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Weighed Down

I let the breeze whisper to me, I want to smile, but I can’t because tears want to flow, but can’t Just have this feeling that somewhere, somehow, something has died… or at the very least, is withering and I don’t know whether I can be there on time to stop it from dying? Of whether I can resuscitate it back to life… might be too late though, because damage has been done Oxygen has already been lost sad, really so the weight is there and I can’t shrug it off. The tears still don’t want to fall. Such defiance. So I just close my eyes. Maybe, tomorrow, the sun will shine again. 05032011745p750

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/27/2011 7:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Emote" contest Nikko. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson

Date: 6/22/2011 4:22:00 PM

Sadness or melancholy described to perfection Nikko. ove, Joyce

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/22/2011 4:05:00 PM

Loved this poem the first time I read it, Nikko, and am so happy to see it in the winners' circle. Congratulations, dear! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/22/2011 3:52:00 PM

Congrats Nikko sweet friend on your HM in the Emote contest with this expressive entry luv..enjoy special honor..hope all is well with u luv... yahoo me..

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/22/2011 3:08:00 PM

An excellent write so many emotions evoked for me there was not a focus on a single one and my sweet little monkey did not label?? Congrad's on your win & I HOPE this was an old memory!!! Light & Love

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 6/20/2011 7:22:00 PM

I do work with children and the elderly in my community. We are trying to emphasize the importance of the art of writing to stimulate interest. We believe if more people connected to the inner voice in their head, the more people who practiced this art there would be, the more READERS we would have. It's a win/win situation. We have been on a small but humble "movement" locally to spread the word of the power of writing! I will try some things with the shape form to see what happens!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/29/2011 1:23:00 PM

a magnificent adventure into your world of tears and sun.. sweet friend Nikko.. an intense and dramatic flare for the expressive lines so delicately written.. wow..is all I can say.. so glad the sun is shining for u now and all is good luv..splashes from oceanside ..beach..oh ..hot..oh luv....

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/28/2011 8:33:00 AM

I did not catch Drakes show and maybe it would be nice if they posted who would be on. Maybe they did and I missed it. I hope all is well with you. Your poem shows sadness, like the weight is all on your shoulders. I hope this is not the case Nikko. Thank you for your wishes and your note. SO nice of you. Have a lovely weekend. love phyl

Anne Rutherford

Date: 5/27/2011 4:03:00 PM

Nikko My payers are going to have you in them tonight ,you have been so wonderful reading my work and here I have missed you needing a uplifting pat on the back . Hope all is well my friend. Anne

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2011 8:43:00 PM

Hi, Nikko, thanks for your much appreciated comments today. Always sunshine to see your replies! Hope you are keeping up with things My computer was going really slow here and then I found out it was my son in law's router going bad. He disconnected it for me and now I can function here normally again. WHEW!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2011 8:43:00 PM

hey, I am reading what Carrie said to you here. Did you have a chance to be on that radio show, Nikko??

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/26/2011 2:58:00 PM

oh..ps! Did I miss hearing you on Drake's radio broadcast?! Oh darn if you read one of your poems, I would be so upset to have missed it!!! I hope someday you will do that! I'm such a coward...I would probably freeze up and make an idiot of myself if I were to try...how about I'll hire you, if I ever decide to have one of mine read..I'll give you the rights to read my poetry..(ha ha...as if it were worthy for the air waves...they would probably cancel his show..and boot him off the air!!LOL!!

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/26/2011 2:53:00 PM

I pray, dear Nikko...the weight of this poem, is only wonderful poetry, and complete fiction. I would be so sad to know it is based on how you might be feeling....never would I wish you to have tears...ever/never. You write so convincingly that I would want to be your shoulder....and always your friend. :) You bring joy, even on a sad day! You are such a good writer!

Olajide Adelana

Date: 5/26/2011 11:19:00 AM

soupmail

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/26/2011 8:23:00 AM

Hi, Nikko... how are you? and whats going on with the write.... I'm also glad you are okay... and still here on the soup... and looky down there.... a brave skat she is... now let me see what my sis is up to... catch soon.. or should i say sooner than sooooon... laterzzzz.,..p.d..

