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Winds Wept Leaves

windswept leaves fall on pavement; dry and cold

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Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 6/30/2011 8:06:00 AM

I saw this one won. The nickname shall be: "THIS WON ONE" or do you like "THIS ONE WON"---I dig your play on words! This is right up my alley!

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 6/28/2011 7:02:00 PM

my husband read it and said you are very clever.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 6/28/2011 7:01:00 PM

it is hard to make my mind read the poem correctly....does the first line need to be corrected? I like the title better!

Dalila Agtani

Date: 6/27/2011 9:34:00 PM

Hi Nikko What's behind this poem? I can see a woman graying and old? Tell me if I'm wrong! Thanks for sharing. Kumosta kayo diyan sa Pinas. Dalila Dalila

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/27/2011 10:49:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in ^RICK's "One Haiku" contest Nikko. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/26/2011 1:20:00 PM

So deserving of a first-place win, Nikko. Especially like the "Winds Wept" in the title and the "windswept" in the poem. You go girl! Love, Carolyn

Jack Horne

Date: 6/26/2011 10:18:00 AM

Many congrats on both your wins, Nikko : )

Kash Poet

Date: 6/26/2011 8:44:00 AM

Now you write a Senryu.......

Teresita Cailo

Date: 6/26/2011 3:20:00 AM

Congratulations to you, my fellow pinoy for placing first in Rick's contest. Well deserved win, Nikko :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/25/2011 4:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your great win..Must be getting colder where you live..It was 111 degrees in the town that I went to this afternoon..Very hot..At this place no shade, lots of concrete and asphalt though..I am going to do a blog in a little while explaing what is going on in my little corner of the world..Thanks for asking..Sara

Gautami Phookan

Date: 6/25/2011 1:31:00 PM

A big Congrats to you nikko for another first place win,,awesome haiku!!! love, gautami

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 6/25/2011 1:01:00 PM

This was a terrific haiku nikko.Congrats to you and thanks for my congrats on HM ~LOTS OF LUV~Teresa

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/25/2011 12:43:00 PM

Congratulations Missy :) I am so happy for you with this one *mwahugs*

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/25/2011 9:41:00 AM

I do like this one, Nikko, can see the leaves cold and dray on the pavement! Alles Gute! And many hugs!...Gert:)

Daver Austin

Date: 6/25/2011 9:36:00 AM

Karen relates you won a contest. Congrats. A very autumn write. I can hear the wind moan. Love, daver

Date: 6/25/2011 8:15:00 AM

Congratulations on placing first in the contest! Way to go. I really liked this the first time I read it and am not surprised by your success. Hope it continues. Thank you for your soup mail--I have responded. Keep up the good writing. I appreciate your ongoing encouragement. Karen

Kash Poet

Date: 6/25/2011 6:14:00 AM

This is BRILLIANT Nikko!Just excellent Haiku.Congrats on your win.

Shannon Deane

Date: 6/25/2011 5:36:00 AM

Congrats on winning first in the haiku contest...luv Shannon

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/25/2011 4:23:00 AM

congrats on your 1st place win in the contest, I love the wordplay you used in this one :-)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/24/2011 10:11:00 PM

on a topper's roll, nikks.. love this! whoopie congrats to you!! :) huggs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2011 8:54:00 PM

oh, my gosh, i just now noticed the metaphorical title you gave it. how you separated windswept into winds wept. I actually was making myself SEE it as Windswept. I think you should somehow fit that same showing of the title into the haiku itself if you ever try to publish this because haiku don't have titles and how, otherwise, could you show off that great trick of winds wept?

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 6/24/2011 11:25:00 PM

I am so happy you got my metaphor here, Andrea :D-- I put the spacing in the title to sort of leave a clue for it, since I wasn't sure whether it would be obvious...I wanted it to be read either way :D so you first read it as "winds wept"? thanks again sweetie :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2011 8:52:00 PM

WOW, nikko. Way to go. It's definitely a "haiku moment' . I love that line for the leaves: dry and cold! congrats on your NUMBER ONE!! Luv, Andrea

Elaine George

Date: 6/24/2011 7:06:00 PM

I knew this was a # one winner, Nikko. Many congrats. Lainie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/24/2011 6:35:00 PM

oh so lovely ...congrats on being number one in the contest Nikko sweet friend.. an awesome picture in words painted with your pen luv..enjoy top billing luv..

Date: 6/24/2011 5:22:00 PM

Good use of imagery for a creative view. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed it. Karen