If This Was the Last Goodbye

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If this was the last

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| If this was the last_goodbye |

But, what if this was the last time I cried,
Don't want to be hidden behind lying scrys.
The world forgotten on their prying device,
Humanity alone algorithmic thrice.

Heaven on you shoulder beckons you home,
Mirror-sucking marrow through soulless domes.
But, what if this is the last chance to thrive,
Society nullified blue tick uprise.

Locate my strength to become whole again,
Discharge into the torrent of play-pretend.
Am I willing to wonder the outdoors,
Bleak scepticism plaguing putrid drawbacks flaws

Pick up, put down, conscious cyber remorse,  
No better a junky and their driving force.
But, what if this is the last time I lie,
Unsubscribe, double-click, shut device; goodbye.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023


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Date: 9/25/2023 6:40:00 PM
Your writing is filled with stunning imagery and an exquisite selection of words. You possess an unparalleled mastery of language, delving into the depths of emotions and resonating with the core of one's being. Your creativity and ability to evoke such intense feelings have resulted in a profoundly heartfelt entry for the contest. Much appreciate your uplifting comment on my page.
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Date: 9/21/2023 1:25:00 AM
So deep a poem and I am sure you are not going to leave us. Great imagery and choice of vocabulary.
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Date: 9/19/2023 5:03:00 PM
Wow..I resonate so deeply with this raw and beautiful piece! The diction and imagery has me captivated, amazing soul! You are truly a master of words, digging deep, touching the heart, mind and soul! “Bleak scepticism plaguing putrid drawbacks flaws” and the last line, is so powerful and true! “The world forgotten on their prying device..humanity alone algorithmic thrice” “society nullified blue tick uprise”— I’m amazed by the depth and grace of this poem! <3
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Date: 9/19/2023 8:18:00 AM
beautiful write !enjoyed reading and keep smiling :)
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Date: 9/19/2023 5:50:00 AM
Ha! That last line cracks me up. I've just recently deleted my Facebook and Instagram accounts. I have a love/hate relationship with SM, but mostly hate. Nice entry Daisy
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Date: 9/18/2023 12:42:00 AM
Dear Daisy, you've so creatively and evocatively written a very heartfelt take for the contest. These rhymes are giving a seamless flow to the poem and the depth lingers in the dark silhouettes of 'goodbyes'.. I especially love how you've carved "Mirror-sucking marrow through soulless domes" So melancholic and gloomy.. Sigh.. A wonderful write full of emotions.. Best of luck for the contest!!
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