Wave Goodbye Dear Lena

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Photos Dipped in wine Tear drops Emotional scares Upon my face The past stares right back Into my broken windows Baby boy With teddy bear nightmares Grown up man Fighting his monsters War of the depressed mind I fought no real war Other than my own dancing demons Now each word and thought attacks me My demise My destitution Stare at myself outside the broken door Broken memories Broken shelf Broken wings and sins Eating away No will No hope For the sun To kiss my humble lips As I wither away Dear Lena

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/18/2017 10:29:00 PM

this is heartbreaking when we get to the end and see Dear Lena!! Love your imagery here , Arthur and that picture of the beautiful girl in pink.type line 4 (scars)

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/15/2017 11:47:00 AM

Emotionally gripping piece Arthur, well done...

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/14/2017 8:35:00 PM

Such a deeply sorrow filled piece Arthur. I wanted to stop the sadness so I read really really slow..silly...yes. A moving, excellent write. many blessings to you :-) lynn

Carol B.

Date: 3/14/2017 6:06:00 PM

So sad Arthur. Never lose hope! :)

Darren White

Date: 3/14/2017 10:07:00 AM

I can only do what I do best, wrap my arms around you from a distance, and hold you. We all fight our own wars, but we don't need to do it all alone <3

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/14/2017 6:48:00 AM

Moving intensity in the first photo and the matching, if not surpassing, sadness in the wonderful poem ... a rustle in "As I wither away" ...

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/14/2017 3:03:00 AM

I can feel the sorrow of the poet in this one...Heartbreakingly sad dear Art. Some people are so special its hard to let go.

Tim Smith

Date: 3/13/2017 10:17:00 PM

Achingly beautiful Arthur...Your heart will be at one with her one day...patience