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Forty Winks

I am a narcoleptic, I sleep at any time, no doubt I’ll drop off frequently before I end this ………………………………rhyme. It can be quite embarrassing, between just me and you, in the bank the other day I dozed off in the queue. As if that wasn’t bad enough I let out quite a snore, a real raucous rasper that left my throat quite sore. My constant napping problem has somewhat skewed my fate; destined to be a spinster, I snooze on each first date. There was one special fella who took me out to dine, my face was drawn into my plate as I closed these eyes of mine. He gave me money for the bill and stifling a grin he walked away and whispered “You’ve something on your chin” I think I’ll have to end now, I’m sensing heavy blinks, I cannot write another word I need my forty ………..................... winks
** for Nikko's 'Your Snooze, You Choose' contest

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Date: 6/27/2010 12:40:00 PM
Sharon this is really a great entry into the contest and congratulations on your first place. Very worthy. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/26/2010 5:29:00 PM
Sharon, don't know how I missed this earlier, but am so glad I caught it now! I knew a narcoleptic television reporter. Can you imagine falling asleep at the governor's news conferences? It's a humorous look at what can really be a serious problem. Well done! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/25/2010 12:54:00 PM
Super congrats again, Sharon --haha read this again and just had to laugh all over :) and heehee those "minor" rearrangement really made a whole world of difference and I agree, somehow it's more shocking that way--so thanks again! & EEEeep yeah! I think your letter e's would be back with a vengeance!! and go, go go put Leila's Journey here, I think a lot of people would be shocked with it and just Feel that poem...:) I'm sure they'll be blown away with that, a different take from your writes :)
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Date: 6/25/2010 12:56:00 AM
Clever, sharp and witty.. made me laugh Great job!...Kurt
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Date: 6/24/2010 3:08:00 PM
OMG so hilarious!!!! congrats on your most excellent First Place win! (hope its not true! - lol) so well deserved! love, shar
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Date: 6/24/2010 1:03:00 PM
congratulations on first place..
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Date: 6/24/2010 10:01:00 AM
Congratulations of a well deserved win. Most amusing, and I didn't doze off at all! ;-)
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Date: 6/24/2010 7:48:00 AM
Loved this.....so funny and yes......a winner!!! Congratulations!!
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Date: 6/24/2010 7:09:00 AM
ZOWIE, you did it. you got a first place win very quickly here at Soup. ANd this was VERY well deserved. It was certainly one of MY favorites of the snooze poems! Congratulations. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 6/24/2010 5:26:00 AM
Congratulations Sharon on your win in Nikko Palmario's contest "Your Snooze, You Choose". Love, Carol
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Date: 6/24/2010 2:32:00 AM
LOL.....Great write Sharon....Congrats on your win....Larry
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Date: 6/24/2010 2:29:00 AM
haha btw, Andrea--you know me too well, you were so right on ;)!! congrats again Sharon, really loved the concept for this forty winks of yours, super glad you stayed awake long enough to write this, hahaha ;)
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Date: 6/24/2010 1:03:00 AM
You could not imagine how all smiley I got to find out that this was your poem, dear Sharon!!! I fell in love with this the first time I ever read it and it just made me laugh out loud! I think I had like 40 guffaws with this one instead, haha...I am reminded of our prof in Biology—we had a sneaking suspicion that he had narcolepsy! Enjoyed this poem all throughout—definitely didn’t fall asleep with this witty write ;) Super congrats on the 1st place win!!! hugs!! nikko :) btw Ninna was right!!!
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Date: 6/23/2010 3:47:00 PM
Hi Sharon, really funny and I do hope you'll be successful in Nikko's contest! And thank you for your comment on "Young Green Woodpecker". These birds are really a jewel here and they are quite big. I actually saw my first hoopoes in Israel in the 1970ies when I stayed at Kibbutz Erez near Ashkelon for nearly a year...:) Gert
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Date: 6/21/2010 6:32:00 PM
Great poem. It will do well, I'm betting. Thanks for your comments on mine
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Date: 6/21/2010 8:00:00 AM
Haha,tnks for the laugh,funny indeed!Celene!
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Date: 6/21/2010 5:33:00 AM
Really Really good, I laughed all the way through, and the rhymes are good too
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:44:00 AM
Made me smile Sharon...good luck..well done
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:14:00 AM
must be a hard life...LOL
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Date: 6/20/2010 6:06:00 AM
Sharon, you had me giggling with this one. Good luck in the contest >> James
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Date: 6/20/2010 4:36:00 AM
hahaha...thanks for the humor...I don't need to go the comedy bar now...thanks for sharing...^_^ v
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Date: 6/20/2010 3:28:00 AM
Nikko is going to LOVE this one, I JUST KNOW IT!!! GREAT JOB. and this reminds me, I gotta get MY sleep poem up there. Sharon, I just looked at the results of my own contest and saw that I gave you an HM. I was hoping to give you higher since I love your writing so much. Please keep trying my contests. And congrats on your HM in my etheree contest. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 6/20/2010 3:16:00 AM
Ha! This is funny and very well done, too!:)
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Date: 6/20/2010 3:15:00 AM
A nice write on you snooze, you choose. Good luck
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