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Poetic Form: Sijo

Inspired: 2020 August 02

*1st Place*
STRAND COMPLETELY NEW (17),any form,any theme
Contest Judged: 2020 August 05
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

Image: Whirlpool by Giphy

A contracted seafarer...concerning no servile rank, kept e'er involved watch...away from menial daily tasks top deck, while steadfast wary of...the diligent taskmaster's whip. A dawn swift gust...brushes the ship from a rocky pillar, duly rallies from rest...aids calamitous bellows from crow's nest, witnessed by crew...rose an angel disguised with devil horns. Seawater laps feverishly...against ship's wooden hull, as panic over breed minds...once sturdy legs go feebly about, cascading thoughts grips privately...every man for himself. Another abrupt action...frees a churning sea expounds, and an opening hole...devouring anything within its midst, as desperation consumes...a ship has long met its doom. A lone selfless soul of limited else...moved past the lost, and hastily clutched a burdened javelin...and hoist it upwards, with his petitioned combined strength...released the deadly blow. Her dying scream...was drowned out by restored happy voices, and a wealth of well-wishes and praises...honoring accolades, as lone eyes of a humble sort...gaze a siphoning pass.

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Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 9/25/2021 5:03:00 AM

Superb! I am seeing three dots (...) In all your sijo poems. Are they compulsory.? Once again thank for the information about sonnets

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/25/2021 11:02:00 AM

*From being continued below>>>> The PS sijo example used commas and I use the ellipsis (...) to break my lines. It's not required, noted by the rules, but I see it adds meaningful value to a sijo's purposed lines of theme, counter, and resolve, and therefore found it necessary by choice. Peace and joy my friend, Aloha!

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/25/2021 11:01:00 AM

Rama, you're welcome -- I've had those sonnets saved on my files, simple matter of cut-n-paste not having known it to become of any use other than myself. There are many various forms of sonnets out there, French, German, and so on, just letting you know. *To be continued above>>>>

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/24/2021 7:40:00 AM

Fantastic!

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/24/2021 8:55:00 AM

Thanks, Kim, enjoy your day, Aloha!

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/6/2021 7:49:00 PM

So glad to find this great poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~ well penned

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/7/2021 12:26:00 PM

Thank you, Line, it is so thoughtful of you my friend, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2020 11:43:00 AM

wow, top spot for this exciting tale of the sea! Congratulations, william.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/8/2020 11:52:00 AM

Thanks, Andrea, for truly reading my yarn, comment and accolades, Aloha! William

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/6/2020 10:04:00 AM

A true seafarers tale, William, told in the style of a seafarers yarn. I could feel the sea, the waves, the desperation and the relief of victory. Wonderful story telling! Congratulations on your first place!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/6/2020 10:43:00 AM

Thanks, Sam, for your decency in reading my poem, your commenting, and accolades, Aloha! William

Carol Mitra

Date: 8/5/2020 7:29:00 PM

I spent three months close to the sea and understand it in a better way... Excellent write...congratulations on your win William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/5/2020 7:33:00 PM

Thanks for your comment and accolades, Mitra, Aloha! William

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/5/2020 6:00:00 PM

Yes! Heartiest congratulations for winning first place with this gem you wrote for my contest. I'm thrilled for you, William:-)

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/5/2020 6:37:00 PM

Thanks again, Edward, for your accolades, read and comment, Aloha! William

Brenda Chiri

Date: 8/5/2020 5:07:00 PM

What a lovely piece William and so glad to see you in the top win!:) congrats my friend!:)

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/5/2020 5:17:00 PM

Thanks for your comment and accolades, Brenda, Aloha! William

John Watt

Date: 8/5/2020 3:44:00 PM

Amazing Sijo and captivating sea tale, William. Congratulations on your #1 win ~ John

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/5/2020 5:15:00 PM

Thanks for your time to read my Sijo and commenting, John, and accolades, Aloha! William

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/4/2020 1:32:00 PM

Brilliant poem, William! Too bad my contest filled so quickly as I would've urged you to resubmit it as a "Free Verse." Still no.1 in my book! Faved.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/4/2020 6:48:00 PM

Thanks for your generosity, Edward, presently, its future lies with Brian Strand, Aloha! William

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 8/2/2020 5:31:00 PM

You are kidding me, this is superb, briiliant, perfect! Gosh, this deserves accolades awarded to the harpoon holding seafarer. Excellent ending, stunningly set, described with pace, action, perception top notch.

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 8/5/2020 11:04:00 PM

Ha! Pedantic! I am often tripped up by specification requirements. I notice a new contest today advises only to 'have fun' - surely this is where our best expression arises from. Well earned number One Win here, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/2/2020 5:48:00 PM

Actually, this poem was meant for a contest, "Pick-A-Title, Vol 20 - Free Verse 3", wherein, Edward Ibeh concluded statement was "Any form", still, I overlook his earlier statement that he wanted "Free Form" instead, c'est la vie!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/2/2020 5:42:00 PM

My thanks to your astute thoroughness, Sigrid, rarely are my poems read with integrity, thank you my friend, Aloha! William