Vampire

Visiting late at night Vladimir Dracula Ventures into the dark Vault where his victim sleeps. Violins softly play. Veneered fangs bite on a Vein in the maiden’s neck. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Pleiades V Poetry Contest Sponsor: Kim Merryman Placed 1st © 5th May 2021

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Jack Horne

Date: 6/4/2021 1:43:00 PM

ha ha, really love this

Paul Callus
Date: 6/18/2021 2:51:00 PM

Thank you, Jack; glad you enjoyed :) Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/17/2021 9:27:00 AM

Ooh, spooky, Paul. Love the clever and unique topic you chose. It's one that will appeal to many. Hope you are well and enjoying a nice spring! Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 10:16:00 AM

Thank you dear Carolyn. The weather here is lovely; the temperature is now around 31C. The swimming season has started, but the sea water is still rather cool. Probably I'll start swimming in June. Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 5/16/2021 7:55:00 PM

Paul, The sustained note in violin, bright veneer fanged Vladimir. A little jealous at the Vampire's longevity. -Richard

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 10:00:00 AM

Thank you for your feedback, Richard. I have thought about longevity, but I think blood and cholesterol do not see eye to eye. Regards // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/16/2021 11:21:00 AM

What a great "V" you did write. I can see it all happening. Have a blessed day writing away.....................

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:48:00 AM

Thank you, Paula. Best regards and blessings // paul

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/14/2021 1:14:00 PM

lol, its a bloody one but a good one Paul, good luck in the contest, :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:46:00 AM

Thank you, Vienna. Your good luck wishes appear to have left their mark :) Warm regards /x/ paul

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/12/2021 6:31:00 PM

Hello Paul ... enough to keep me looking over my shoulder. I wonder if the idea arose from vampire bats a real specie - thank you Paul - Lindsay

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2021 12:16:00 PM

Thank you, Lindsay. You'd do well to watch out for vampire bats...they drink the blood of both animals and people!! ~ Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/9/2021 6:54:00 PM

Great! Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2021 12:13:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/9/2021 4:15:00 PM

Yessss. GREAT vampire poem. Congrats

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2021 12:08:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. Best regards, my friend. // paul

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/9/2021 8:12:00 AM

Great job on describing a vampire fluidly. I like "violins softly play" --- it adds drama. Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/13/2021 12:07:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely feedback and congrats, Juliet. ~ Regards // paul

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 5/9/2021 5:46:00 AM

This is so well done Paul... Congrats on your win... God bless... ~ Ani

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2021 8:21:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed it, Anitha....thank you. Blessings // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 5/9/2021 4:24:00 AM

Love it, Paul, I missed this contest. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2021 8:20:00 AM

Thank you Eve. I like these Pleiades contests, but like you I've missed a couple of them. Regards & Hugs // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/8/2021 11:21:00 PM

Excellent 'Vee's' Paul great poem, love it and congratulations.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 3:05:00 AM

Thank you, my friend. Pleased you found this one to your liking. Best regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 5/8/2021 4:17:00 PM

Very nicely done Paul, Congrats on your win..

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 3:01:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph. You did very well yourself! Regards // paul

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/8/2021 12:21:00 PM

A big CONGRATS on your win, Pau! Janice

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 2:43:00 AM

Thanks a lot Janice. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/8/2021 11:17:00 AM

- Congratulations on your scary first place in the contest Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 2:42:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by with congratulations, Anne-Lise...at least I did not scare you away :) Hugs // paul

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 5/8/2021 8:51:00 AM

congrats on your top win! I chose incidentally the same topic!!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 2:39:00 AM

Thank you, Krish. Pleased that both our "vampires" made it to the winners' list :) Regards // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 5/8/2021 8:22:00 AM

Paul, I've always had a fascination with vampires and Dracula in particular. You set the scene right out of the movie! Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings, Kim M

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2021 2:37:00 AM

Thank you for the high placement, Kim. Your Pleiades contests have been quite inspiring. Sending Mother's Day wishes your way :) Blessings // paul

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/6/2021 6:48:00 PM

"Veneered fangs, bite on a vein, in the maiden’s neck" Simply because, it looks so inviting. :) You have a golden pen my sweet friend. You are able to write about anything. Those beautiful tender moments, are my favorite. :) Hugs, Brandy

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2021 6:51:00 AM

Thank you, Brandy...you are too kind :) Incidentally "those beautiful tender moments" can easily be attributed to your poetry :) Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 5/6/2021 10:57:00 AM

Excellent use of the letter "V" Paul. Left the reader with a slight metallic taste in the mouth. )0ohHoo! God Bless and good luck in the contest. I think it's a winner. JB

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 12:24:00 PM

Thank you, Judy, for reading, liking and commenting. Your faith in it is appreciated. Blessings // paul

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/5/2021 2:03:00 PM

Wow! Paul, this is brilliant! What a great use of the letter V ! I am sure this is a top winner. BW ~ Mala

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 12:16:00 PM

So pleased you found it to your liking, Mala...thank you! Your 'vase', unless dropped, will serve you well in the contest :) Best regards // paul

Ken Rone

Date: 5/5/2021 12:16:00 PM

Good luck in the contest Paul. I liked this one. "the maiden "neck" OMG !

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 11:55:00 AM

Thank you, Ken. Incidentally both of us used 'maiden' in our entries! ~ Regards // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/5/2021 8:31:00 AM

Bravo, Paul ~ love this gem

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 11:43:00 AM

Thank you Line. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/5/2021 8:20:00 AM

My vision of a vampire is Grandpa on the old Tv show, The Munsters. LOL A most descriptive write Paul. Hoping all is well with you.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 11:39:00 AM

Thank you for a pleasant visit, Danny :) Glad you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/5/2021 8:00:00 AM

You brought back memories of Christopher Lee Paul, well composed using the letter V, Hope you're well and good luck. Tom

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 11:31:00 AM

Thank you, Tom. Christopher Lee was the ideal person to play the part of Dracula; no wonder he played that part successfully in about ten such films. Best regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/5/2021 6:55:00 AM

Your "V" words describe the vampire perfectly Paul. All the best.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2021 11:16:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Best regards // paul