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A Promise To My Mother

You required from us no elegy So I promise in this paragraph My poems become your epitaph From all the years of reading youve done Ive become your writing son And today I am almost old I will write it into solid gold Your blood is the fluid in my inky pen The spirit of the ages I will spill on these pages Until one day I will see you again

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Jan Allison

Date: 11/17/2016 3:19:00 AM

A lovely tribute to your mother... I only recently discovered my maternal grandmother wrote poetry as do my elderly aunt and uncle. My mother also wrote but I have never seen her poems... now I know it's in my blood it just took my husband's cancer surgery in 2013 to unleash this creativity in me. :-) hugs Jan xx7

Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/17/2016 7:52:00 AM

O Jan I am much pleased by your visit being from an eminent poet as yourself. Isnt it strange how it took a shock to unleash our creativity. Mine was locked up till doomsday until I woke up with a jolt. My wish for you is that you can even exceed your previous work. Thanks for the visit

Carol B.

Date: 10/29/2016 12:32:00 AM

Absolutely beautiful :)

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/29/2016 2:45:00 AM

Hi Carol. Thank you and welcome.

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/26/2016 11:09:00 PM

I disagree with Keith. "Inky pen" struck me like Shakespeare. Inky is the verb! -- I get the contrast between your mother: "Solid Gold", and you, wielder of an "inky pen". That one word/phrase illuminates the image.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/3/2016 5:33:00 AM

Hi Robert, thanks for being a comrade in the trenches.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/23/2016 2:07:00 PM

A tender, heartfelt and beautiful dedication to your Mother... Nice, smoothly flowing lines here, Jannie. Well done!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/3/2016 5:27:00 AM

Hi again Kelly. Much oblidged thank you

Tim Smith

Date: 9/17/2016 11:30:00 AM

A really sweet dedication Jannie...welcome to the soup

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/3/2016 5:25:00 AM

Hey Tim. I have been around a while but thanks

Keith Logan

Date: 9/17/2016 7:23:00 AM

Isn't it a shame this site does not allow editing responses.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/17/2016 9:51:00 AM

Hi Keith oo but it does. Thankyou for egaging with my writes. I will amend them soon when I can buy some data but the power has been off since yesterday

Keith Logan

Date: 9/17/2016 7:18:00 AM

A really good epitaph for your mother. Just a couple of tweaks I suggest: And today as I am almost old Your blood is the fluid in pen Until the day I see you again

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/17/2016 9:53:00 AM

Thank you I will be sure to tweak you out too

Keith Logan
Date: 9/17/2016 7:20:00 AM

I missed out "my" before inky pen