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Intertwining Triolet

Combining two or more triolets linked by repeating lines. The sixth line of the first refrain forms the first line of the next refrain, and so on.

      

The wind fuels a gentle breeze that rustles the leaves with its touch. Scurrying through the tops of trees, the wind fuels a gentle breeze. Not enough to discourage bees, it is only brisk; it isn't much. The wind fuels a gentle breeze that rustles the leaves with its touch. It is only brisk; it isn't much until that breeze begins to gust. Yet, still the birds escape its clutch, it is only brisk; it isn't much. It topples garbage cans and such, gathering up a cloud of dust. It is only brisk; it isn't much, until that breeze begins to gust. Gathering up a cloud of dust; it blocks the sun's diminished light. And proceeds, with increasing thrust, gathering up a cloud of dust. As shutters squeak and hinges bust, a furious storm causes fright. Gathering up a cloud of dust; it blocks the sun's diminished light. A furious storm causes fright as loose shingles fly through the air. Morphing into a wind with might a furious storm causes fright. Finding cover, folks, hang on tight, for flying debris warrants care. A furious storm causes fright as loose shingles fly through the air.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 11/19/2018 3:20:00 PM
Wow, Emile! A perfect description of the wind's power and how it builds up and up 'til you have a full-blown hurricane and living here in Louisiana I've experienced it first hand. Excellent poem!
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Date: 11/19/2018 6:44:00 PM
Thanks Carole, I truly appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 5/25/2018 8:14:00 PM
The rhyme is SO VERY rich, Emile. Awesome form.
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Date: 5/26/2018 8:55:00 AM
Thanks so much Line I truly appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 10/8/2015 1:49:00 AM
Congrats once again Emile! loved another read!
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Date: 10/8/2015 9:12:00 AM
Thank you so much Upma, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 10/2/2015 10:48:00 PM
Emile, it's nice to see this one with a new placement. Congrats!!!!! LOVE **SKAT**
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Date: 10/3/2015 12:53:00 PM
Thanks so much SKAT, I appreciate your visits. Emile.
Date: 10/1/2015 8:02:00 PM
A 7-plus, Emile! I love how the progression in this expertly-written poem parallels the progression in nature from a breeze to a raging wind storm! Great poem Janice
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Date: 10/2/2015 10:42:00 AM
Thanks so much Janice, I appreciate your visit. Emile.
Date: 10/1/2015 7:42:00 PM
So lovely, and such a difficult form as well !! So glad this one had another chance at the spotlight!! Congratulations Emile!!
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Date: 10/1/2015 7:57:00 PM
Thanks Carrie, I appreciate you friendly comments. Emile.
Date: 10/1/2015 4:38:00 PM
Emile congratulations on your win my friend!
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Date: 10/1/2015 7:58:00 PM
Thanks Michael, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 10/1/2015 4:16:00 PM
This poem is another reason why I appreciate Broken's HM contest. Awesome triolets, I can't believe this got an HM! Glad that it finally got recognition. Congrats, Emile!
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Date: 10/1/2015 7:59:00 PM
Thanks so much Kim, I truly appreciate your comments. Emile.
Date: 9/1/2015 1:16:00 AM
Congrats on your superb winning write Emile!
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Date: 9/1/2015 6:58:00 AM
Thanks Upma, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 8/31/2015 12:47:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Emile:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/31/2015 3:01:00 PM
Thanks Jan, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 8/30/2015 11:10:00 PM
Emile, Congratulations on your win. Thank you for supporting my WIND contest. SKAT LOVE
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Date: 8/31/2015 7:55:00 AM
Thanks SKAT, I appreciate the opportunity to participate. Emile.
Date: 8/30/2015 1:47:00 AM
Emile, You are among my fave triolet writers here in Soup... =') love this one so groovy and lovely!!!!~Olive Eloisa =')!
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Date: 8/30/2015 9:06:00 AM
Thank you so much Olive, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 8/29/2015 9:10:00 PM
We have not yet conquered nature and are still often subject to its whims as you show in this fine piece. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 8/30/2015 9:07:00 AM
Thanks Matthew, I appreciate your support. Emile.
Date: 8/29/2015 5:33:00 PM
What a beautiful and wonderful, I love your subject Emile; how it was constructed, It flows eloquent and powerful a 7 and a fav............A.M.
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Date: 8/29/2015 6:50:00 PM
Thanks so much Afolabi, I appreciate your comments. Emile.
Date: 8/29/2015 9:09:00 AM
Dear Emile, Breeze is gentle and the poem is awesome ...so well structured with such appropriate words creating a picture and feel of blowing breeze......a 7! Good luck for the contest....love, Anu:-)
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Date: 8/29/2015 9:11:00 AM
Thanks so much Anulaxmi, I appreciate your comments. Emile.
Date: 8/28/2015 10:05:00 PM
A gentle breeze with attitude...I like the progression to its fury ...very nicely penned...best wises
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Date: 8/29/2015 9:12:00 AM
Thanks Joseph, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 8/28/2015 7:53:00 PM
Ha! Gust or Bust and I've lived through enough Dust Storms to relate! I love it. It's perfect and not a tweak in site. It's a 7+ and a Fav
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Date: 8/29/2015 9:13:00 AM
Thanks so much Edlynn, I appreciate your comments. Emile.
Date: 8/28/2015 7:19:00 PM
Wow Emile, you've done a terrific job with this poem - good luck in the contest - Lindsay
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Date: 8/29/2015 9:11:00 AM
Thanks so much Lindsay, I appreciate your comments. Emile.
Date: 8/28/2015 6:10:00 PM
WOW Emile I struggle to write one triolet - i love the way you have blended them so cleverly from stanza to stanza building up the impact from calm to a gale - fabulous pen my friend:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/28/2015 6:30:00 PM
Thanks so much Jadazzle, I appreciate your comments. Emile.

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