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Dedicated to my Mother, Shirley Faye Hundley.
Birthday Wishes: Horatian Ode Sweet sixteen with no happy birthday cake. Oh, Mother, you're missed but I am bitter. How many hundreds did your calloused hands make? So steady, so sure, why do they quiver? A Mother who has no thought for herself, A daughter too immature to think to help. A lovely, womanly form, but only Momma to me.. Oh Momma, she has your eyes so you can watch over me. Abducted suddenly from youth, captive in haggardly age, Your battle with scalpels left their jagged marks… Just as your ancestral Natives wore paint when war raged, It was your way to push back at the dark. If time were a river, I'd gladly jump right in… To dark, freezing waters, no matter, I'd swim… To try to give back a portion of your goodness and light, Stand with my back to yours and together we'd fight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 6/14/2024 1:31:00 PM
Hey Crystol.. Your poem is a touching tribute to a mother’s sacrifices and the daughter’s longing to repay her. It captures the essence of familial love and the deep emotional bonds that persist beyond physical presence. The poem’s imagery and emotional resonance make it a compelling and memorable piece...
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/17/2024 11:10:00 PM
Appreciate the review and commentary! You always make my writing sound so much better! ;)<3 tysm!xo
Date: 6/13/2024 1:19:00 PM
A lovely tribute, Crystol. I especially liked this metaphor: If time were a river, I'd gladly jump right in… To dark, freezing waters, no matter, I'd swim
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/13/2024 6:45:00 PM
Thanks Andrea! Your lovely!
Date: 6/13/2024 1:55:00 AM
I have read all your poems now. This one, the most intriguing, to me. "Oh Momma, she has your eyes so you can watch over me." Strong, elusive write.
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Candide Diderot
Date: 6/13/2024 9:24:00 AM
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Crystol Woods
Date: 6/13/2024 9:11:00 AM
Well hello! You read them all!?! I feel so honored! Thank you. I hope something I've written will connect with others and you've given that hope wings. I will have to get to know you in return and visit your poetry page! Xoxo
Date: 6/12/2024 7:56:00 PM
Wow Crystol what a powerful tender poem! It made me feel quite sad for you and your mum. Beautifully written! Debx
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