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Watch how you go

Watch how you go As you rush home from work The speed of your ride Spawning dangers to lurk The curve of the bend As you screech to your goal The curse of Diablo Is taking its toll The bus up ahead Holding valuable souls Has stopped at the sign To offload them home Your thinking is quick The braking is harsh The vehicle careers Into the slow cooling marsh

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David Bose

Date: 9/30/2024 9:28:00 AM

Nice, Leigh, congratulations. I, too, liked your "valuable souls", especially reading they're being offloaded home. Good Job! Dave

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2024 9:48:00 PM

Great job here. Big congrats

Miranda Hawley

Date: 9/29/2024 6:05:00 PM

The fact that you even dared to use the word Diablo, alone got this to the winner's circle. However, your line of "Holding valuable souls" is exactly the right message. Great job on your win in my concept.