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The Rudiments of Wings

Time is exhausting… It lays in wait to provoke you pinches that part of you that hurts most, tears away at your ambition, laughs at your inability to stand up and fight futile battles that bury you. Try to escape, but like that little hamster on its wheel you will go nowhere. 2-20-22 This or That, Vol 10 Poetry Contest~N/A~ Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh The Rudiments of Wings

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 7/26/2022 3:01:00 PM

Hi Connie, this is a little different for you. The piece is filled with deep thoughts yet it is a wonderful write. The message is so true. This should do well in the contest, Connie. I always believe that the wings shall one day fly and the hamster shall leave the wheel. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX

Bill Baker

Date: 5/10/2022 4:51:00 PM

A touching and mindful poem, Connie. Great entry for the contest. Bill

Valsa George

Date: 2/25/2022 11:01:00 PM

Agree with what Andrea has opined ! This is a slice of real life with a touch of pain and irony and never fictional ! All the Best in the Contest dear friend !

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/25/2022 7:50:00 AM

Connie, yes, this must be why I found your poem here so special. Mine was fictional while yours was not!! (finally posted mine and you have seen it now) Oh wait, did you do one about yourself for Broken hearts? I can't recall if I saw that one then. I will go check.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/25/2022 10:47:00 AM

I did one called Oh My Son Andrea. It was an older poem about when he ran off to live with his bio dad and now I don’t have him at all. 44 is way too young to die. Thanks xxoo

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 2/24/2022 7:45:00 AM

Oh, this is so powerful! A perfect entry for the contest. All the best Connie.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/24/2022 10:59:00 AM

Thank you Swetha. I tried to write something he would like. Blessings xxoo

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 2/23/2022 8:53:00 PM

Feels like echoes from the dark abyss of time, powerful entry for the contest, Connie!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/24/2022 11:00:00 AM

Thank you Seeker. I hope it appeals to him. Blessings xxoo

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/23/2022 3:15:00 PM

Feeling like a hamster today! The noise hovering…

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 5:13:00 PM

I can relate. I am finally in the house alone this afternoon and able to read and try to write something. Have a more peaceful day tomorrow my friend. Thank you. Blessings xxoo

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 2/23/2022 9:41:00 AM

Dear Connie, you have taken the challenge in such a creative way! Your free verse sounds enchanting! Love and blessings ~ Mala

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 5:15:00 PM

Thank you very much Mala. It is different than my usual Poetry that is very positive. I hope it appeals to him. Blessings xxoo

Joanna Daniel

Date: 2/23/2022 5:53:00 AM

Love these deep thoughts, Connie:)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 5:15:00 PM

Thank you very much Jo. Time seems to fly away these days, faster than I can chase it. Blessings xxoo

Eve Roper

Date: 2/22/2022 4:08:00 PM

Time does pinch that part of you that hurts most, tears gather than dry out because the well has run dry.... lovely verse, Connie. Blessings my friend

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 5:17:00 PM

Thank you very much Eve. I have been so busy as of late because my daughter was away and my nine-year-old granddaughter wants all of Grammys attention. Blessings xxoo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/22/2022 4:00:00 PM

wow, like time flying away on the wing. I would never have thought to go there. Wait till you see mine. I took it so literally. I wish I could think in a more abstract way. it would help me so much with free verse. Anyway, love how you took this challenge.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 5:17:00 PM

PS I looked for your entry but did not see it. You must not have posted it yet?

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/23/2022 12:51:00 PM

Exactly! Thank you Andrea. I hope it appeals to Edward. I know it is different than my usual positive poems. I will go see yours now. Blessings xxoo

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/22/2022 12:46:00 PM

Wow! Connie, You've penned such a well poem on the contest theme. I echo what John said. Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day-to-day operations s

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/22/2022 2:17:00 PM

Thank you Alexis. I tried to give him something other than my usual. Have a great week. Blessings xxoo

Joe Dimino

Date: 2/22/2022 9:42:00 AM

Everything subject to time...except Time~got to get even somehow. Love it, Connie. Well said!

John Watt

Date: 2/21/2022 1:11:00 PM

A very thought-provoking write on time and how it erodes away at your ambitions and fortitude. I feel like this sometimes, a little existential angst creeps in and it's nice to see these thoughts put into your beautiful free verse poetry. Well done, my friend.

Silent One

Date: 2/21/2022 10:19:00 AM

A profound take on the prompt and I like the wisdom behind your words... an out of the box take on the theme and one that i am sure the sponsor will find thought provoking..

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/22/2022 1:07:00 PM

I hope so as it was with him in mind that I wrote this. Thank you Silent. : ) blessings xxoo

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 2/20/2022 4:31:00 PM

Hello Connie ... we really have got to understand the value of time during this pandemic, so many of us do feel like the Hamster on the wheel - once again, thanks for posting your fine poetry Connie - Lindsay

Robert L. Hinshaw

Date: 2/20/2022 2:36:00 PM

So true and insightful, Connie! Best to you and enjoy the warm weather in Hawaii - cold and snowy here in Colorado - Bob H

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 2/22/2022 2:15:00 PM

Our warm weather is definitely a boost for feeling optimistic. I really feel for the northern states right now in 1° weather. I have been out in really cold weather in Kansas,Colorado, Michigan, Maine, and New York and other cold states and I feel for everyone who has to deal with that kind of cold. I have a friend in Colorado that keeps me posted and it’s pretty darn cold right now. I hope spring arrives early for you. Thank you. Blessings xxoo

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/20/2022 10:28:00 AM

Time may seem stuck like a gramophone needle in a record but the wheel of the gods grind slowly . . . . . .

Linda Milgate

Date: 2/20/2022 9:54:00 AM

sounds like everyone is dealing with the darkness of these days.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/20/2022 9:37:00 AM

We all feel like that poor hamster at times Connie, but we mustn't ever give up on hope that better days will come. Hope you're well. Tom

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/20/2022 6:33:00 AM

Ah, so true of life, but its those clipped wings that long to fly away one day, oh they will they will, when the wind is strong enough Mount Everest it is, love and prayers, for better days Connie, xo

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/20/2022 6:03:00 AM

You explored this theme in eloquent vocabulary, Connie: tears away at your ambition---laughs at your inability to stand up and fight futile battles that bury you... You always shine in gift of words!