time... smiling.. so this, i wrote... with love and tears.  He was very young and charismatic and my favorite uncle and still is.. (sorry for the rambling)

Elegy for my late Uncle

 
“Grief is like the ocean. The waves ebb and flow. Sometimes the water is calm. Other times it's turbulent. In order to survive, I had to learn to swim. In moments when I struggled with massive waves of grief, I rode it out.” Dana Arcuri
When the pearl moon is sinking and the sea dreams in silence, when the skies reflect the sunrise within sighs, I close my eyes and unlock my grieving heart. There, your sincere smile glows like a string of golden pearls, and your song, an echoing melody, while jasmine rain croons into the mourning mists. And I whisper to the stars: show me what it's like in heaven, where angels and fairies sway to your vanilla laughter, for I am still healing from the shadows of your demise. I remember, I was a teenage tempest dressed in crusts of raven, but you saw unicorns and butterflies soaring above whirling waves of angst. and wove my darkness with acrylic glitter. You were the antidote to my bleeding ink. you were the sakura spring among my tattered twigs, you watched me laugh into the gothic duskiness. Somehow seeking fireflies within my summer maze, did illuminate your weathered time, like rainbow roses, engrossed in emerald empathy. You always knew the right phrase to rhyme, subtle syllables to write every wrong. You were my comfort on lonely days. The uncle, I cherish, so young and charismatic… Orchids in your orchard still sprout~ flaunting their colors in your mauve memory, and your seraphic aura lingers as the magnetic essence of eternal warmth. Now I am draped in mementos and euphonious wind-chimes, emanating the fragrance of evergreen grass and soulful sunflowers. Someday, I will find my way to your empyrean home, where you reside in poetry and affection…
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Date: 8/7/2024 1:35:00 PM
Ink, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful and emotional elegy poem, I liked it a lot, well done, love the quote too, Constance
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Date: 7/23/2024 6:41:00 PM
"I whisper to the stars: show me what it's like in heaven, where angels and fairies sway to your vanilla laughter" - Very beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/23/2024 9:46:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely write/tribute for your late Uncle again. Have a wonderful day writing away................
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Date: 7/23/2024 7:47:00 AM
Just so beautiful Sweet girl! Your memories of your uncle are so precious…he would be so proud of you and the loving words you wrote for him….Those memories will keep your heart warm! Lovely tribute Sweet Ink! Debx
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Date: 7/23/2024 5:04:00 AM
this is an absolute gem. i hope you find your uncle in heaven, ink <3
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Date: 7/22/2024 9:33:00 PM
This is so beautiful and completely comprehensible for me as well as touching. Congrats on a well deserved win. A fave
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Date: 7/22/2024 1:50:00 AM
The love stays, and the hurts stay much longer. Dear, Inky you have written this from your heart and I can feel it. I always resonate with your poems. It hits me right on the spot like, it's a direct talk. I've never had the guts to write about the two things that make me shed tears. I just thought about that right now. I wanted to in Silent One " I couldn't talk about it so I wrote a poem." My pen didn't move. So I stopped. You are strong and you are talented. I miss my uncle so much, he was-
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Tonye George
Date: 7/22/2024 1:55:00 AM
The closest human I had as a father. Now I just cry and wish. "for I am still healing from the shadows of your demise. I remember, I was a teenage tempest dressed in crusts of raven." Thank you for comforting me and telling me it's not abnormal to cry after this long time. Best wishes for the contest. A great entry.
Date: 7/20/2024 5:19:00 AM
As usual, you are pouring out your feelings in beautiful, deeply moving poetry. The demise of a dear one especially at a young age is so soul shattering. I can sense the depth of the bond you had with your uncle. One who understands our inner feelings in times when we are down with grief and comes to us with words of consolation will stay forever in our heart. I had a first cousin who was of my age who died in a scooter accident some forty four years back. He stayed in our house during the first year of his college study. His fond memories still haunt me. I can very well relate to your feelings, sweet friend. "Someday, I will find my way to your empyrean home, where you reside in poetry and affection… " A beautiful conclusion to your great tribute.
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Date: 7/19/2024 8:44:00 PM
the sense of longing is so palpable that your verse becomes a slice of meaningful life...a grreat offering, ink !
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Date: 7/19/2024 2:00:00 PM
You have done an elegy in your own unique style and like you say this is how your poetic pen thinks and that is really impressive.. So many people can touch our lives, I have some great uncles, but they live so far... I can see you were very close to him and have expressed that with deep emotive lines like.. "you saw unicorns and butterflies soaring above whirling waves of angst." I am happy someone understood you during those difficult times.. We dont want to be a misunderstood metaphor..
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Date: 7/19/2024 1:27:00 PM
Very beautiful- love the feeling of the chimes speaking his memory, a pleasure to come across your art today <3
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Date: 7/19/2024 11:45:00 AM
You must have loved him very much. I have been in the last couple or more years been dreaming about my favorite uncle and aunt who passed probably fifty years ago. I have missed and thought about them so much over the years but then the dreams about them when they were young even before my time seems so real. Your work reads like a good contender to me for the contest. way to go. Sara K
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Date: 7/19/2024 10:05:00 AM
A lovely write/tribute for your late Uncle. So Sorry... Thanks for the note on the top. I enjoyed reading this one with a great ending. Good memories are the best kind to have. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away..................
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Date: 7/19/2024 9:01:00 AM
Such a loss. Your uncle resonates to have been one of those few special persons who light a young person's life. I felt the warmth of your tribute.
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Date: 7/19/2024 7:32:00 AM
Ooo that opening line though!! pearl moon is sinking and the sea dreams in silence,.. love the imagery ..healing from the shadows of your demise… your sincere smile.. a string of golden pearls, your song, an echoing melody, while jasmine rain croons into the mourning mists. the heaviness in these lines r amazing.. flaunting their colors in your mauve memory, I am draped in mementos ... I will find my way to your empyrean home, mmmm the flow is effortless papi.. gorgeous!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/20/2024 5:44:00 AM
Um, okaaaay lol
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Lioness Onpaper
Date: 7/19/2024 8:39:00 AM
Papi means “ father” she is my father figure in life … she my daddy!!! Pure papi!!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/19/2024 8:14:00 AM
I have to ask... what does papi mean?
Date: 7/19/2024 7:20:00 AM
Such a beautiful tribute Inky. I can't think of any relatives I feel this way about, but still I have some pleasant memories from my childhood. Your uncle must have been quite a fellow
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Date: 7/19/2024 6:55:00 AM
It’s so sad … brings back so many memories . Wish he was still around .
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