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On Waves of Broken Promises

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I dared to chase that elusive butterfly of love until he landed in my heart. Caught up in wondrous fascination, I placed my trust on its fragile wings but they crumbled all around me in broken promises lying on the ground. I was betrayed by my heartless butterfly, used like a pawn in a cruel lover's game. He promised to love me for all eternity, a promise broken in each word he'd spoken. His romantic letters were works of fiction, camouflaged behind the guise of truth. In sorrow's hands I laid my aching heart. Wounded by deceit, it had tumbled into a deep abyss of sorrow and despair. Like raindrops running down a window pane, my tears flowed into a sea of solitude where I shall linger in darkness until I drown. Forsaken heart of mine, you will perish thus, staring at a sunset, alone on a barren shore. Have you lost all hope since love has flown? I will carve your epitaph in grains of sand with my trembling hand before darkness falls and waves of broken promises carry you to sea. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ June 30, 2017

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Kevin Shaw

Date: 7/15/2017 6:17:00 PM

Hello Lin, This is a story many can tell, albeit not as well as you. Sadness like this can last briefly or even a lifetime. I loved your poem. This may sound a strange thing to say but, although your poem isn't in rhyme, when I read it, I found a rhyming quality to it, Regards Kevin x

Lin Lane
Date: 7/31/2017 6:03:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your kind remarks, Kevin. I'm a rhymer at heart, so I guess it shows no matter how I sometimes try not to. Your visits are always welcome.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/5/2017 5:23:00 AM

Sadly, the epic sadness that your magnificent poem describes so well has entered my life many times OVER THESE MANY DECADE OF LIVING. This world thrives on broken promises.. Super poetry my friend. A fav..

Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2017 5:30:00 AM

Hi Robert. It's a bane I've also faced, but only once. I'm truly sorry broken promises have plagued you. Thank you for reading me and leaving such a great compliment.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/1/2017 7:09:00 AM

Very saddeningly sad, Lin, but touching the heart:) hope this wins:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:17:00 AM

You're so kind and encouraging, Jo. Thank you very much.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/30/2017 1:41:00 PM

Beautifully sad Lin...have a great weekend

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:16:00 AM

Thank you, Tim, and I return your weekend wishes.

Frederic Parker

Date: 6/30/2017 1:41:00 PM

sometimes I wonder if the pain comes more from being deceived or from the fact we gave trust to one who deceives

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:16:00 AM

I'd have to share your thoughts, Frederic. For me it's an equal share of anger and humiliation. Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

Chris Green

Date: 6/30/2017 10:35:00 AM

This was so deeply sad and so exquisitely written Lin. I could feel that heart breaking as I read this. This is truly a masterpiece of words and phrases. Best wishes in the contest

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:15:00 AM

I always appreciate your encouraging comments, Chris. Thanks so much.

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/30/2017 10:12:00 AM

I know a thing or two about broken promises. A very sad write, Peaches. If you are like me, once that bond of trust has been broken, it's nearly impossible to fix. Once a chain link has been broken, even if you're able to put it back together, it is always the weakest link.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:14:00 AM

A loss of trust often leads to a loss of respect, and you're correct in thinking that both are hard to regain. Thanks for your expressions, Danny.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/30/2017 9:39:00 AM

Woe, such a sad tale of despair so well written Lin, best wishes...

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:13:00 AM

With thanks for your many visits to my poetry, Charlie.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/30/2017 9:23:00 AM

Oh such sadness in your lines Lin - yes write his name in the sand and let the waves carry away those emotions:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 7:12:00 AM

Thanks, Jan. The sea always brings deep thought to my mind. No pun intended.