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8/20/2022

Poetry form:  Lyric

A sauté of unsolicited advice with a dash of fun.  All we're trying to do is get rid of the bitterness and make the rest of the flavors pop.  Yummy!

Unsolicited Advice

Unsolicited advice
against its storm I brace
Showing no fear or shame
as they get up in my face

In other words ...

They tell me to zig
when I'm zagging
"Hurry up man!"
when I'm lagging

"That's not the way
I'd do it!" they opine
"Better listen to me,
get to it!" every time

Hmm, if that's true
then I'll know
just what to do
when I am you!

More precisely ...

When I do what you say
in my own peculiar way
You stand
beaming with pride
taking credit

If I dare to complain
you declare me insane
then expose me to
ridicule on Reddit
(You don't regret it—
there, I've said it!)

Now I had my say
what will you do?
Hopefully MYOB
not misconstrue

"We just told you
the best way to go
You must listen to us
don’t you know?”

Thanks! If that's true
then I'll know
just what to do
when I am you!

As odd as that sounds
it must be true
I'll be doing sooo much better
when I am you!




8/20/2022

Poetry form:  Lyric

A sauté of unsolicited advice with a dash of fun.  All we're trying to do is get rid of the bitterness and make the rest of the flavors pop.  Yummy!

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Date: 9/13/2022 1:31:00 AM
It is easy to advice others . Some people always appear with 'unsolicited advice'.Such pople are rather annoying.... Enjoyed your poem with a pinch of humor, dear Toney!
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Mark Toney
Date: 9/13/2022 9:40:00 AM
Thank you for your encouraging comment, Valsa. I am guilty as charged when it comes to offering unsolicited advice to my sons through the years. Interestingly, now that I'm getting older my sons have turned the tables on me. I wouldn't have it any other way ;)
Date: 9/13/2022 1:26:00 AM
Interesting, different, and clever, (sounds of real life in there too?)
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Mark Toney
Date: 9/13/2022 9:30:00 AM
Thank you for your nice comment, Harry. Sounds of real life for sure!
Date: 8/30/2022 5:56:00 AM
Reading the other poetic side of you, Mark is so thrilling! Your advice is so effective as you have chosen to display it in a so humorous impressive poetry! I so much liked and enjoyed the read! Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and beauties! My deepest regards and blessings.
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Mark Toney
Date: 8/30/2022 10:03:00 AM
Besma, you've made my day! Thank you so much for your generous words of encouragement! I am happy to know that you enjoyed the spirit in which the poem is presented. Best wishes to you and your dear family.
Date: 8/27/2022 5:35:00 PM
Hi Mark….a great poem cleverly written. Those types of people are awful….so just do it yourself then!! Enjoyed…Debx
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Mark Toney
Date: 8/27/2022 7:25:00 PM
Deb, I’m glad you liked my poem. Thank you for the encouragement!
Date: 8/27/2022 2:40:00 PM
I love sarcastic poetry and this is a real beauty for that, Mark. Very clever and I am so happy you liked my pearl!
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Mark Toney
Date: 8/27/2022 7:23:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! I enjoyed “The Pearl” and also appreciate your participation in my 2022 Poetry Marathon.
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