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Wilting Beneath Withered Wishes

Drained and dried by life then left to die She lived to love; but oft was left to cry Counseled to carry on she continues Shriveling as to She'ol her heart schuss Holding on to hopes a hazard in her eyes Immature and imbecilic it implies Weary from wishing an end to her woe she shelters her shredded spirit in shadow Without febrility from festering passions to foil unavowed feelings wilt under burnt umber soil As expectation of love's exalted expressions fades desires deaden; in desperation she no longer wades 03/25/2018

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 3/4/2019 9:05:00 PM

excellently written-Without febrility from festering passions to foil /unavowed feelings wilt under burnt umber soil//// penned beautifully this poem is

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/19/2020 7:05:00 PM

Thank you very much Mahtab.

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2018 9:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Shadow of the Past, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`*

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:08:00 PM

Eve every single doggone comment I left yesterday is not there. I did see your comment and thank you so much ma'am!

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/3/2018 3:47:00 PM

Wonderful poem. Congrats on your win, Shadow.

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/3/2018 4:32:00 PM

Hello Line. Thanks for that! :)

Elaine George

Date: 4/3/2018 7:47:00 AM

A Great alliteration, Shadow. Many congrats on your win. Elaine

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/3/2018 9:21:00 AM

Thanks so very much Elaine.

Judith S

Date: 4/2/2018 8:00:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Shadow! I loved the flow of your poem. The alliteration and the great rhyming made it such a pleasure to read. Best, Judy

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/3/2018 9:14:00 AM

Hi Judith. Thank you ma'am!

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/2/2018 6:18:00 PM

Such beautiful use of alliteration in sad your poetic lines, Shadow. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes..

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/3/2018 9:14:00 AM

Good morning Susan :) Thanks so much

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2018 3:21:00 PM

- The winners are named and it was great to see your poem on the winning list - Congratulations, Søster :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/1/2018 4:44:00 PM

Thanks so much Søster! :*

Silent One

Date: 4/1/2018 2:57:00 PM

Great take on the contest and use of alliteration Shadow.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest...

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/1/2018 4:43:00 PM

Thank you very much S1. Every time I read it something just seemed off; so I'm very grateful to have placed at all.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/1/2018 1:20:00 AM

The alliteration in your title caught my eye, Shadow (I did not do that on purpose, eye shadow, heehee)... but I was pleasantly surprised with the tale you have weaved here plus I got to look up 2 new words in schuss & She'ol ... enjoyed your use of alliteration here-- you made it work well. It's a sad write, but nonetheless beautifully written. I also want to pass by here to say thank you, dear Shadow (I know, rhymes with "know") It has been umm around 5 months since I last got a comment contd

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:09:00 PM

Lolol I hope you have a counterbalance to all of that!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 4/5/2018 6:32:00 PM

That made me smile, "Eye Shadow" would be a cool name ;) I'm sorry if my reply is so late, oops. I'm glad that my comment was able to brighten your day :) And yes, busy but relatively good and stressful (haha, it wouldn't be as much fun without the stress, eyebag-inducing & hair whitening moments!)

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/1/2018 8:53:00 AM

LOL eye shadow! Might be my next name! Thank you Nikko. Your comment has brightened my dreary morning. I hope your busy months were good months dear Nikko :) Thanks so much.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 4/1/2018 1:24:00 AM

and I haven't logged in here for months, I forgot my pword. Then I got some notification of my poem being featured, so I passed by here I think last week or was it the other week? Hmmm, the angel strikes again ;) Thank you very much--sorry I just got to log in here now, been really swamped. I feel guilty though, I am too busy to be active. But my heartfelt thank you! Sending love and blessings your way! Happy Easter to you!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/26/2018 8:50:00 AM

Beautiful write Shadow. Good luck. Tom

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/26/2018 2:53:00 PM

Hi Tom :) thanks so much.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/25/2018 11:32:00 PM

Excellent like always sweet lady Hugs Eve PS .. I like the other avatar it is you :)

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/26/2018 2:52:00 PM

Thank you Eve. I've never written a poem focused solely on alliterations.