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Crude Reality

I once saw a rundown house sitting on a thin little frame and thought it pretty to someone. She doesn't understand, when she speaks of me the same. Reflections aren't supposed to lie. I see less than she, or more depending on what it is I am searching for, anymore I see the rundown house, weakened frame, but I can't find thin. I think the scale lies, perhaps just to me. She says enough is enough, look in the mirror and see what I see. What does she see that hides from my own eyes? I see less, perhaps more, depending on what it is that I am searching for. I see things perhaps with death's eyes, does she know it is killing me? Has she seen me fall from grace and turn from life as if pushed into the depths of my own grave? She must know: it has me hanging on a thin frame, rundown, weakened from neglect, I guess I am pretty to someone but I don't see it the same. She asked how can you let it rape you of life? I guess someone should tell her that I am already dead, she doesn't see.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/12/2020 6:25:00 PM
We seem to be our own harshest judge. We don’t see ourselves as others see us which is sad. Your poem is beautifully expressed and written Sandra. Congratulations on your first placement as it is very deserving. Easter blessings, Connie xxoo
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Date: 4/12/2020 3:16:00 PM
Incredibly powerful words dear friend. Your metaphor of the house is perfect. Your imagery makes such an impact carrying your theme "rape you of life!" So powerfully expressed. Congratulations on your first place win. Sending you a prayer for new life.
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Date: 2/6/2020 6:49:00 AM
Another old one and a WOW poem at that. This one really touched me and sent shivers down my spine. Congrats on your placement in the contest Sandy. Just wow, I like these contests, they allow me to see old work from you that is new to me
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/6/2020 6:47:00 PM
Thank you so much Chris...your kind comments often bring smiles... glad you got to read it... this has always been one of my favorites... hugs
Date: 10/10/2013 1:12:00 AM
Sandy, this is so profound that I nearly cannot "get" it!! I think I get it, but it is just so sad. now I understand what you meant by your "dark side" Excellent poetry. Loved the way you repeated that one part for emphasis. At first I thought it was about anorexia, for the first part about the scales, but I think I am wrong on that!! I wonder how many other of your poems like this I have not yet seen!!
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Date: 11/24/2012 2:45:00 PM
Hi Sandra My goodness, this moves me beyond words. With your permission I would like to forward this on to my wife. This is very powerful and could be a help when she is talking to her clients. Foer whatever it is worth you truly are a pretty young woman. I hope you have come to realize the truth about yourself.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 11/24/2012 4:52:00 PM
you may share it with your wife, perhaps it will help someone :) ...and thank you for your kind reply!
Date: 10/19/2012 7:46:00 AM
Thanking you today for your comments on my writing Sandra. I hope you have a very pleasant weekend and I wish to see more of your work next week. Love, Carol XXXX
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Date: 10/15/2012 10:22:00 PM
The death conclusion in the final verse is expertly placed Sandra - its great to see artists showing no fear in the motifs of their work - your cryptic wisdom is very pretty - a very intelligent allegory with the house and the coinciding weaknesses and strengths - J.A.B. %
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Date: 10/15/2012 8:53:00 PM
Hi, Sandra your poem is sad ~ I'm sorry you feel this way. No one should be raped away from the life they live.. beauty is only a myth to me... enjoyed your poem...pd
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/15/2012 8:55:00 PM
my muse takes paths of her own...i am generally a happy person...it's just a poetic painting :) Thanks for the read! :)

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