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Our bank accounts nearly emptied so we could afford a vacation; two young working girls who'd never been far from home. We were looking forward to finding love on a romantic tropical island. Maybe someone in our group would cast his smiling eyes our way. How exciting it would be to be swept off our feet before we'd even left the ground! But when the tour guide said, "We're all here. Let's go," we were surrounded by eighteen fellow tourists who looked like they'd escaped from the geriactric ward. We saw smiling eyes, but they were all magnified behind bifocal glasses. walkers and canes ambling down slanted ramps: no young men around An overnight flight to Oahu, left little time to say more than 'hello' and "where ya from" before it was lights out for the elderly ones. Soon we heard the snores of those who were to be our companions for the next ten days. Alayna and I giggled as the snoring grew louder. We whispered, trying not to wake them, finding the humor of our plight. We managed to doze and in the morning, eighteen happy faces greeted us as we headed to the loo. waking: faces blushed in shame from wrong conclusions drawn Delightful confidants, the geriatrics turned out to be. They sang and danced and made us laugh at their antics. We learned that age is not a deterrent to having fun, and we became protected daughters of eighteen doting mothers and fathers who chaperoned us as if we were their charges. Not lacking in energy, despite limps and arthritic knees, they were fun travelers through every tour we'd booked. No complainers among them, and always the most eager to be underway. On the last day we visited Pearl Harbor. Alayna and I weren't interested in a monument over a ship that was sunk in WW II. That was before we'd been born! With a little coaxing from 'Daddy' Glenn, we decided to tag along. Something happened to us as we walked upon the bridge-like structure that spanned the USS Arizona. Several of the gentlemen in our group were veterans and began telling of their experiences in the war. We listened and learned, both rapt in awe of their memories. Goosebumps covered our skin when we looked into their solemn eyes. In eyes that had gleamed with laughter for the last nine days, we saw anguish as they recalled the horror of it all. sunken ship for their burial tomb: death beneath the harbor There was an opportunity that one of us could have been romanced. The island boy who surfed the beach at our hotel was throwing glances our way. We decided to forsake the straight white teeth, handsome face, and seductive stares, and opted to spend our time with those who wore dentures and whose faces were wrinkled by time. It had only been ten days that we spent on Oahu, but in that time we both grew up. We learned not to judge at first glance, and if given the chance, we would do it all over again. Over the years I've often wondered if the group had ever gathered for another journey.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 8/5/2017 11:11:00 AM
I love history and especially American history my friend. You have done an exceptional job of sharing and creating beautiful thoughts/verses/images of a pilgrimage to that historic site .. A fav my friend!!
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Date: 8/13/2017 8:52:00 PM
Your compliments made me smile, Robert. Thank you.
Date: 8/3/2017 4:47:00 AM
Love this! I was stationed on Ford Island when I was in the Navy. Seeing the Arizona Memorial from a distance was different than experiencing it. Reading the names and realizing you are standing over their graves makes it very real. Just a beautiful haibun!
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Date: 8/3/2017 4:53:00 AM
It really does have an affect on one's emotions. Thank you very much for liking this one, Kim.
Date: 8/2/2017 7:17:00 PM
This is a Fave for me too Lin! It made me laugh and it made me cry! Who could ask for more? You expressed this so well I found myself clinging to every word anticipating the next with joy. You are such a Poet's poet my friend. I think Debbie will recognize how brilliant this is! : )
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Date: 8/3/2017 4:53:00 AM
Connie, your comments are always filled with encouragement, and I appreciate each one. I know this is close to home for you. I was so young when I visited your beautiful state, and traveling with this wonderful bunch of gracious people is something I'll never forget. Thanks so very much.
Date: 8/2/2017 2:21:00 PM
Lin, this absolutely ROCKS. If I were the judge you'd win the whole thing! Fave.
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:54:00 PM
Win or lose, it was fun to remember that time so long ago. Thanks ever so much for your kind remarks, Dale.
Date: 8/2/2017 1:53:00 PM
This brought a tear to my eye, what a gem.
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:54:00 PM
Thanks so very much, Arthur.
Date: 8/2/2017 1:51:00 PM
Love it. You are truly gifted. You write so well.
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:53:00 PM
Thank you very much, Klio.
Date: 8/2/2017 12:33:00 PM
What a wonderful tale Ms. Lin, never see the wrinkles, stare into those beautiful, remarkable aging eyes and just try to imagine all that they have seen and the mysteries they've encountered. Loved this heart warming write, thank you...
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:53:00 PM
I heard many intriguing stories from that group of lovely men and women. I was only 19, Charlie, and had a fantastic time. Thanks for stopping in.
Date: 8/2/2017 12:05:00 PM
Fabulous title and the story of your holiday teaches us not to judge people without getting to know them first those final two stanzas were perfect. Made me think of a coach trip we did to Belgium, we were the youngest on the coach and I'd just found out I was expecting - I have such vivid memories of it all and still have a knitted toy one of the ladies made for me when my son was born:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/2/2017 2:50:00 PM
Some memories are too special to ever let go. Thanks so much for liking this one and its title, Jan.

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