God Cometh As The Uninvited Guess REVISED EST-HAWT

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Poetic Form: Villanelle
Inspired: 2024 April 27
Image: Andromeda and the Milky Way by NYT

Andromeda and the Milky Way: A Merger of Galactic Proportions - The New York Times

Heavenly Master, mirror-less races ..., fat, thin, tall, short, friend, foe--didn't you know? Soul choose sin--soulless|soul forgive saves--us. Saved souls Heaven bound|ground zero soulless, selves/reborn, lame bod/mind--restored, UP ... GO! Heavenly Master, mirror-less races ..., Scriptures were Written, contemps..., made lawless. Man can't deny soul's Heaven? God said so! Soul choose sin--soulless|soul forgive saves--us. God needs 12 votes, could pass? Ridiculous! West--still Wild! Protestant? Not sure. Tarot??? Heavenly Master, mirror-less races ..., The East ... not Orthodox! Cause their name says? Andromeda's next, come on let's go ... NO! Soul choose sin--soulless|soul forgive saves--us. We know the outcome, the show is for us, Gabriel. Michael ..., he waits ... the last show ..., Soul choose sin--soulless|soul forgive saves--us. Heavenly Master, mirror-less races ...,

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Sally Eslinger

Date: 5/2/2024 6:09:00 AM

Hilo, good to meetU thru thiss poem..I fell into its rythm & was Chanting by the end & put that with content, it was quite tense, powerful stuff All thesedeclarative lines nearlycould sound Official! It’s beng faved by me to study. Thanks. Write on…………..

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/2/2024 10:10:00 AM

I'm truly grateful. Each faith bears their ills, Prost./rebels teased as my ref. Ortho., Cath./a bejeweled choker--unnecess., "Light unto thy feet" My post is for the holier than thou types, stone casters...those are the ones Heaven wants to weed out from the church. I speak truths unafraid of lightning strike midday--The Word waits for hypocrites to send to its master. Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 4/28/2024 4:12:00 PM

a unique, almost 'unorthodox' write. This is a clever write but intense write about sin, the soul, salvation, etc. You have a creative mind.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/2/2024 9:56:00 AM

Missed yours, the 'un' as I drew upon. Each faith bears their ills, Prost./rebels for what it is, Cath./overstep-a stretch, Ortho/too. My post is for the holier than thou types, stone casters...those are the ones Heaven wants to weed out from the church, those who play church. I speak truths unafraid of lightning strike midday--The Word waits for hypocrites to send to its master. Aloha, William

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/28/2024 1:01:00 PM

Redemption, forgiveness, and salvation are the central themes of a lovely poem, William. It delves into the concept of atonement as a result of a soul's choice between sin and pardon. You describe deep inquiries of the afterlife, divinity, sin, the soul, and pardon.

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/28/2024 2:45:00 PM

Lasaad, where were you when needed. You'll be a great front man, Gabe's a fine backup, --he's a stauncher. You got it, the lone winner because of its oddity, via my approach. I'm not looking for the presumptuous and leg-up pretentious. Bibles all--unread. Thanks for opening the door, my friend, as they fumble with the keys. Aloha, William