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Words I Cannot Say

Words I cannot say- within ricochet ugly scenes replay Distress! Words I cannot say- heavy stowaways within spirit weigh Depress. Words I cannot say- shades of yesterday games I used to play Regress... Words I cannot say- sins of youth repay bars of iron gray Oppress! Words I cannot say- inner self betray secrets on display (Undress.) ____ (Although I listed this as "Rhyme" it is actually my first attempt at a French Lai poem.)

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Arturo Michael

Date: 3/15/2019 12:42:00 AM

I like it...a sweet flair somewhere underlying...

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 3/15/2019 10:48:00 PM

Thank you so much- glad you liked it! ;)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/21/2019 12:50:00 PM

Impressive poetry Rhona - never tried this form of poetry - doubt I could but appreciate yours - an excellent write - best for a win. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/22/2019 12:08:00 PM

Thank you so much!! Poetry hugs to you, too! ;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/13/2019 7:28:00 PM

by the way, I have a poem with a title very similar to this one but the topic is very different!!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/13/2019 8:01:00 PM

Will have to look that up when I get a chance!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/13/2019 7:27:00 PM

I hope this one wins. I put in a lame offering so I doubt it for myself!!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/13/2019 8:00:00 PM

Thank you! (...and I'm sure yours was fine, we're just always harder on our own work!) ;)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 2/11/2019 2:17:00 PM

Gorgeous composition, and your first with this form no less, I'm wholly impressed! I love it, a fave. xomo

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/11/2019 4:53:00 PM

Aaaww, thanks Mo!! So glad you liked it! ;)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/9/2019 2:24:00 PM

We all have secrets; it's no crime but, there are things we need to say; it's important that they are said. A well-penned poem, indeed and for a first, French Lai, well done!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/11/2019 12:17:00 PM

Thank you so much, ML!! (And my apologies for not replying sooner!)

Silent One

Date: 2/9/2019 6:03:00 AM

French Lai? Now that sounds so cool... I like the flow to this... I believe we all hold onto words we cannot to say... the important thing is to say what is vital and needs to be heard... before it is too late..

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/9/2019 11:21:00 AM

Thank you! ...And yes, I couldn't agree more (about saying what is vitally important before it's too late)! ;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2019 7:08:00 PM

I really like this form. You know what, it would work for that contest on repeated lines since the first part is always repeated. SO NICE!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/8/2019 8:04:00 PM

Thanks so much! I've been so busy lately I hadn't been keeping up with the contests... but I looked up the one you mentioned and threw this in the ring! ;) Glad you liked it!!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/7/2019 10:21:00 PM

Your French Lai poem is wonderfully done, of course. I am so GLAD to see you have written a new poem, and this one is fantastic, my Soul Sister. Bravo!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/8/2019 4:46:00 AM

Thank you, my friend! I'm trying to get my writing muse back to work again, but she has been cantankerous lately! ;)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/7/2019 9:51:00 PM

You have a mesmerizing flow here, something about this is so satisfying, like scratching an itch!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 2/8/2019 4:45:00 AM

Thank you so much- glad you found it that satisfying! ;)