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A Fault In YOUR Sentiment

I yearn for not but your devotion true A sacred bond you must uphold You breathed me in the breath I drew Yet love runs from you faint and cold Have I transgressed? I toil in vain, Yet still, you shun my desperate plea. Affection spurned, a heart in pain, Forsaken in this MISERY. Hey, sire, would you ever love? “I do not, I do not care.” Can you take me seriously? “You’re young and stupid.” Not a day by without the wonder Of the lack of sentiment you bring Reflection, though not a blunder So in your fault I now can sing.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 4/5/2025 6:40:00 AM

This is profound, akin to a struggle for the essence of existence. I appreciate the optimistic energy and cheerful disposition of this! Your command of language is profound and elegant. You have expressed it flawlessly! Your poetry was a pleasure to read, Reya.

Reya Suri
Date: 4/5/2025 2:22:00 PM

Thank you!! I'm quite shocked by this compliment, I wasn't expecting my language to be called "elegant" after this poem stated "You're young and stupid." I'm still glad it's not too brutal, and expresses my idea profoundly!

CayCay Jennings

Date: 4/4/2025 11:45:00 AM

"you breathed me in the breath i drew' - love that line. As Andrea said, poem delivers sadness, as intended, then closes by throwing at too-bad-for-you-stick at the feeling devoid thing! CayCay

Reya Suri
Date: 4/4/2025 1:44:00 PM

Thank you CayCay!!! I did love the ending too :) I’m glad this is sad and compelling!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/3/2025 12:09:00 PM

Sad one but you end it on a great note!

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 12:45:00 PM

My intention was to make the ending seem like I’m singing from anger rather than from forgiveness; that I know he has wronged me. But thank you regardless! I guess it is still a good note, acceptance is always important!

Tom Woody

Date: 4/3/2025 8:32:00 AM

My dad disowned me for over thirty years. We reconciled shortly before his death but it felt like too little, too late. Sad poem reya

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 12:47:00 PM

Aww, I’m so sorry. My condolences. I hope he cherished you in the little time you guys had together. xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/3/2025 6:13:00 AM

- Uninterested... let him go...painful but you are worth much more :) - hugs

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:50:00 AM

Would be easy if this poem wasn’t about the person who gave me life- though I am worth a person too. Xxxx

Heidi Sands

Date: 4/3/2025 4:12:00 AM

Thought provoking and well expressed poem :)

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:50:00 AM

Thank you Heidi!! I’m glad you like this!!

Deb M

Date: 4/3/2025 2:19:00 AM

Hi Reya….what an amazing write ….powerful! Debx

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:51:00 AM

Thank you Deb!! Love your energy xxx

Karen Jones

Date: 4/3/2025 1:25:00 AM

This is deep and like emotional sparring. I love the energy of this and the optimism despite negativity!

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:52:00 AM

I guess the last verse is pretty optimistic! Never hurts to kill them with kindness!

Ink Empress

Date: 4/3/2025 12:41:00 AM

It's never a nice feeling to be forsaken in misery, feeling alone and shunned by the ones that we long to feel our pain and challenges we fight ... your way with words is profound and flows very well! And youv expressed so very well here! I especially felt "Not a day by without the wonder Of the lack of sentiment you bring" so soulful! Pleasure visiting your page today dear Reya! Sending you light always

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:54:00 AM

Thank you so much, Ink! I always look forward to comments you’ve left. The challenges we fight are what I try to put in my work! Glad you love it xxx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/2/2025 10:35:00 PM

this is real talk; hard hitting snd deep...i like your poetic style, reya!

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:48:00 AM

Thank you, Nette! I like to be slightly brutal with my work; glad you enjoy it!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/2/2025 10:07:00 PM

Stirs up many thoughts and emotions, Reva. That's what a hard look at reality will do. ~ Gershon

Reya Suri
Date: 4/3/2025 7:47:00 AM

Thank you Gershon! Indeed, this was a painful write.