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Shadowed Night Grew Cold

I was crushed and miserable from love unfulfilled Like a mourning dove whose blood had been spilled I cried in deep lament as shadowed night grew cold Sorrow burgeoned my heart with miseries untold Overwhelmed with fear, l fell to somberly weeping Wisps of silver moonlight crossed the sky, sweeping It was a pale light in darkness; my hopes were felled On the edge of oblivion with sullen thoughts, I dwelled My eyes tormented, I searched for benevolence anew How I longed to take flight, trading grey skies for blue In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread I longed to soar among shining stars at great height No longer bemused and alone on such a mawkish night I wished for wings so I could soar with poetic volition Without fetters keeping me tied to melancholy perdition May 15, 2023 Couplet Poetry Contest Sponsored by Sotto Poet

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/18/2023 10:31:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win ... a well-deserved 1st place, Lin :) - hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2023 10:41:00 AM

Thank you for your kindness and comments, Anne-Lise.

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/16/2023 9:22:00 PM

Wow! Lin, This is so well written. I found it to have a profound sadness, however, the later part was uplifting with a ray of hope. Excellent job. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved. Have a great evening-Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2023 10:41:00 AM

You are very discerning with insight, Alexis. I've watched you grow in confidence to do just that along with writing. Thank you for so many comments you've offered over the years.

Valsa George

Date: 5/16/2023 8:04:00 PM

"In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread/ I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread"...... Lovely lines. A poem so deep and profound depicting the silent sorrow of a grieving heart that has lost the love of the dear one. Congratulations Lin on your first place win.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2023 10:39:00 AM

Dear Valsa, your comments are very supportive of what I try to reflect in poetry. Thank you.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/16/2023 7:23:00 PM

Each couplet is very powerful. Congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2023 10:37:00 AM

Hi Chris, and thank you.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/16/2023 6:45:00 PM

In need of faith and courage instead of dismal dread I yearned for paradise where happiness is daily bread…Congratulations, Lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2023 10:37:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Kim.

Jay Narain

Date: 5/16/2023 12:20:00 PM

nice poem

Lin Lane
Date: 5/16/2023 12:51:00 PM

Thanks very much, Jay.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/16/2023 11:49:00 AM

LIN, Your writing is excellent and descriptive. Your winning couplet in my contest deserves earnest acclaim. Congratulations on your win.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/16/2023 12:03:00 PM

Thank you very much, Lasaad. I'm honored by your comments and having a place on your winning list.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/14/2023 11:18:00 PM

One cannot but admire your sentimental feelings.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/15/2023 12:18:00 AM

Victor, I’m glad to learn of your admiration for the sentiments in my poetry. Sincere thanks.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/14/2023 9:14:00 PM

Reads like your wish came true:) Like a phoenix you rose from the ashes. Very nice Lin.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/14/2023 10:10:00 PM

I guess I did, Danny, though not from any recent life experiences. Thanks for your insightful perspective.