Fish Tank

bright eyes swinging tail spirit inside as a whale all the feels gray gills

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Bill Baker

Date: 10/6/2023 5:33:00 PM

Excellent description in so few words, my Haiku friend. :-) You do write Haikus well, Karen. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Karen Jones
Date: 10/6/2023 5:35:00 PM

I am still learning. You know Sara is THE Haiku Queen! Hugs for your kind comments.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/6/2023 9:49:00 AM

Great description of a fish swimming. I used to have many aquariums but my late wife thought I was dirtying everywhere. She was right.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/6/2023 11:10:00 AM

Lol. So you love fish as pets...cool Thanks for your kind comment.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/6/2023 8:10:00 AM

Karen, Your concise yet detailed portrayal of the subject's bright eyes, a tail in motion, and the vibrant spirit residing within, akin to that of a majestic whale, evokes a profound sense of emotion. The imagery further encompasses the essence of the subject's gray gills, adding depth and texture to the overall depiction.

Karen Jones
Date: 10/6/2023 8:32:00 AM

Each time you write a poem or comment I feel as if I am in college being schooled. Lol This is a great thing! Thanks dear Sotto Poet!

Silent One

Date: 10/5/2023 1:13:00 PM

You made me smile here.. very descriptive..

Karen Jones
Date: 10/5/2023 1:42:00 PM

Aw hugs Silent One!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2023 5:07:00 AM

- Gave me a smile "spirit inside as a whale" ... like my two little Chihuahua dogs ... who "think they are huge lions" :) - Creative and great written, Karen :) - hugs

Karen Jones
Date: 10/5/2023 5:15:00 AM

Yes those tiny dogs have a big ego! Thanks for reading and hugs back Anne-Lise!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/5/2023 2:45:00 AM

Ahh, I love everything oceanic and you've so gorgeously described the adorable scene of fishes here.. With bright eyes and swinging tail, gray gills and spirit like a whale.. Wow, such vivid descriptions within such few words..enjoyed reading this haiku poem :)

Karen Jones
Date: 10/5/2023 2:49:00 AM

Thanks Hiya