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Wabi-sabi

“Your daughter stares,” my mother whispered; as she lay naked on the bed. A smile of pleasure crossed her face while the nurse gently caressed her frail body with a soft, warm sponge. “Don’t you turn away,” sensing my discomfort. I look at the scars of birth, of falls from trees of old repairs, and new. “She is young,” I say “Scared” “Poppycock; see, she’s smiling at me,” my mother whispered; “she looks in a mirror.”

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Date: 1/6/2024 7:49:00 PM
I truly love the sparse, impactful power of this Wabi-Sabi. It has a narrative base that pulls the reader into the imperfect perfection of a girl hospitalized, scarred yet enduring. Congratulations! Brian
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Terry Miller
Date: 1/10/2024 5:41:00 AM
Thank you so very much Brian
Date: 1/5/2024 1:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Terry Miller
Date: 1/10/2024 5:41:00 AM
Thank you so much
Date: 1/5/2024 7:25:00 AM
what an original, thoughtful take on the contest theme - i enjoyed reading it - congrats on your win!
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Terry Miller
Date: 1/5/2024 9:33:00 AM
Thank you Charlotte
Date: 1/5/2024 2:43:00 AM
This is so touching and very well written for this theme. I felt the depth of your poignant and moving poem. Especially as you mentioned about scars from falls etc shows experiences of life… imperfect perfection.. wabi sabi. Well depicted. Congratulations on your win
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Terry Miller
Date: 1/5/2024 9:33:00 AM
Thank you so very much I always appreciate your comments

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