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Wish You Were Here

Wish You Were Here The hay bales golden, crimsons and ochre sere leaves fallen-- the caw of the Jackdaw There was no Nightmare until after the fall, painted and swooned like a Fuseli the clouds float in staccato and layered rich tones: vibrato from sparrows joins the chorus the suffering alluring woman frail calling on Nature, who chides the mawkish yet still holds in her in Her own way, as she ambles and thinks of loves’ long ago sadness your becoming frailty; weakness a handmaiden, its alluring on you and there is a mourning call from the maw of the jackdaw and the skies go crimson, deep ambers until a now purplish blue and the clouds become negatives as rotation continue-- I see the first star appear and think of all the females who thought love’s true “Boot in the face, the brute. brute heart of a brute like you” said Plath Tolstoy’s males prevail, the amative women frail, and frailty is true The tender heart a pulpy thing is simply the mind at war And Nature now turned to dusky twilight transforms her as before

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Date: 6/18/2017 10:31:00 AM
A very beautiful written poem, it was written so nicely and i realy enjoyed reading, I ll also find time to read your other poems also , however I m new on this site and would really appreciate if you could find time to read my poems and give your honest reviews about them, if you ve poems of similar category do let me know,I ll read them
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Date: 2/16/2016 5:17:00 PM
Toni this is amazing!, it has moved me so! much, I ABSOLUTELY LOVE!!!!! IT.It so exquisitely! expresses many deep memories, feelings and emotions felt at that moment in time,and now. Kim
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Date: 2/16/2016 11:19:00 PM
Kim, Did you see that i did the acrostic at the end of the poem. Look at each letter of the last word--thus the title wish you were here It was my first acrostic so it was a challenge and fun to channel that emotion that came to fit into some logical scheme and have some meaning. Thanks!
Date: 2/16/2016 2:49:00 PM
- Really well written - Beautiful, Toni - # 7 - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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