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https://www.parismuseescollections.paris.fr/fr/petit-palais/oeuvres/ophelie

Contest Format Sorrowful becomes dead weight as I tire from the haunting of my fate sinking may not bring me peace but occurred with apparent ease bound and gagged by my own hand the brook perhaps did understand garlands of flowers still adorn remorse I hold for those that mourn all struggles were so far from here where I was lost inside my fear no respite nor chance to clear my name day by day sliced up the same until self-view I did despise could protest no more ~ your words were lies it matters not when past no return whether sense is seen or you could learn nothing more for all eternity but a dragged-out death picked just for me Original format Sorrowful, becomes dead weight as I tire from the haunting of my fate sinking may not bring me peace but occurred with apparent ease Bound and gagged by my own hand the brook, perhaps, did understand garlands of flowers still adorn remorse I hold for those that mourn All struggles were so far from here where I was lost inside my fear no respite, nor chance to clear my name day by day, sliced up the same Until self-view I did despise could protest no more ~ your words were lies it matters not, when past no return whether sense is seen or you could learn Nothing more for all eternity ~ a dragged-out death, picked just for me

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Date: 3/24/2025 1:36:00 PM
Dilly, your lines were recreated with a much better ethereal emotion. Ophelia looks at peace, and I would rather not think of her as dead, but as if in a dream, thinking about her lover. Not so, for in Hamlet she suffered at the hands of three men. Your format represents her death perfectly.
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Date: 3/24/2025 2:15:00 PM
Thank you Lin, it's very reassuring to have the feedback :) I really enjoyed spending time with this painting, even though it was quite heart wrenching. This version of the painting of Ophelia is more beautiful in concept than some other more famous versions I've seen. Thanks again
Date: 3/24/2025 12:42:00 PM
Ophelia appears in stasis rather than dead in this amazing painting, you capture her inner torment with a certain resignation, she will for all eternity have a lingering death, so Shakespearesque and beautifully written tragedy; The contest format works so well, cheers David
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Date: 3/24/2025 12:57:00 PM
I changed to the contest format after judging, so think I scuppered myself on this occasion :) good to get feedback on the layout though as sometimes I'm unsure if my instincts on experimental spacing work beyond my own understanding of them. It's a beyond beautiful painting. The whole gallery was so exquisite it blew my mind. Thanks for your comment, appreciated :)
Date: 3/24/2025 9:53:00 AM
What a creative write for the painting. I do not know the painter or painting. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a blessed spring day writing away..............
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Date: 3/24/2025 9:59:00 AM
I hadn't heard of the painter before, but the image is related to Ophelia from Hamlet. It was stunning to view in person at Petit Palais yesterday.

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