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Unspoken Regrets

as the weight of my breath becomes one heavy mist gathering smoke on the floor, until i holler inside my lungs as if to collapse or disintegrate into a pool of mashed bones… i call you privately a silence totally numbing my senses, through nipped murmurs as we are now strangers in the rain with fractured hands, drunk on interludes of unfinished tunes while the moon in your eyes blinds me, naked. .................................. Contest of Laura Loo: Deep and Dark ll Submitted 10/25/2017

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Date: 11/6/2017 12:36:00 AM
Congrats, Nette!
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Date: 10/28/2017 10:25:00 PM
Nette, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:39:00 PM
A gem of a poem, Nette. Congratulations!
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Date: 10/27/2017 4:59:00 PM
That last line, Nette! Congrats on a fine win! <3 Kim
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:59:00 AM
Potent pen! Congratulations on your win :) xomo!
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Date: 10/27/2017 9:18:00 AM
Awesome word selection and combinations, Congrats on another win Nette!
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Date: 3/14/2016 1:06:00 AM
Of Kerosene, but still stars.... innovative...and of course meaningful... Embroidered sighs..Congrats...
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Date: 3/13/2016 10:14:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. Thank you so much for supporting my contest. Stop by my blog "LAST CALL" if you like. ((( note from MEakaPD Thank you ALL for waiting and chilling, while I sat on the sideline. Since March 1st, I moved to the 4th largest city in the USA (by population.) One of the hardest decisions EVER-EVER!!! I will keep short on my visits until April 1st. After that, there's no holding me back LOL -unless God has other plans. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 8/17/2015 11:05:00 AM
Congrats on ur superb win Nette! Love the way ur pen flows!
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Date: 8/16/2015 9:40:00 PM
Nette,, Congrats on your win. ~SKAT~
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Date: 8/14/2015 6:59:00 PM
Nette :) Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by my latest blog "Poem for One Victim" if you'd like or have time. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 4/14/2014 2:19:00 PM
beautiful imagery throughout, and I love those "kerosene stars"! congrats on your win in chris' contest :)
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Date: 4/13/2014 6:12:00 AM
As captivating as ever Nette! Awesome write wid great win !! Congrats !!
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Date: 4/13/2014 3:25:00 AM
Won nicely Nette and congratulations girlfriend... Verlena
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Date: 4/12/2014 10:56:00 PM
nice win, love ~SKAT~
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Date: 4/12/2014 10:21:00 PM
Congratulations on a fine win on your wonderful piece of poetry, nette
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Date: 4/12/2014 7:03:00 PM
Nette, awesome win...PD
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Date: 4/12/2014 6:41:00 PM
Big congratulations, nette for your win with this poem of unique imagery. I really enjoy seeing Chris' winners here today.
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Date: 4/12/2014 6:40:00 PM
Nette - Please Soup Mail me and tell me how the HECK you came up line 4 of the first verse! AMAZING, as is the entire lyric - Tim----PS: Richard's comment below says it all...
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Date: 4/12/2014 2:31:00 PM
You speak with hushed tones and we are helpless but to listen in awe. Congratulations on your fine win Nette.
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Date: 3/9/2014 6:00:00 AM
Wow! Fantastic phrasing and images here. The last stanza is incredibly powerful.
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Date: 3/7/2014 6:50:00 PM
This is stunning, and as I often do, I must read it more than once, to grasp each metaphor. Wonderful Nette! Before I leave, I must thank you once again.....for the honor to place in your contest. Thank you very much!!
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Date: 3/4/2014 11:56:00 AM
Just simply amazing as always...I love your work nett
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Date: 3/4/2014 10:56:00 AM
Amazing phrases.
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Date: 3/3/2014 7:49:00 PM
Mystical, magical work here. Hope you keep it up! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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