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Every year from spring through fall, if you peered between the cattails you could see the swans in the center of the pond, head to head, their love peering back. On the pond's edges, from the tops of lily pads, frogs were singing of love's song as dragon flies frolicked gleefully above. We would sit and watch them countless hours, day after day as they gracefully swayed to the rhythm encircled in the reflections of love. One year in the dawning of spring, he returned alone, we watched him slowly swim with downcast head to the center of the pond, within the shadows of lost love he'd pause in the ripples that surrounded him, his sadness reaching the edges of the pond, where abandoned lily pads tilted downward caught in the spirals of his lonely tears. He still comes to the pond, muddied and alone from spring through fall, through clouded eyes we still watch him swim, wreathed within his pain we taste his loneliness.
head downcast, he swims enclosed in the pond's ripples his tears splashing back
October 12, 2019 Writing Challenge, October, 2019 -Bird- Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wiishkobi Ode

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Date: 10/21/2019 9:15:00 PM
Sandra, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this exceptional poem, I love swans and you did your Haibun perfectly, and your images are great too !
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/22/2019 9:27:00 AM
Thank you so much....i love swans too, and it is sad to see... thanks for the win and for hosting another wonderful contest :) hugs
Date: 10/20/2019 5:32:00 PM
your touching poem sure tugged at the heartstrings, it must be heartbreaking to see him all alone:-( many congrats on your win Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/20/2019 6:21:00 PM
Thank you Jan....it is heartbreaking to see, especially because they were paired together for many years...you can feel his sadness... hugs
Date: 10/20/2019 4:48:00 PM
Great verse, Sandra, congratulations on your win. Hugs
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Date: 10/20/2019 6:20:00 PM
Thank you so much Eve.... hugs :)
Date: 10/20/2019 1:36:00 PM
- This is sensitive and beautiful, Sandra - Congratulations on your great win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/20/2019 1:57:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise...i had no idea the contest was judged... hugs
Date: 10/15/2019 9:59:00 PM
Beautiful, Sandra.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 10/20/2019 1:56:00 PM
Thank you so much Line :) hugs
Date: 10/14/2019 7:21:00 AM
The sadness in this amazing poem is heartbreaking. To lose the one you dedicated your life to is devastating. Your words though beautiful, speak of this loneliness and the ache that comes with it.
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Date: 10/14/2019 9:41:00 AM
Thank you my friend, I could feel his sadness...it broke my heart to see him like that.... hugs
Date: 10/12/2019 10:13:00 PM
So beautifully expressed... I love swans and this is a poem I'll fave as I want to remember it for sure. It's an amazing write. I love it. God bless you always with much love, Gina
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Date: 10/12/2019 10:20:00 PM
Thank you Regina for your kindness and faving my poem... swans are so beautiful and graceful so to see him so sad was heartbreaking ..blessings and love to you! :) hugs Sandy
Date: 10/12/2019 9:32:00 PM
Beautifully envisioned, Sandra! Love this haiku. Warm wishes, Gershon (soup mail, please)
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Date: 10/12/2019 10:00:00 PM
Thank you Gershon, it truly broke my heart to see him so sad and lonely.... we watched the two of them for many years... hugs :)
Date: 10/12/2019 4:53:00 PM
Sandra, I like this Swan song of a poem. The simply beautiful way you create is a credit to your skills; perhaps life learned experience put to words. Oh Dear (Heart) ..this contest is going to be filled with so many talented writers. -Richard
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Date: 10/12/2019 6:12:00 PM
Thank you so much Richard....it was sad to witness....hugs
Date: 10/12/2019 2:41:00 PM
An amazingly beautiful yet sad poem,(just the way I like it). If for a contest I see another top win, I know Constance will love this!
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Date: 10/12/2019 3:05:00 PM
Thank you John, they were beautiful to watch, and now it is so sad to see him alone, you can feel his sadness...hugs :)
Date: 10/12/2019 2:12:00 PM
Beautiful love story of life you have penned through your words!!
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Date: 10/12/2019 3:04:00 PM
Thank you so much Smita, for both your lovely comment and visit :)
Date: 10/12/2019 1:18:00 PM
Oh no, this is heartbreaking ~ you brought us love and we sang, then you brought us loss and we... cry. Such a moving, beautifully written piece, my friend. Feeling blessed to have read it <3 a fave.
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Date: 10/12/2019 1:35:00 PM
Thank you my friend, sorry for the tears... after watching them for years to see him alone tugs at the heartstrings for sure. Hugs :)
Date: 10/12/2019 12:25:00 PM
WOW! This is so sad but elegantly told..a touching story that easily transcends to humans in your gifted words. Excellent, as always.
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Date: 10/12/2019 1:33:00 PM
Thank you Vijay. It tugs at my heartstrings to see him alone ... hugs
Date: 10/12/2019 10:32:00 AM
Wow! I adore this sad but beautiful piece. I have tears in my eyes :-) x
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Date: 10/12/2019 11:47:00 AM
Thank you...i feel bad for him when i see him swimming alone, it is so sad....hugs
Date: 10/12/2019 9:36:00 AM
This brought a lump to my throat! I could feel his loneliness through your words. Wonderfully penned and expressive.
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Date: 10/12/2019 9:39:00 AM
Thank you so much Jeanne...it is sad to see, they say swans mate for life, we don't know what happened to his mate but for many years they came to a pond near my job and we all loved to watch them, one year he showed up alone and still swims in the same area, alone, but you can feel his sadness through his movements... hugs

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