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Hush the Stars

-For Justin Bordner’s contest
I long worshiped heartbreak, From afar, often, though through the lenses, ceaselessly… I drew ribbons in the midnight sky with the silken trinkets of sorrow Riding in the dark with the sound of our silent sufferers all around… At times, I would weep at the hum of their distress High above, I would cry out loud, like all the rest… That classic, misery magnet caught in my own spider web My appendages long worn in life’s tethered mess… When unexpectedly, the handsome stars hushed, And this twister that I have become encountered a multihued masterpiece… I caught your crushing colors in my winds of garish web You blended with me cheerfully, enjoying the crucifying climb… Because that is what you do You live to inspire me You live to hush the stars Often, I sneered at the notion of love I would trap the distant idea in my furious swirl… The fires that caught my base would climb so very high, And I would spit them free into the merciful skies… And then I would hear the voices again, louder and louder They had cried so long that they began to cackle in denial…in madness… In wretched whir, in false allure, I would shamefully laugh along Born in the trap where I thought I belong Though, you taught me in venerating verse I was wrong Your colors reflected places in my heart I never knew before... My snares became havens for the lost and scorned Entwining masterfully, you showed me how true love was born... Because that is who you are You saved me in my hateful hour You live to hush the stars How could I have been so lost? Why did I ever lose myself in their sobbing? I love you, my source of light, My source of rain after long-parched night... Has my heart reached the top of my own destruction? Do you see it in your revealing rays? Delighted be, your eyes lifted and met mine as you say, “You were meant to hush the stars You were meant to touch my heart You are everything to me... And now, we are blended, reaching for eternity Just as we ought to be…” I, the tornado of tremor, You the rainbow of radiance, Together blended with the trusting touch of earth, air, wind and fire Through the zooming lenses, in the great mirrors all around I proudly see myself now with your life within me And how beautiful and extraordinary we are together As we aptly ought to be

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 3/16/2015 5:23:00 AM
Deep and complex...nice pen!...Peter
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/16/2015 4:02:00 PM
Thanks, Peter. I deeply admire your work. You express yourself originally, with a great storytelling tone, as well as a unique perspective. Can't wait to read more from you soon! ~Laura
Date: 3/14/2015 1:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your top place win. This is a very captivating write. Keep up the good work. Blessings to you.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2015 2:10:00 PM
Hey, thanks for stopping by and checking it out! ~Laura
Date: 3/14/2015 7:01:00 AM
Intense emotions n a captivating write Laura! Congrats on top podium!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2015 2:10:00 PM
Thank you Dr. Sharma! Glad to have you read! ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2015 8:29:00 PM
This are the few times I have read some of you works Laura.. but each time I read one, your words do surge deep! touching and deeply moving.. :)! I so love the soft way you did this one, there are strong lines but it pictures the vulnerability of the subject! I truly like this in every way and BIG CONGRATULATIONS!!!!! :)! //Olive eloisa
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/13/2015 9:04:00 PM
Aww, thanks Olive. : ) I love that you sensed the softness of this piece too. Thanks for stopping by and reading. ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2015 1:52:00 PM
Lots of lovely new phrases [ silken trinkets of sorrow] Congratulations on your winning verse. Light & Love
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/13/2015 7:08:00 PM
Hi Debbie! (: Glad you could read, and thanks for the kind comment. ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2015 8:43:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats on your merited top spot Laura:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/13/2015 7:05:00 PM
Hey Jan... thanks very kindly. You're a sweet supporter for many people. I love that about you! I hope you have a lovely weekend and a blessed week ahead of you... ~Laura
Date: 2/21/2015 2:33:00 AM
The litany of deep and necessary questions herein, written with such tremendous verve..."Has my heart reached the top of it's own destruction..." mega profound, you are mega gifted, mega beautiful Laura. This is everything that makes poetry healing, and magical! I am honored...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2015 2:47:00 AM
What can I say, J.A.B? You've certainly made my night!~Laura
Date: 2/21/2015 1:59:00 AM
The way you open your heart, first to yourself, then to the love bringer in your tumultuous world, the clarity of soul is so genuine in eloquence and truth. For we who have felt foresaken by love's horses, by the promise of innocence triumphant Laura, this is a testimony for Goodness, happiness that we can achieve. "You blended with me cheerfully, enjoying the cruxifying climb..." oh yes, so much of love is sharing a struggle, and how very beautifully you speak this...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2015 2:45:00 AM
You, the poet of pure magnitude and passion, inspire me greatly Justin Bordner...the honor is all yours... so happy for your most gracious and uplifting review. I enjoyed every moment riding up into the heart of my own storm.
Date: 2/20/2015 8:48:00 PM
I am floating in a flame of gentle gold right now...this astonishing poem of reborn heart and confident companionship warms my every cell of body and spirit Laura...the way you articulate this spiritual transformation is so sincere, epic, and love unique to you...I will be back tonight, to respond more deeply Laura...WOW! J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/21/2015 2:46:00 AM
The storm is never bore alone when love is knitted in our whirls...your comments are beautiful...with your unique voice and poetry...you've got the stars hushing all around.
Date: 2/19/2015 6:28:00 PM
Again, an amazing write from you, Laura. Nothing less is expected from you. You have tamed the words and made them work for your poetry. A 7. Hugs and smiles from the thousand isles. :D Kim
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/19/2015 8:17:00 PM
Kim, you are most sweet : ) Can't wait to read more of your work! ~Laura
Date: 2/19/2015 4:13:00 PM
I am in awe of your creativity Laura - a fantastic write good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/19/2015 4:42:00 PM
I saw a really cool picture of a tornato sucking up a rainbow in the sky. Thought it would be an interesting though rather unusual metaphor to add to this ode. Thanks for taking the time to read it Jan!~Laura
Date: 2/19/2015 7:40:00 AM
Nicely done, Laura...Some great lines! I really did enjoy the read - A good poem!! :-) john.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/19/2015 4:34:00 PM
John, thank you for reading..I will be on your page later on. Your poetry is exceptional and fascinating.~Laura

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