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inspired and written for dilly dallys rough contest, raw and unpolished.. just a simple scribble 

sleep feels like an abandoned lover; heart weeps like a wilted flower.. wings of the sun, soaked with sapphire dust, rise and sparkle; like sea salt in the air, twilight cascades upon my skin~ wearing your perfumed memories, I long to see your silken silhouette, swirling behind the thick veil of shimmering silence, but I do not know the lyrics, to sing these thoughts in spellbinding melodies, so like always, I sit and scribble, your name in rosy refrains and messy metaphors, too vague for those almond eyes.. perhaps, citrine stars would transcribe these emotions, for I’ve long been writing in seclusion, of the lotus moon in your midnight skies, of the constellations of butterflies… Yet, I am the unvoiced verse, nestled within the waltzing lines of timeless nostalgia~woven from flawless feathers…

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Date: 11/2/2024 12:48:00 AM
Here is another. I have over 21 favorites in the short time I have known you!
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Date: 7/13/2024 2:40:00 PM
Now I know why sleep torments and tortures me. So sad it was abandoned. Maybe I can rumble around the emotions. Talk heart to ears and she might listen. Great work done here Dear Ink. "Yet, I am the unvoiced verse, nestled within the waltzing lines." Profound. Congratulations on your well-deserved win Dear Ink.
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Date: 7/11/2024 9:13:00 AM
I love when you write this way, a little shorter and to me, it smoothly flows to the awesome conclusion of timeless nostalgia. A fave, and congrats on your win.
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Date: 7/10/2024 6:54:00 AM
Hearty Congratulations on your well deserved great win.
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Date: 7/9/2024 6:21:00 PM
Congrats on the WIN my dear INK!! Such a lovely piece. Well done
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Date: 7/9/2024 11:23:00 PM
Thank you so much
Date: 7/9/2024 1:59:00 PM
"I sit and scribble, your name in rosy refrains and messy metaphors" how true and nothing less than filled with emotions and imagery! The most stunning line Empress, "sleep feels like an abandoned lover;" doesn't it? Truly amazing. Congratulations on your top win! xhugs ~Anaya
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Date: 7/9/2024 11:23:00 PM
Thank you sweet anaya, sleep does seem unavailable lately: appreciate your poetic presence and support always truly
Date: 7/9/2024 1:00:00 PM
It was inspired to imagine sleep as an abandoned lover, I love how you flow from a thought and create a world around it. Congratulations on your win and thank you for entering
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Date: 7/9/2024 1:58:00 PM
Dear dd, thank you so much, i was truly inspired by your contest, didnt expect a win but its always an honor. Grateful! Thank you again sending you light always
Date: 7/9/2024 9:23:00 AM
Nothing “simple” about this scribble. What a beautifully crafted thought here!! “ perhaps, citrine stars would transcribe these emotions, for I’ve long been writing in seclusion, of the lotus moon in your midnight skies, of the constellations of butterflies…” Absolutely love this. Your voice is lost in the silence of solitude, yet your words echo profoundly in the chambers of this dark heart!!
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Date: 7/9/2024 9:43:00 AM
Thank you for your kind and generous feedback: grateful always for your enthusiastic support
Date: 7/9/2024 12:18:00 AM
If this is just a scribble, I must think that your very thoughts are poetic that need no editing. I don't think I can ever write a poem of this sort even if I sit in seclusion and try for several hours or edit it over and over again. When sleep deserts one, it is so annoying. You can only woo your lover who has deserted you and hope he will soon come to pacify your anguished heart. A beautiful poem of longing and love. Please know even your scribble goes into my FAVE.
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Date: 7/9/2024 9:45:00 AM
Haha theres so much i want to change in this sweet valsa. I dont like using “ the” too much but i did here and just few things i would preter changing! You are so sweet and kind im grateful always for your soul warming support
Date: 7/8/2024 4:48:00 PM
a simple scribble seems like it was a long lonely night of reflections that can stop any semblance of sleep...your word usage is impeccable as always
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:18:00 AM
Thank you dear frederick it means alot coming from you
Date: 7/8/2024 2:32:00 PM
Just a simple scribble, like an abandoned lover. I'm thinking this nostalgic scribble might be onto a winner.
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:21:00 AM
Ah i hope so, just was inspired dear paul. Thank you so much for being supportive grateful always
Date: 7/8/2024 1:46:00 PM
This is an unedited scribble? You mean this is normal writing and this is how your converse? You must have a poetic tongue even when talking full of metaphors.. So is sleep your lover that has abandoned you and now that narcissist insomnia has come to stay? I can feel the angst of longing in your words hoping your lover returns and then you can sleep and have sweet dreams... at the end of the day all we want is peace.. right? Best of luck in the contest..
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Date: 7/8/2024 2:40:00 PM
Nothing about me is normal, not my writing and not my existence hah! Thanks dear it is an unedited scribble one inspired by the opening lines that kept coming to me at 3 am, ah its again 3 am! and these are overly used words in my poems nothing innovative done here. So yes simple and raw just my ink spilling whatever youv gathered and said there in comment too. You got it right and peace is my middle name :)
Date: 7/8/2024 9:51:00 AM
Beautiful writing, Ink- loved the opening line; it's hard to sleep with such thoughts in your head... hugs and light <3
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:21:00 AM
Awwn you are so kind thank you sweet paige! Grateful for your support
Date: 7/8/2024 6:21:00 AM
sleep feels like an abandoned lover… mmm that opening line papi… soaked with sapphire dust, I love that line!!! FreKing dreamy n soooo enchanting!! sing these thoughts in spellbinding melodies, so like always, I sit and scribble,mmmm ur scribbles r always sooo magnificently magnetic… the lotus moon in your midnight skies, of the constellations of butterflies…damn !!! Ur short scribbles r pure magic
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:22:00 AM
Ah papi easier for u to read short scribbles haha
Date: 7/8/2024 5:19:00 AM
Ha! Your poetry could never come off as raw and unpolished. Still, the emotions come through here. Longing to see his silken silhouette once more. Sweet, sad, lovely
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:23:00 AM
Haha you are too kind tomsz. I think it would have been better if i used “ unfaithful “ instead of abandoned” but anyway, yes you felt this right appreciate your kindness always
Date: 7/8/2024 4:46:00 AM
Oh my God..How many beautiful verses..Your poetry is like a vivid painting ..I love that lotus moon in a midnight sky.Fantastic poem.A favourite
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:24:00 AM
You are such a beautiful soul. I hope to see you around more often, we need such presence here. Sending you light and thank you
Date: 7/8/2024 3:15:00 AM
This is pretty good for a simple scribble … I could relate to it
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Date: 7/9/2024 10:24:00 AM
Awwn thank you dahlin

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