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 5/26/2011 8:34:00 AM

lol... and by the way don't even ask how i convinced my sis .. to come back... lol... you know the answer...ditto... p.d.

Skat A

Date: 5/26/2011 7:35:00 AM

I am glad U R doing good. And what a wowser poem to follow. Deep & moving lost image at the most~luv*SKAT

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/24/2011 5:07:00 AM

Nikko-Great to hear you are doing well...from the heart great things can pour...like this sweet poem! Re: your comments on 60's net. I had to rewrite it and had to research again for new material...added the diet rite question and threw in some more exhilaration lines. How nice of u to notice....Praying for the 100's dead from the Missouri tornadoes in the night. Tragic. Wish I could go and provide medical help..unfortunately, have to report to work Wed and Thurs. Take Care. Gwendolen

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:55:00 AM

I am praying with you, Gwendolen-- and as for your entry to Nette's contest-- I knew it ;) I loved your entry so much, I think it is really unique :D! you take care as well :D

De R

Date: 5/24/2011 3:40:00 AM

You say you're doing good...but where did this poem come from then? You make me worry...Anyway, beautiful poem, dearie:) Big hugs to make you smile ^_^

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:53:00 AM

oh I forgot you like this smile ^_^ so here it is ^_^ see me smiling...

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:52:00 AM

big hugs right back to you dearie :) please don't worry about me, although thank you so much for your concern Emilia :D I'm doing good thank you :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/24/2011 12:12:00 AM

Nikko, I was wondering if this were about your personal life. I know not everything is rainbows. I sure felt this way for a while. It's a horrible feeling and you really capture it. Nikko, thanks for all my poems you read today. I am getting off this wagon. Kept getting thrown off and getting back on.I can't take any more. ahha. see ya later, gator. luv, Andrea

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:51:00 AM

Definitely right sweetie not everything is rainbows indeed -- I am glad your bout with this is over now :) here's to more sunny days :D

Kash Poet

Date: 5/23/2011 7:30:00 PM

The SUN is shinning again.Cheer up!!Enjoyed your poem ,Nikko.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:45:00 AM

Hi Kashinath :) yup eventually the sun DOES shine :) thanks for dropping by :D

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/23/2011 3:38:00 PM

Dear Nikko, I agree with Wilma, when you write these sad verses (with hope at the end), there are so many people who can relate to the message. I'm glad you're doing well, dear. Keep enjoying life! Love, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/26/2011 5:45:00 AM

thank you Carolyn-- hmmm I think that's me , ever the optimist? :D

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/23/2011 11:14:00 AM

Hey there Missy, I love it when you write these emotive ones that I can identify with.. A sad write, I know but I also know the strength that lies behind it ;) sweet dreams and *mwahugs* to you!! (*-*)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/23/2011 11:22:00 AM

oh shucks! I am still here? eek! ok ok I am really going...hmm how I hope you can't relate to it too much though? is that weird of me to think that? thank you for the thoughts you give here missy g(high ant.) me being cryptic. heehee I won't even type it in for now...:D

Jack Horne

Date: 5/23/2011 11:02:00 AM

A beautiful but sad piece, Nikko. I hope all your tomorrows are sunny : )

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/23/2011 11:19:00 AM

and I hope that yours are sunny as well, Jack ^_^ thank you again for the laughs :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/23/2011 10:38:00 AM

oh nikks.. i hope this isn't what you are feeling of late... nonetheless, a seamless piece that totally embraces a deep mood! :) hugggs!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/23/2011 11:18:00 AM

Hi nette-- just for that day in particular I guess? those days come and go, thank you :) hugs

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/23/2011 10:26:00 AM

It has been 7 days since your last posting, NIKKO. I pray u are doing well and that u aren't struggling with anything...soup mail me if u need a specific prayer and confidentially I will lift u up...Wouldn't it be so cool to have a Skype poetry class with Nette? I was just thinking of that after I asked her to teach me how to write better.. Whatcha think? Do u guys skype? We could have filipino coffee skype! ha ha. Hugs to you and your family too.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 5/23/2011 11:17:00 AM

Thank you so much for the prayers, Gwendolen (was able to send you soupmail, sorry my connection sucks) hugs to you & you family as well ^_^