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WINTER ARCHITECTURES Clouds convulse, cold feathers fall: dressing green globes with white gowns, frosting brown houses like cakes-- snow architectures. ___________________________________ 2:42 pm, November 10, 2015

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/18/2015 9:14:00 AM

Winters come and winters go but this work will stand forever!!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 11/18/2015 2:49:00 AM

What a beautiful winter Dodoitsu! The imagery is outstanding! Congratualtions, my dear Olive on your wonderful win! Warmest regards. Pandita

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 11/17/2015 6:42:00 AM

olive, i totally agree with what heather has said below, this is stunning and lovely! wonderful use of alliteration and imagery - you are a strong imagistic writer - congrats on your well deserved win! :)

Heather Ober

Date: 11/14/2015 11:35:00 AM

Olive, this is just beautiful. The alliteration flows so naturally, and your imagery pops right off the page! I love the idea of snow falling like feathers, and those frosted brown "cake" houses. That last line is the perfect ending! Big congrats on your 1st place win in my contest :)

Skat A

Date: 11/14/2015 7:47:00 AM

Olive, Congratulations on your "Winter Dodoitsu Win." Luv SKAT

Michael Tor

Date: 11/13/2015 11:34:00 PM

Nice win Olive congratulations!!

David Mohn

Date: 11/13/2015 10:29:00 PM

Terrific Olive...big congrats on this beauty

Kim Merryman

Date: 11/13/2015 8:13:00 PM

I love the unique imagery in this, Olive! Congrats on your well deserved 1st place win! Love, Kim

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/13/2015 3:02:00 PM

Love the cake/icing...congrats! BG

Jan Allison

Date: 11/13/2015 2:19:00 PM

Very beautiful take on winter Olive many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/19/2015 2:40:00 AM

thanks much Jan, pleased to read you stopping by and leaving some comment.. =`)

Paul Callus

Date: 11/12/2015 4:29:00 PM

Love your take on this winter theme, Olive_eloi! very creative 'architecture', especially the snow-covered houses which you liken to icing-sugared cakes. hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:20:00 PM

Paul, weeeeee I really just had to write this down and that line is my fave too, you know I love sweets and I ate a cake that day and made me realize and like it to the brown houses.. =`) with the architectures, spring out from my head... =`)~Olive Eloisa thanks much!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/15/2015 1:28:00 PM

Congratulations Olive_eloi!!! This poem was a winner from the start:) Well done! Hugs // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/11/2015 12:45:00 PM

You made me miss the snow as it Falls. Love the image of snow building this white dream. This is just a lovely write!

Edlynn Nau
Date: 11/16/2015 9:21:00 PM

Congratulation on your prize for this write!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:17:00 PM

Thanks much Edlynn.. pleased to read your comment.. =`)

James Fraser

Date: 11/11/2015 11:59:00 AM

A wintry scene captured beautifully with a brush of delicacy that's quaint and delightful. Nice one little one // hugs // James xxxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:16:00 PM

huge one, thanks always for the generous comment.. =`)~Olive Eloisa =`)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 11/11/2015 2:30:00 AM

Excellent. Beautifully said. Enjoyed. Tks

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:15:00 PM

thanks much ..=`)

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 11/11/2015 1:24:00 AM

Wow! What a beautiful and wonderful write my friend Olive. Your write depicts imagery that brought your write to life in the sense of this reader. Excellent..........A.M.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:14:00 PM

thanks much Afolabi, i love pictures.. =`)~Olive Eloisa =`)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/10/2015 9:45:00 PM

Beautiful!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 3:50:00 AM

thanks much Arthur.. =`)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/10/2015 5:43:00 PM

oh I just noticed it's dodoitsu. Isn't that four lines instead of five?? You might want to check it fast!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/10/2015 6:09:00 PM

Andie, thanks much =`) I did this poem so fast that I wasn't able to read the form correctly... thank you and I did correct. I hope its ok.. =`) weeee!!! ma mistake!!! :D! but had fun writing this.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/10/2015 5:42:00 PM

so cute, that last part especially, the imagery is of gingerbread houses!!!

Kp Nunez

Date: 11/10/2015 11:41:00 AM

Very charming Olive! I like the imagery you have created in my mind...and the alliteration in each line...Lovely sound...all the best! hugs!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 8:05:00 PM

Kim thank you so much for this wonderful generous comment.. =`) i love alliterations as poetical device.. =`)

Emile Pinet

Date: 11/10/2015 8:41:00 AM

A magical land of feathers and down takes shape in the reader's mind, and draws a smile. Emile.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/11/2015 8:32:00 PM

I always enjoy creating imagery in my poems Emile.. =`) Words in poetry for me should appeal to all senses..=`)

Mark Woods

Date: 11/10/2015 2:40:00 AM

Exquisite imagery and love the comparison of snowflakes to feathers. It takes me back to our last snow fall and even though I am not a big fan of snow (due to the hardship it cause farm animals) I must admit it creates some divine beauty. A very enjoyable poem.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/10/2015 9:06:00 PM

Thanks much Mark.. :) I never experienced winter yet and I agree to what you said regarding the animals.. =