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Heavy About Thirst

Heavy Thirst The clouds are dark The clouds are heavy Heavy clouds bring hope Heavy hope for rain Rain to refresh the scorched land Rain scorched land is bereft of water Water to quench its thirst Water for thirsty plants and trees Trees reduced to bones Trees that look so skeletony Skeletony enough for us to afear Skeletony as they have been boned with drought Drought to wipe away all that was born to flourish Drought rid land where not a thing lives without rain Rain I do wish to ask you a question Rain bewildered question me why wait Wait not too long to be flooded Wait not for my startling answers Answers I said will resolve my queries Answers to questions that have been tormenting me Me the sinner remains petrified Me wary that you have for us no care Care that is wanting in life Care without which life has become corrupt Corrupt because the world has become selfish Corrupt is the very soul of all humans Humans within and beastly without Humans sans love and warmth Warmth amiss to keep the households together Warmth necessary to keep devastations away Away from the evil eye Away from what the eye can envision Envision what the eye cannot see Envision how difficult to keep any danger away Away from man's heart and soul Away from soul which is our healer Healer of sorrows Healer that can be turned Turned into fragment Turned and spurned as worthless Worthless because they come in parts Worthless parts lack any great strength Strength frightens inert cowards Strength overtly will continue abode Abode on this kingdom Abode that often remains in thirst Thirst because there is no rain Thirst be quenched Man you yourself have answered Answered Rain Balveen Cheema September 3, 2015

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Date: 9/12/2015 8:19:00 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
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Date: 9/8/2015 10:47:00 AM
Love you Skat for your appreciation!
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Date: 9/8/2015 9:02:00 AM
Balveen, Congratulations on your -Down Under- win. Love .....SKAT**
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Date: 9/7/2015 7:09:00 PM
Balveen, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 9/7/2015 7:48:00 PM
Thanks Eve for taking out time to congratulate! Love, Balveen
Date: 9/7/2015 4:15:00 PM
Balveen what kept you from getting higher was the sentence length, really you should try for no more than 4 or 5 words, also the title [which is done properly] could have been made to work better say [crying clouds bring hope] that would have given you a title of Crying for Thirst ... a much better title for you. Do try again it is much easier the second time. Congrad's! Light & Love
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 9/7/2015 7:47:00 PM
Now this is what I call a true critical appreciation! Thanks and love you for your putting me on the right track. My first blitz with a perfect mentor. Hugs, Balveen
Date: 9/7/2015 4:11:00 AM
Thanks Upma! It is the first time I have tried and written the Down Under Form. Love, Balveen
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Date: 9/6/2015 11:40:00 PM
Superb winning write Balveen, big congrats!
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